Panpipes
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting chapter. Ayesha discovers Bapit is a bit of a chick magnet, which she more or less ignores. She informally talks to Chanarong about changing his business to an elephant rescue. He seems to be considering it.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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This is an interesting chapter. Ayesha discovers Bapit is a bit of a chick magnet, which she more or less ignores. She informally talks to Chanarong about changing his business to an elephant rescue. He seems to be considering it.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Carol. I appreciate your review and comments. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Cindy Warren
I think Chanarong is open to the idea of opening a sanctuary. His associate may not be, but I have every confidence you'll want to give this a happy ending and Ayesha will find a way.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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I think Chanarong is open to the idea of opening a sanctuary. His associate may not be, but I have every confidence you'll want to give this a happy ending and Ayesha will find a way.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Cindy. I appreciate your review and comments. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Jacob1395
Another enjoyable chapter, Tony. I'm glad to see that Bapit is recovering well and that Ayesha is back in Thailand so that she can be near him, especially after what happened in the previous chapter. Another well written piece.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Another enjoyable chapter, Tony. I'm glad to see that Bapit is recovering well and that Ayesha is back in Thailand so that she can be near him, especially after what happened in the previous chapter. Another well written piece.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Jacob. I appreciate your review and comments. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
Another excellent chapter, Tony, featuring different characters and places with Ayesha being central to each one. I follows the preceding chapter well with Ayesha having dreamed about a snake.
Then she meets with Bapit and is disappointed to see a young girl with him. But then it is back to their own lives with discussion about his health and getting a new leg. Of course, Ayesha has to be careful not to reveal where it is coming from. The nurse didn't help with her "you-know-who" comment. Ayesha covered the tracks very well.
Then the conversation turns to the elephant reserve and what Ayesha would like to accomplish, even though the person running it now has big doubts because of the expense, and they aren't making much now, as it is. A very good conclusion that makes the reader wonder what is going to happen with Ayesha's money and if she will still be safe.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Another excellent chapter, Tony, featuring different characters and places with Ayesha being central to each one. I follows the preceding chapter well with Ayesha having dreamed about a snake.
Then she meets with Bapit and is disappointed to see a young girl with him. But then it is back to their own lives with discussion about his health and getting a new leg. Of course, Ayesha has to be careful not to reveal where it is coming from. The nurse didn't help with her "you-know-who" comment. Ayesha covered the tracks very well.
Then the conversation turns to the elephant reserve and what Ayesha would like to accomplish, even though the person running it now has big doubts because of the expense, and they aren't making much now, as it is. A very good conclusion that makes the reader wonder what is going to happen with Ayesha's money and if she will still be safe.
Very well done.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks for your perceptive review and summation, Pam. I'm most appreciative of the extra star.
All good wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Tony.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
Wonderful detail and description. Love the Thai superstitions. And Bapit may be a bit of a dark horse after all. He certainly attract the girls.
But now we get back to the main theme of creating an elephant sanctuary
That's quite a name, khan Runrat. I detect a devious partner who would like to get his hands on the lodge and get rid of Chanarong. There's something rotten in roots of Thailand, perhaps Runrot.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Hello Tony,
Wonderful detail and description. Love the Thai superstitions. And Bapit may be a bit of a dark horse after all. He certainly attract the girls.
But now we get back to the main theme of creating an elephant sanctuary
That's quite a name, khan Runrat. I detect a devious partner who would like to get his hands on the lodge and get rid of Chanarong. There's something rotten in roots of Thailand, perhaps Runrot.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank, Robert. There's quite a bit I need to draw together in the closing chapters but things are beginning to solidify in my mind. I appreciate your continued encouragement and stars. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
Ayesha seems to have returned suddenly back to Bapit and her crusade for the elephants. But back in my mind is all the struggling with Johnno and the henchmen who tried to kidnap her. So there is a sort of a dark cloud over all this still. The dialogue was lively, especially the sharp exchange between Aeysha and Runrat. Elements of jealousy came through as Ayesha visits Bapit and finds the flower girl there. Where does that leave the handsome lawyer? You are still juggling a few pins here. estory
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Ayesha seems to have returned suddenly back to Bapit and her crusade for the elephants. But back in my mind is all the struggling with Johnno and the henchmen who tried to kidnap her. So there is a sort of a dark cloud over all this still. The dialogue was lively, especially the sharp exchange between Aeysha and Runrat. Elements of jealousy came through as Ayesha visits Bapit and finds the flower girl there. Where does that leave the handsome lawyer? You are still juggling a few pins here. estory
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks for hanging in, estory. There's a fair bit to tie together in these final chapters and I hope I can manage it without being too contrived. A possible ending is beginning to present itself. As you suggest, there may need to be a bit of editing and cutting in the Sydney section.
Comment from Sanku
Ayesha wants n the place developed as an elephant sanctuary and she is willing to pay anything. She seems to have developed a possessive streak where Bapit is concerned . I wonder why the picture of Bruno's ring has not agitated her mind...
Loved reading this .
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Ayesha wants n the place developed as an elephant sanctuary and she is willing to pay anything. She seems to have developed a possessive streak where Bapit is concerned . I wonder why the picture of Bruno's ring has not agitated her mind...
Loved reading this .
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Sanku. I appreciate your comments. The question of Bruno's ring is likely to become more complicated soon. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I thought the name Runrot went well with his personality, Tony. Ayesha, like many of us, is not as confident in herself, re Bapit, as she tries to show. Another good read Tony, well written.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I thought the name Runrot went well with his personality, Tony. Ayesha, like many of us, is not as confident in herself, re Bapit, as she tries to show. Another good read Tony, well written.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Valda. I appreciate your review. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from royowen
Of course who wouldn't want a refuge and a safe place for elephants who are very intelligent and will respond to good treatment, I have been to places where animals are treated like chattels, and treated badly, it would be nice to places that are sanctuaries for them. Beautifully written Tony, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Of course who wouldn't want a refuge and a safe place for elephants who are very intelligent and will respond to good treatment, I have been to places where animals are treated like chattels, and treated badly, it would be nice to places that are sanctuaries for them. Beautifully written Tony, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Roy. I appreciate your review. I understand that there are now several elephant sanctuaries in Thailand. A step in the right direction. All good wishes, Tony.
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That?s great
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm so sorry - I've missed a bit because I see Ayesha is back in Thailand and making her presence felt. Firstly seeing Bapit, she's more than a little jealous when she sees him with the flower girl; then her determined suggestions about an elephant sanctuary in Sydney are not exactly dismissed. Your chapter flows with excellent pace and that special quality you have for dialogue and character-building. A most enjoyably read, as ever, with no errors noted. Thanks for sharing, Tony. Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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I'm so sorry - I've missed a bit because I see Ayesha is back in Thailand and making her presence felt. Firstly seeing Bapit, she's more than a little jealous when she sees him with the flower girl; then her determined suggestions about an elephant sanctuary in Sydney are not exactly dismissed. Your chapter flows with excellent pace and that special quality you have for dialogue and character-building. A most enjoyably read, as ever, with no errors noted. Thanks for sharing, Tony. Take care Debbie
Comment Written 15-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Debbie. I appreciate your review. Yes, the transition to Thailand took place in Chapter 23. All good wishes, Tony.
