Crawling
a 100-word story17 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading, but what left with a sense of wanting more. Your descriptions were very good. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading, but what left with a sense of wanting more. Your descriptions were very good. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Barbara.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This makes me think of the series I'm reading where are people are crawling through the sand to get as far down in history as they can. What happens in this story is their house gets covered with sand because someone is blasting someplace almost in another country or something, It covers their house. So this civilization then builds another house on top of the sand and they can go down into their basement and be in the house that they lived in before it got covered. It's just kind of a fascinating story and it made me think of some of the stuff you're saying here.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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This makes me think of the series I'm reading where are people are crawling through the sand to get as far down in history as they can. What happens in this story is their house gets covered with sand because someone is blasting someplace almost in another country or something, It covers their house. So this civilization then builds another house on top of the sand and they can go down into their basement and be in the house that they lived in before it got covered. It's just kind of a fascinating story and it made me think of some of the stuff you're saying here.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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Wow! That's a crazy read. Crazy cool!
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The author is Hugh Howey if you want to check it out he does two other series that I'm not interested in. Two are about Wool or silos i am only interested in the Sand one.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Ah, another piece of prose that leaves more questions than answers. I shall eagerly be awaiting part two. Ha!
Thank you for sharing. Good look in the 100 Word Flash competition. I think you did an excellent job here.
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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Ah, another piece of prose that leaves more questions than answers. I shall eagerly be awaiting part two. Ha!
Thank you for sharing. Good look in the 100 Word Flash competition. I think you did an excellent job here.
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Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Douglas
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
That's what they say about curiosity. Bill, excellent story for the hundred work challenge. You managed to fit in a twist and interesting plot within 100 words. Well done!
Best wishes
Alex
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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That's what they say about curiosity. Bill, excellent story for the hundred work challenge. You managed to fit in a twist and interesting plot within 100 words. Well done!
Best wishes
Alex
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Alex
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You're welcome, Bill.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
What was Basil, and what was Abotabo. You could have said in author's note's. The chase is on, we got that. Good luck on the contest. Have a good week. Karen
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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What was Basil, and what was Abotabo. You could have said in author's note's. The chase is on, we got that. Good luck on the contest. Have a good week. Karen
Comment Written 10-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2024
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Thank in your view?you, Karen. What were they?
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:-)
Comment from Sallyo
That's just creepy. I read it three times and my head is crammed with question marks. Never mind. Any story that persuades me to read it three times has...something. A creepy something.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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That's just creepy. I read it three times and my head is crammed with question marks. Never mind. Any story that persuades me to read it three times has...something. A creepy something.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the time, Sallyo. : )
Comment from kahpot
Well! did Abotabo finally surface as Basil took his place, and is this the way the world is going, I think the oasis is important here, though I cannot figure it out as yet, very interesting and intriguing, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Well! did Abotabo finally surface as Basil took his place, and is this the way the world is going, I think the oasis is important here, though I cannot figure it out as yet, very interesting and intriguing, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thank you, kahpot
Comment from Wendy G
The endlessly crawling sounds like many human lives. Burrowing too, perhaps hiding from reality. I think this is deliberately ambiguous, so one can interpret it a number of ways. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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The endlessly crawling sounds like many human lives. Burrowing too, perhaps hiding from reality. I think this is deliberately ambiguous, so one can interpret it a number of ways. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. You are right, of course. Readers bring meaning to the story.
Comment from BethShelby
It sounds like the way some people view their like. Just constantly moving with out going anywhere that which amounts to anything of significant. Sort or like being in a rut. It probably feels like the good life to a sand crab.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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It sounds like the way some people view their like. Just constantly moving with out going anywhere that which amounts to anything of significant. Sort or like being in a rut. It probably feels like the good life to a sand crab.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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Crawling is living.
Comment from lyenochka
I read this a few times and I couldn't quite figure out what kind of creatures Abotabo and Basil are. Perhaps this is an existential story where both creatures, crab, snake, or human are seeking the meaning of life while crawling under the sand and just missing each other.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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I read this a few times and I couldn't quite figure out what kind of creatures Abotabo and Basil are. Perhaps this is an existential story where both creatures, crab, snake, or human are seeking the meaning of life while crawling under the sand and just missing each other.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
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It is both, of course. : )
