Eclipse
a 5-7-517 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You very accurately described the eclipse and used only a few syllables to do it. Congratulations! I'm impressed. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You very accurately described the eclipse and used only a few syllables to do it. Congratulations! I'm impressed. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Barbara.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Nice concise poem. have been doing a lot of chores today. I am pooped. My printer is once again misbehaving. Life is one exciting nail biting thing after another:-) Karen
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Nice concise poem. have been doing a lot of chores today. I am pooped. My printer is once again misbehaving. Life is one exciting nail biting thing after another:-) Karen
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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My printer stopped working, so I threw it in the dumpster.
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It is only a couple of months old. Karen
Comment from Dimzdale1
I actually didn't attend any viewing of the eclipse. There were so many people talking about it leading up to the event that for some reason instead of truly anticipating it, I was more like... ho hum. Thank you for giving me a glimpse of what I missed.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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I actually didn't attend any viewing of the eclipse. There were so many people talking about it leading up to the event that for some reason instead of truly anticipating it, I was more like... ho hum. Thank you for giving me a glimpse of what I missed.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Thank, D, for giving this a look.
Comment from jessizero
I enjoyed your 5-7-5 on the eclipse. I don't know if it's quite personification, but whatever it is works. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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I enjoyed your 5-7-5 on the eclipse. I don't know if it's quite personification, but whatever it is works. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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The challenge called for a 5-7-5. The different types: haiku, senryu, etc. is optional.
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Yes, I know. I was talking about the personification of the moon and sun. Sorry if I bugged you.
Comment from Sallyo
Softly, silently... Okay, so that was AA Milne. I like the alliteration in this, not to speak of the repeating vowel sounds (probably not quite assonance). You need to hire a woman with a sultry voice to intone this for you.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Softly, silently... Okay, so that was AA Milne. I like the alliteration in this, not to speak of the repeating vowel sounds (probably not quite assonance). You need to hire a woman with a sultry voice to intone this for you.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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There's an idea. : )
Comment from kahpot
Beautiful, an eclipse is a magical event, your description of it is spot on, and your chosen artwork is excellent, love the alliteration used, very well presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Beautiful, an eclipse is a magical event, your description of it is spot on, and your chosen artwork is excellent, love the alliteration used, very well presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thank you, kahpot
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Bill,
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and alliteration.
-You create a vivid word picture of the eclipse.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
-Did you get a total eclipse where you were?
-We are in NJ an surprisingly, we got the
thin crescent shape as the moon covered the sun,
but we didn't get the total eclipse. It got really
chilly while the sun was covered. I remember
the last total eclipse and how cold it got
by the time it was finished.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Bill,
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and alliteration.
-You create a vivid word picture of the eclipse.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
-Did you get a total eclipse where you were?
-We are in NJ an surprisingly, we got the
thin crescent shape as the moon covered the sun,
but we didn't get the total eclipse. It got really
chilly while the sun was covered. I remember
the last total eclipse and how cold it got
by the time it was finished.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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It was a great visual and some people felt the moment deeply. My angle was unimpressive.
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Thanks for sharing. We were lucky to have gotten more than we thought.
Comment from Wendy G
Nicely done! A stunning image, and a lot of pleasing alliteration in your 5-7-5, which meets all requirements and is a fine entry for the contest. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Nicely done! A stunning image, and a lot of pleasing alliteration in your 5-7-5, which meets all requirements and is a fine entry for the contest. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Wendy
Comment from robyn corum
Bill,
This piece was cleverly constructed, met all requirements, tossed in tubs of alliteration and imagery, added a lovely image, and paid us to read. While one might think that would be satisfying, it was ... less than.
I came here looking for nonsense and something more... upside-down-ish.
On the other hand, I think this makes a wonderful entry for the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Bill,
This piece was cleverly constructed, met all requirements, tossed in tubs of alliteration and imagery, added a lovely image, and paid us to read. While one might think that would be satisfying, it was ... less than.
I came here looking for nonsense and something more... upside-down-ish.
On the other hand, I think this makes a wonderful entry for the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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If I win a contest, it is because no one else entered.
Comment from jim vecchio
A very poetic scientific explanation of the nature of an eclipse. Wish it could have come to our area, but it must've known I lived here. Did you get to see it? Hope this work eclipses the others in tht contest!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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A very poetic scientific explanation of the nature of an eclipse. Wish it could have come to our area, but it must've known I lived here. Did you get to see it? Hope this work eclipses the others in tht contest!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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I watched but the effect was almost unnoticeable.
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Same here. I used the computer by open blinds and seen worse on rainy days.
