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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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It's hard when a girl has her first period. I had boys so it wasn't the same, but many of my friends had daughters. I enjoyed the metaphor and thank you for sharing this presentation with us.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
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I'm wondering if the "first moon" refers to the first menstrual period? I would think the girl would suddenly see "blood" in everything even in the sunset. Ah, the pain of growing up!

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
    Yes, first moon is her first period. To me first moon sounds better. Should I add a note in my a.n.?

    Native American women call their periods moons. I love that.

    I had a bad experience with mine and my dad...not a good memory.

    Thank you very much, big sis.

    Love,

    Marival
reply by lyenochka on 17-Apr-2024
    Sorry! That's when you needed your mom. I hope your sister helped you.
    I didn't learn until as afterwards and my mom explained it all in medical terms. 😂
Comment from kahpot
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A very thought provoking read, the image your words paint of a girl becoming a woman are so very delicate and very well describe, very well written and presented****kahpot

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much, kym. Have a great night.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
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oooh interesting and thought-provoking comparison!
smooth flow... perfect pic and colours!
excellent haiku!

thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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 Comment Written 16-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much, Shelley. Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review.

    Gypsy
Comment from RJ Heritage
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Seems to be a coming of age of a young girl into womanhood.
Expressed very well by colors and words.
Thank for sharing your work.
Have a great night.
RJ

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    thank you very much, RJ (*-*)

    gypsy hugs
Comment from Janet Foor
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Oh my! This raises the bar on JSF poetry. The powerful imagery that takes the reader beyond the words on the page to memories and realizations of the past.

I am in awe of the poets talent to touch the reader on many levels.
Excellent artwork and presentation. The notes were very helpful as well.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
    thank you very much, Janet. I really appreciate your exceptional review and kind words. (*-*)

    gypsy hugs