Spring
How I feel in Spring5 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the welcoming of spring here in your Minute poem and I enjoyed your end rhymes too, some consistency in the metre would help this poem to flow better, welcome to Fanstory and good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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I enjoyed the welcoming of spring here in your Minute poem and I enjoyed your end rhymes too, some consistency in the metre would help this poem to flow better, welcome to Fanstory and good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is a well written minute poem. You followed through the seasons which allows the reader to follow along with your perfectly rhymed syllables. The image works perfectly to support your words.
Best wishes
Alex
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This is a well written minute poem. You followed through the seasons which allows the reader to follow along with your perfectly rhymed syllables. The image works perfectly to support your words.
Best wishes
Alex
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
Comment from jessizero
Congratulations on your first milestone post, and welcome to FanStory! I enjoyed your minute poem, though I'm not too familiar with this type of poetry. This poem about Spring is a great way to start things here. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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Congratulations on your first milestone post, and welcome to FanStory! I enjoyed your minute poem, though I'm not too familiar with this type of poetry. This poem about Spring is a great way to start things here. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
Comment from Michele Harber
Welcome to FanStory, and congratulations on your first post!
Minute Poems are among my favorite to write. I enjoyed that you wrote yours about different seasons. You did a good job of painting pictures specific to each of the seasons discussed.
My one issue is that "Summer is just around the corner" exceeds the 8-syllable limit by one. You can correct that easily by saying either "Summer's just around the corner" or "Summer is just 'round the corner."
Good luck in the contest.
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Welcome to FanStory, and congratulations on your first post!
Minute Poems are among my favorite to write. I enjoyed that you wrote yours about different seasons. You did a good job of painting pictures specific to each of the seasons discussed.
My one issue is that "Summer is just around the corner" exceeds the 8-syllable limit by one. You can correct that easily by saying either "Summer's just around the corner" or "Summer is just 'round the corner."
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
Comment from Teri7
Please check out the first line in second stanza:
Summer is just around the corner needs to be 8 syllables instead of 9. Please let me know when you have fixed that and I will review it! Blessings, Teri
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Please check out the first line in second stanza:
Summer is just around the corner needs to be 8 syllables instead of 9. Please let me know when you have fixed that and I will review it! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
