Road to Thereafter
A passenger boards a bus to an unknown destination.5 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Hello and welcome to FanStory! Good for you to jump right into a contest, and you're writing is very engaging! A bit of humor, a touch of mystery and fantasy...
Magic is what you'll find on your journey here. Lots of great folks willing to help and all kinds of forks in the road you can take to exercise your (considerable) skill!
I hope this does very well in the contest!
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Hello and welcome to FanStory! Good for you to jump right into a contest, and you're writing is very engaging! A bit of humor, a touch of mystery and fantasy...
Magic is what you'll find on your journey here. Lots of great folks willing to help and all kinds of forks in the road you can take to exercise your (considerable) skill!
I hope this does very well in the contest!
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the great feedback, Karenina. It's lovely to receive such a boost when I'm so new and also trying my best to navigate my way around the website. Many thanks for the follow and I will be sure to follow back. Thanks for sharing your imagination and inspiration with us all! Kelly.
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I truly enjoyed your post and know it can be a tad overwhelming as a Newbie...
Reach out if you'd like to!
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Thank you, Karenina :-) I appreciate it.K
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Welcome again, Kelly. This was a good start and first post and I wish you luck in the contest. It's a good idea for people to get to know you better, so I would take your notes from this story and put it in your profile notes. I will fan you and it is respectful to fan people back. Remember I am here if you have any questions.
Debi
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Welcome again, Kelly. This was a good start and first post and I wish you luck in the contest. It's a good idea for people to get to know you better, so I would take your notes from this story and put it in your profile notes. I will fan you and it is respectful to fan people back. Remember I am here if you have any questions.
Debi
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2024
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Thanks Debi & for the reassuring advice. It's always difficult to kick start a new process, but fun too. Thank you for the follow & I will follow back (once I get the hang of it! My next step...) Kelly.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This was an interesting and different dialogue - just enough here to tell us what bus she's on and to hint that she'll do well and not fall off.
An intriguing first write for this site. My only advice has nothing to do with your story, but I would take the information in your author's notes and place it in your portfolio so people can always refer to it when they review your work.
Welcome to FanStory. I've been here for two years and I've made lots of friends and grown as a writer. Read a lot of what's here and follow those you like; they may follow you back, and building a fan base will help you to find readers for your work.
Good luck in the contest, Kelly:-)
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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This was an interesting and different dialogue - just enough here to tell us what bus she's on and to hint that she'll do well and not fall off.
An intriguing first write for this site. My only advice has nothing to do with your story, but I would take the information in your author's notes and place it in your portfolio so people can always refer to it when they review your work.
Welcome to FanStory. I've been here for two years and I've made lots of friends and grown as a writer. Read a lot of what's here and follow those you like; they may follow you back, and building a fan base will help you to find readers for your work.
Good luck in the contest, Kelly:-)
xo
Pam
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2024
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Many thanks for your very informative and insightful review, Pam. It is nice to be made to feel so welcome and I will certainly enjoy reading and hopefully contributing more work to the site :-) Kelly x
Comment from RodG
The first-timer is much more calm about the bus's destination than I'd expect. Curious, yes. And patient as the person questioned gives vague answers. Let's hope the journey is indeed memorable. I like the use of "mate" and wonder if they are traveling through Australia. Congrats, Writer, on your first milestone. Rod
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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The first-timer is much more calm about the bus's destination than I'd expect. Curious, yes. And patient as the person questioned gives vague answers. Let's hope the journey is indeed memorable. I like the use of "mate" and wonder if they are traveling through Australia. Congrats, Writer, on your first milestone. Rod
Comment Written 21-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Thanks for reading, Rod. The passenger does indeed become more quizzical, maybe as a result of such cryptic responses. I agree that not everyone may appear so calm. Thanks, Kelly :-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like the ride of life as it is sometimes bumpy and we never know where we will end up, but we still jump on the roundabout, or should I say the bus in this case, a fun read, I was entertained and welcome to Fanstory Kelly, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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This sounds like the ride of life as it is sometimes bumpy and we never know where we will end up, but we still jump on the roundabout, or should I say the bus in this case, a fun read, I was entertained and welcome to Fanstory Kelly, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Many thanks for a wonderful review, Dolly. Its always a bit nerve-racking when you press that 'send' button - especially when its your first submission - so thank you. I wanted to write something light hearted that included an important message at the same time. I'm glad you enjoyed reading :-)
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You are with friend on this site and I look forward to your next post Kelly x
