Sestina: Reflections on Healing
beauty, love, courage, healing, joy, soul.15 total reviews
Comment from Mark Jackson
I can see that would have been a challenge to write. Not so much to read but it was longer than most poems I commit to read that is not to put it down. I did think of a tincture that can deliver total joy. Heroin. Not from experience and not recommended; it can be, as the old joke goes, a bit moreish. So is poetry and I hope you continue writing.
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I can see that would have been a challenge to write. Not so much to read but it was longer than most poems I commit to read that is not to put it down. I did think of a tincture that can deliver total joy. Heroin. Not from experience and not recommended; it can be, as the old joke goes, a bit moreish. So is poetry and I hope you continue writing.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I think you've done well here to capture the very essence of the work you do in all its complexities. I like the way you consider the holistic approach and help the soul recover from that loss of joy that occurs when things are off kilter. The body can never be viewed in isolation to our emotional and spiritual sides. And your fine verse expands on this with love and dedication. Well done! Debbie
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I think you've done well here to capture the very essence of the work you do in all its complexities. I like the way you consider the holistic approach and help the soul recover from that loss of joy that occurs when things are off kilter. The body can never be viewed in isolation to our emotional and spiritual sides. And your fine verse expands on this with love and dedication. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
Comment from Ulla
I think it does express what you do and how you feel about it. Now, I am no poetry writer, but I really liked.what I read. I can imagine the difficulty writing this, Ulla xcx
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I think it does express what you do and how you feel about it. Now, I am no poetry writer, but I really liked.what I read. I can imagine the difficulty writing this, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
Comment from jaded831
Your poem was intense, it truly explains what love can do. Doctors may help healing, but true healing, I believe comes from in our own bodies, and sanctioned by God. Your poem brought this out brilliantly.
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Your poem was intense, it truly explains what love can do. Doctors may help healing, but true healing, I believe comes from in our own bodies, and sanctioned by God. Your poem brought this out brilliantly.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2024
Comment from GoWiSt
"I offer to my friends my gift of healing," Wow, do you have such miraculous powers?
"We conquer inner fears with faith and courage." Yes, yes, indeed--hear, hear!
"And medicine is no substitute for love." Indeed, it is not.
Interesting inspirational poem.
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"I offer to my friends my gift of healing," Wow, do you have such miraculous powers?
"We conquer inner fears with faith and courage." Yes, yes, indeed--hear, hear!
"And medicine is no substitute for love." Indeed, it is not.
Interesting inspirational poem.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
Comment from Douglas Goff
I personally think you nailed it! The theme of positive healing energy shines right through this piece.
What fine title to have than Healer? A life of service to others is honorable.
Thank you for sharing.
D
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I personally think you nailed it! The theme of positive healing energy shines right through this piece.
What fine title to have than Healer? A life of service to others is honorable.
Thank you for sharing.
D
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this. I think it would look awesome in classrooms where students may have physical challenges or disabilities.
Favorite lines include: In relegating fear and choosing courage
and also:
We offer service, healing and good courage
There were only a couple of suggestions I have:
For God is love, and He the fount of healing.
I think we are missing a verb here.
Maybe you meant:
For God is love, and He's the fount of healing.
The other thing I was thinking was the last line has an inversion, where the adjective is first before the actual subject. But of course you want to keep the iambic pentameter. I think the last line is not quite iambic. You might try:
The soul is then entire.
I very much like the last sentence, even though it is not iambic. It is another inversion, but you are definitely trying to keep the word "beauty" there. Since it is not a contest entry, you could do what I do sometimes and if asked what the form is, you could say "loose iambic pentameter." That gives you a little leeway.
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I liked reading this. I think it would look awesome in classrooms where students may have physical challenges or disabilities.
Favorite lines include: In relegating fear and choosing courage
and also:
We offer service, healing and good courage
There were only a couple of suggestions I have:
For God is love, and He the fount of healing.
I think we are missing a verb here.
Maybe you meant:
For God is love, and He's the fount of healing.
The other thing I was thinking was the last line has an inversion, where the adjective is first before the actual subject. But of course you want to keep the iambic pentameter. I think the last line is not quite iambic. You might try:
The soul is then entire.
I very much like the last sentence, even though it is not iambic. It is another inversion, but you are definitely trying to keep the word "beauty" there. Since it is not a contest entry, you could do what I do sometimes and if asked what the form is, you could say "loose iambic pentameter." That gives you a little leeway.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
Comment from Lisasview
Sorry, but I am feeling confused... So you say that your poem is written in Iambic Pentameter...but I must say that it is not.
It is more like a poem with no rhyme.
I can tell when reading it that it comes from a healing place in you and that is great.
And in your authors notes I do not know what this line means?
but it I am relieved
Lisasview
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Sorry, but I am feeling confused... So you say that your poem is written in Iambic Pentameter...but I must say that it is not.
It is more like a poem with no rhyme.
I can tell when reading it that it comes from a healing place in you and that is great.
And in your authors notes I do not know what this line means?
but it I am relieved
Lisasview
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Thanks for this thoughtful reply. As you may know, iambic pentameter only requires the flow of the language to contain five stresses, as for example in Shakespeare's sonnets:
"Let me nót to the márriage of true mínds admít impédiment
Lóve is not lóve that álters when it álteration fínds"
It is not a requirement for the sestina to rhyme, but simply to adhere to the discipline of the form.
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Okay, but I disagree..
But that is okay
Comment from Brenda Strauser
This is a beautiful poem. Well written. I like where you said doctors often miss the spirits need for beauty. The poem expresses your love for healing very well. Great job
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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This is a beautiful poem. Well written. I like where you said doctors often miss the spirits need for beauty. The poem expresses your love for healing very well. Great job
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for your generous response.
Comment from Janet Foor
Thank you for sharing your joy of healing which is evident by your sestina.
It must bring you great joy being the conduit for others to find that courage for healing through gladness, laughter, beauty and joy through Him.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Thank you for sharing your joy of healing which is evident by your sestina.
It must bring you great joy being the conduit for others to find that courage for healing through gladness, laughter, beauty and joy through Him.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind words, dear Janet
