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Comment from ~Dovey
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Hi Gypsy Rose!

Thank you for the introduction to a new form of Japanese poetry. I have never read one in this style before. No rules such as kigo or satori lines required? I loved the aspect of a prayer. This is a beautiful composition.

Kim

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 04-Apr-2024
    Kim, thank you very much.

    You don't need a satori or kigo with Yamato uta.

    Yamato uta is a Japanese poetry form written in FREE VERSE which means no rules or rhyme and it can be as long as you like. Poets created THE YAMATO UTA POEM during the Heian Period 700 century. Yamato-uta are composed of many words born from people's hearts, as leaves grow from seeds. People use these words to express their thoughts about what they see or hear. click here if you want to read more
Comment from Jumbo J
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This is a stunning presentation Marival... the composition, the construction, the graceful intent woven so beautifully throughout this magical form of Yamato Uta floats in the air of grace.

And true to form, this poem is born of, and from your heart, baring all the fruits of your kind and generous soul and all that you have learned through the many lessons dealt. Through all the highs and lows the connection you have to your faith, your heart is open and is ready to receive and give of its bounty though your skill, your craft, your art, your love.

Amo el arte de tu lenguaje... Amo el tono de tu alma. Tus palabras son inmortales y vivir├ín a trav├©s de las generaciones de la gracia que les permiti├│ respirar querida MariVal.

With our thoughts we create...
the indelible legacy of divine gifts.

Warmest regards,
James.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
    James, I am always happy to read your reviews. You know me so well. I appreciate that you ''get me'' and know what I mean.

    Thank you for the exceptional six stars review. Thank you for writing in Spanish... that is so nice of you and you are very good at it.

    buenas noches, querido amigo mio, muchos besitos y abrazos

    MariVal
Comment from Esther Brown
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Gypsy, that was incredibly touching. Thanks so much for both the poem and the art. God blesses though you and you are heard in my heart. You seem close to him.
Esther

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
    Thank you, Esther, for the exceptional six stars review and kind words.


Comment from kahpot
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Another beautiful free verse read and poem, and may I say you will be forever known and read, I think was about all artists, though your words will continue, very well written and presented****kahpot

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much, kym.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from LateBloomer
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Hi Gypsy, your prayer-in-a-poem is heartfelt, and your words are sincere.

Of special note:
bless my pens and paper
bless the words I write

may they be beautiful
in your sight

(May the words of your pen always flow with beauty and might.)

Beautiful graphics and presentation. Xo. M

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much, Margaret 😊

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this poet's poem with us. It always amazes when I think about how wonderful God is to us. He knows what's in each of our hearts. We don't have to say anything, because He know. This presentation if one of your very best.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much the excellent review and kind words, Barbara.

    Love,

    Marival
Comment from shelley kaye
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cool free verse for a poet!
nice descriptive words. . . with rhyme!
smooth flow with deep feeling -
i like the light blues to dark blues

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
    Yes, I agree (*¸*)

    Thank you very much the excellent review and kind words, Shelley. I don't see the rhyme. If it has some is unintentional.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from RJ Heritage
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O, that we are remembered after we are gone, is the hope of many of us.
I liked the words of your poem and the mood that it set.
I do believe you would have that wish of being remembered.
RJ

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
    Yes, I agree (*¸*)

    Thank you very much the excellent review and kind words, .

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
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It's so hard to believe that He knows every thought, every word of every person that ever lived, it's mind blowingly incredible, this is such a wonderful conversation with God, well done Gypsy, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 02-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
    Thank you very much, my friend. It means a lot coming from you.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by royowen on 02-Apr-2024
    Well done
Comment from lyenochka
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I loved this poet's prayer! I think it speaks for all writers and poets as we want to speak for those who are unheard and to bless the future generations as our words connect with them!

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 Comment Written 02-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 02-Apr-2024
    Thank you, big sister, I'm happy you like this one. It means a lot to me.

    Love,
    Marival