ode to primordial poets
It's all been done before.9 total reviews
Comment from teafor2
Locust, you are more than correct...All the poetic devices were here long
before our "current crop" of wordsmiths/Bards/poets/orators, etc., and
will no doubt be here long after "our" group pass...However, there's no
monopoly on "free words." Those who have a skill set, gumption, gall, and or moxie to arrange and/or rearrange "free words" into a "new" imagery creating emotions/sentiments/insight/enlightenment...A push-ing of the writing "envelope" or just making a hard copy to appease or assuage a personal need..."...but that's okay." I enjoyed reading your mini-treatise on praising the "original" wordsmiths for setting the table. Well done! teafor2
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Locust, you are more than correct...All the poetic devices were here long
before our "current crop" of wordsmiths/Bards/poets/orators, etc., and
will no doubt be here long after "our" group pass...However, there's no
monopoly on "free words." Those who have a skill set, gumption, gall, and or moxie to arrange and/or rearrange "free words" into a "new" imagery creating emotions/sentiments/insight/enlightenment...A push-ing of the writing "envelope" or just making a hard copy to appease or assuage a personal need..."...but that's okay." I enjoyed reading your mini-treatise on praising the "original" wordsmiths for setting the table. Well done! teafor2
Comment Written 29-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for your great review! This poem seemed to have resonated with a lot of people!
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You are welcome. teafor2
Comment from lyenochka
But you are continuing to create and in modern, understandable language that adds to the treasury of poetry and that's a good thing! We need poets like you. I think the Romance poets were great but hard to relate to for the young people of today. So please keep writing and you will create new metaphors, too!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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But you are continuing to create and in modern, understandable language that adds to the treasury of poetry and that's a good thing! We need poets like you. I think the Romance poets were great but hard to relate to for the young people of today. So please keep writing and you will create new metaphors, too!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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That's so kind of you to say <3 Thank you so much! There is a special balance to modernizing poetry and making it more accessible while still retaining the beauty and refinement of the originals.
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I agree. It's hard for me to adapt to the new worship songs when I prefer the poetry of the classic hymns. But I will keep trying ...
Comment from Saki the Artist
Nothing left to say
As words become cliche
And worn out metaphors
Become poetic bores
I totally get this. I adore your meta poetry! Sometimes writer's block is great for hatching little gems like these.
I especially like your tasteful, subtle alliteration. The first line was so tasty! It was a woven c-n-m tapestry. People often forget that the consonants in the middle of words contribute to the overall mouthfeel. You got it though.
I also really like the form you chose. It's refreshing to see something more complex than couplets and quatrains. And I like that each stanza was a single (parsable) sentence.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Nothing left to say
As words become cliche
And worn out metaphors
Become poetic bores
I totally get this. I adore your meta poetry! Sometimes writer's block is great for hatching little gems like these.
I especially like your tasteful, subtle alliteration. The first line was so tasty! It was a woven c-n-m tapestry. People often forget that the consonants in the middle of words contribute to the overall mouthfeel. You got it though.
I also really like the form you chose. It's refreshing to see something more complex than couplets and quatrains. And I like that each stanza was a single (parsable) sentence.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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You're so incredibly kind! And six stars! I'm speechless! Thank you!... I agree. Alliteration is, in my opinion, an underutilized tool in the modern poets box. I'm so glad you enjoyed this :)
Comment from Colorado Owl
Very well said, and the picture is an excellent choice that matches the feeling of your poem. You're doing exactly what a primordial poet would expect of you... just keep writing! Your words are as unique as each new day on this earth. Thank you.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Very well said, and the picture is an excellent choice that matches the feeling of your poem. You're doing exactly what a primordial poet would expect of you... just keep writing! Your words are as unique as each new day on this earth. Thank you.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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You're very sweet :) Thank you for your kind words
Comment from JanPerry
It's all about POV or point of view. I personally don't enjoy poets of yesteryear. I hate their boring strung out wording, strange metaphors and ambiguity. I like to learn about others' lives since I seldom meet people in real life. I can do that by reading Fanstory and not some stuffy old Hemingway or Shakespearian works. Most of it is just dramatic licence made up to entertain us.
So if you have something to say don't let their success hold you back. I know I don't!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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It's all about POV or point of view. I personally don't enjoy poets of yesteryear. I hate their boring strung out wording, strange metaphors and ambiguity. I like to learn about others' lives since I seldom meet people in real life. I can do that by reading Fanstory and not some stuffy old Hemingway or Shakespearian works. Most of it is just dramatic licence made up to entertain us.
So if you have something to say don't let their success hold you back. I know I don't!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Very true JanPerry! Everyone has something to say! I actually wrote a poem about that too lol
Comment from royowen
I think sometimes we make works sparkle with light and other times perhaps just a dull glow, but I guess the story of the writer is that he must bleed, because there is power in the blood, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : beauty posses(s)ed.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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I think sometimes we make works sparkle with light and other times perhaps just a dull glow, but I guess the story of the writer is that he must bleed, because there is power in the blood, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : beauty posses(s)ed.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thank you for pointing out the typo! The word processor I use doesn't always catch them. :)
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A pleasure
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think poetry is forever inventive and progressive and there is so much more to explore with words as there are so many of them in the English language. A poignant write, much enjoyed, I love the questioning here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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I think poetry is forever inventive and progressive and there is so much more to explore with words as there are so many of them in the English language. A poignant write, much enjoyed, I love the questioning here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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You're very kind! Thank you for taking the time to review :)
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Hey girl, another big similarity with the throwing the line in for a rhyme every third one. I love it.
And what a statement you made. I love actually writing about the fact that you don't have any new ideas or the words to write at the moment. Yet you made a clever poem out of it. Awesome job!!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Hey girl, another big similarity with the throwing the line in for a rhyme every third one. I love it.
And what a statement you made. I love actually writing about the fact that you don't have any new ideas or the words to write at the moment. Yet you made a clever poem out of it. Awesome job!!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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You're always so kind! Thank you! I love writing poetry that gives the reader pause, even if just for a moment. Thank you for reading once again :) <3
Comment from nomi338
Out of a knowing respect, those who came before us left a model for us to follow. That model spoke lovingly to us, to be ever conscious of those who would follow us. To be mindful of what kind of example we would be, and the possible influence we would leave.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Out of a knowing respect, those who came before us left a model for us to follow. That model spoke lovingly to us, to be ever conscious of those who would follow us. To be mindful of what kind of example we would be, and the possible influence we would leave.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the kind review :)
