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Comment from Sally Law
I really enjoy your mama bear story, my friend. You should write prosemlre often. This is wonderful and re,atable as I was bullied for an entire year between 7th and 8th grade. I shou have told Mama bit didn't. She was just remarried and it wasn't going well for her the second time around. A little too grown up for my own good, I kept the horrible ordeal from her, not wanting to burden her any more than she already was. Nothing could have been more ridiculous; and my weight and self esteem plumeted. (I was 5' 9" and weighed 90 pounds.) Thankfully, I stood up to him at a football game in front of God and country and ended it all right there. I am certain that it wouldn't have gone on that long and hurt me so if I had only told Mama about it.
You keep being who you are! I so admire you, Mama Bear!
Sending you my best today as always, dear Jess, and best wishes for the contest.
Sal Xos
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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I really enjoy your mama bear story, my friend. You should write prosemlre often. This is wonderful and re,atable as I was bullied for an entire year between 7th and 8th grade. I shou have told Mama bit didn't. She was just remarried and it wasn't going well for her the second time around. A little too grown up for my own good, I kept the horrible ordeal from her, not wanting to burden her any more than she already was. Nothing could have been more ridiculous; and my weight and self esteem plumeted. (I was 5' 9" and weighed 90 pounds.) Thankfully, I stood up to him at a football game in front of God and country and ended it all right there. I am certain that it wouldn't have gone on that long and hurt me so if I had only told Mama about it.
You keep being who you are! I so admire you, Mama Bear!
Sending you my best today as always, dear Jess, and best wishes for the contest.
Sal Xos
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Sally, thank you so much! I completely understand what you mean. And its not surprising that you handled it the way you did! You're a gem, my friend. Xoxo
Comment from jim vecchio
Adolescence can be a great divider. I was on the wrong end but survived bullying and God blessed me with wonderful life and even more wonderful wife while she was alive. Thank you for painting this vivid picture with your words of tormented youth.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Adolescence can be a great divider. I was on the wrong end but survived bullying and God blessed me with wonderful life and even more wonderful wife while she was alive. Thank you for painting this vivid picture with your words of tormented youth.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Jim.
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Enjoy a beautiful Easter Sunday!
Comment from Cosmic2011
Thank you for sharing your writings. This short story has inspired me to revisit a few of my own. Maybe I will be bold enough to post more than just my poetry here.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thank you for sharing your writings. This short story has inspired me to revisit a few of my own. Maybe I will be bold enough to post more than just my poetry here.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much! :) xo
Comment from Teri7
Jessica, This is a very well written Nonfiction story you have penned for the contest. You used great descriptive words with great emotion in them also. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Jessica, This is a very well written Nonfiction story you have penned for the contest. You used great descriptive words with great emotion in them also. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Teri! :) xo
Comment from Wendy G
I knew I would read something powerful and moving and creatively written which would deserve six stars, and this is it! You have expressed a timely, relevant and unfortunately universal experience, where evil leads a powerful pack to tear down and destroy. Your closing paragraphs are outstanding and the intensity of your emotions so strongly, clearly and well formulated. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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I knew I would read something powerful and moving and creatively written which would deserve six stars, and this is it! You have expressed a timely, relevant and unfortunately universal experience, where evil leads a powerful pack to tear down and destroy. Your closing paragraphs are outstanding and the intensity of your emotions so strongly, clearly and well formulated. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Wendy
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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This means the world, thank you, Wendy. Xoxo
Comment from Julie Helms
I can so relate to this on a visceral level. My daughter was homeschooled through 7th grade, then went to public school in 8th. She wanted to be friends with all the new girls she met. She is sweet and earnest and naive. They saw her coming a mile a way. I have never seen such evil in girls this age as those who bullied my daughter. I knew girls could be catty, but this was something else. Then as I found myself in their homes talking to their parents, I could see where the problem came from. Parents totally not parenting. They were cowed by their own 12 year olds. Anyway, I appreciate your commentary, well told. Best of luck in the contest!
Julie
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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I can so relate to this on a visceral level. My daughter was homeschooled through 7th grade, then went to public school in 8th. She wanted to be friends with all the new girls she met. She is sweet and earnest and naive. They saw her coming a mile a way. I have never seen such evil in girls this age as those who bullied my daughter. I knew girls could be catty, but this was something else. Then as I found myself in their homes talking to their parents, I could see where the problem came from. Parents totally not parenting. They were cowed by their own 12 year olds. Anyway, I appreciate your commentary, well told. Best of luck in the contest!
Julie
Comment Written 22-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Julie, I understand this completely. Thank you so much for sharing that and for the wonderful review. Xo
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This! You speak for mothers all over who watch as their daughters deal with these empathy-lacking cretins. We most likely had it happen us or one of our friends or a sister as we grew up but when it comes to our childred? oh hell no! My favorite lines: Jealousy is...
a vile, petty, malicious little bitch.
Taking on the form of a young girl, dressed head to toe in envy, with wickedness worn like an unflattering crop top...........
And I... am a much bigger bitch than jealousy.
Preach! Great Job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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This! You speak for mothers all over who watch as their daughters deal with these empathy-lacking cretins. We most likely had it happen us or one of our friends or a sister as we grew up but when it comes to our childred? oh hell no! My favorite lines: Jealousy is...
a vile, petty, malicious little bitch.
Taking on the form of a young girl, dressed head to toe in envy, with wickedness worn like an unflattering crop top...........
And I... am a much bigger bitch than jealousy.
Preach! Great Job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Marilyn! :) xo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a powerful write Jessica and it takes me back to my youth when bullies ruled the playground and recently when my Granddaughter was bullied at school by those who were jealous of her innocence. A fine well-written story and hope your daughter has not suffered here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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This is a powerful write Jessica and it takes me back to my youth when bullies ruled the playground and recently when my Granddaughter was bullied at school by those who were jealous of her innocence. A fine well-written story and hope your daughter has not suffered here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much, Dolly. xo
Comment from lyenochka
This is quite the poetic prose. It's so poetic that it's hard to understand what happened. It's clear that the narrator is a protective mother bear. Some jealous preteen kid had done something bad to her daughter but it's not clear what. The sentence, "My daughter unwittingly held the attention of a boy desired by her tormentor" is too convoluted and could be simplified. Anyway, I agree that preteens can be pretty awful socially.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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This is quite the poetic prose. It's so poetic that it's hard to understand what happened. It's clear that the narrator is a protective mother bear. Some jealous preteen kid had done something bad to her daughter but it's not clear what. The sentence, "My daughter unwittingly held the attention of a boy desired by her tormentor" is too convoluted and could be simplified. Anyway, I agree that preteens can be pretty awful socially.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2024
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Helen, I'm so sorry for the late reply. I appreciate your review very much. It seems I have a hard time switching off the "poet" in me when trying my hand at prose. lol It?s something I need to work on, for sure.
Thank you for your thoughts! Xoxo
Comment from Mrs. KT
Ah, Jess!
Such a formidable work of non-fiction!
How I wish I had six stars in my quiver.
I have only experienced the feelings you describe two times when my children were small. Once for my daughter and once for my son.
And both times I felt the emotional angst that you describe.
I taught high school students for half of my 38+ years of teaching.
What a roller coaster of emotions that, unfortunately, did, indeed, involve bullying by not by preteens but by teens ",,, engulfed in their narcissistic needs. They thrive on fleeting moments of significance, only attained by tearing another down. How awful it must be, constantly searching for nonexistent importance."
And the worst part?
Many never learn.
And continue their narcissistic behavior as adults.
Realistic and powerful.
Thank you for sharing!
Best wishes,
Fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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Ah, Jess!
Such a formidable work of non-fiction!
How I wish I had six stars in my quiver.
I have only experienced the feelings you describe two times when my children were small. Once for my daughter and once for my son.
And both times I felt the emotional angst that you describe.
I taught high school students for half of my 38+ years of teaching.
What a roller coaster of emotions that, unfortunately, did, indeed, involve bullying by not by preteens but by teens ",,, engulfed in their narcissistic needs. They thrive on fleeting moments of significance, only attained by tearing another down. How awful it must be, constantly searching for nonexistent importance."
And the worst part?
Many never learn.
And continue their narcissistic behavior as adults.
Realistic and powerful.
Thank you for sharing!
Best wishes,
Fondly,
diane
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2024
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diane, thank you for this wonderful review! This write was incredibly cathartic, lol, and I'm so grateful for the support.
My girls are in second and fifth grade, and the thought of them entering high school already fills me with stress! In our town, middle school begins in fifth grade, which I personally believe is a tad early.
My daughter is wise beyond her years, which I believe is a cause of her anxiety. It's as though her life experience hasn't entirely caught up with her brain (if that makes sense). I often have to check myself. It's impossible to shield them from everything (though we try). Luckily, my neurosis is balanced by my husband's calm, collected demeanor lol.
I applaud you for your years dedicated to teaching- I don't think I could do it!
Thank you, as always, diane!
Xo
Jess
