Welcoming Gesture
Sometimes we need a hand to hold.6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Welcoming Gesture, has the proper formatting and could allude to many things, including the first nod to the other side of when time gets shorter.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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This 5-7-5, Welcoming Gesture, has the proper formatting and could allude to many things, including the first nod to the other side of when time gets shorter.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to review.
Comment from Heidixoxo
What a beautifully written piece my friend. Your words speak volumes. Youve done a nice job. I like the artwork you've chosen too. Best of luck
Heidixoxo
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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What a beautifully written piece my friend. Your words speak volumes. Youve done a nice job. I like the artwork you've chosen too. Best of luck
Heidixoxo
Comment Written 20-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We all need support from time to time and managing life on our own can be a lonely journey. Since I have lived alone I have not always made the right decisions, but it is not without trying, we must never give up, a poignant write, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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We all need support from time to time and managing life on our own can be a lonely journey. Since I have lived alone I have not always made the right decisions, but it is not without trying, we must never give up, a poignant write, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 19-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Wow. This is so deep! And you did so with just 17 syllables. I thought this was a powerful poem. I love the idea of reaching your hand out to darkness. Normally I expect that to go very badly! haha But not hear. That twist worked. Great job.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Wow. This is so deep! And you did so with just 17 syllables. I thought this was a powerful poem. I love the idea of reaching your hand out to darkness. Normally I expect that to go very badly! haha But not hear. That twist worked. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you
Comment from jessizero
This was a beautifully dark piece of 5-7-5 poetry. You got the syllable count right in addition to painting this lovely mental image. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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This was a beautifully dark piece of 5-7-5 poetry. You got the syllable count right in addition to painting this lovely mental image. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you
Comment from M_Esther
Hi, Mia. Thank you for sharing this poem. I think it tells a good lesson--accept help when you're going through a tough time, right? One thing I noticed is "I" is the subject of the sentence, so I would change "accepts" to accept. Or if you want to keep "accepts" change the subject to "My hand." ("I accept" verses "my hand accepts"). I hope that helps! I didn't understand the picture because of the creepy hand at the top. It made me wonder if I'm not understanding the poem right. If I'm not, you can tell me.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Hi, Mia. Thank you for sharing this poem. I think it tells a good lesson--accept help when you're going through a tough time, right? One thing I noticed is "I" is the subject of the sentence, so I would change "accepts" to accept. Or if you want to keep "accepts" change the subject to "My hand." ("I accept" verses "my hand accepts"). I hope that helps! I didn't understand the picture because of the creepy hand at the top. It made me wonder if I'm not understanding the poem right. If I'm not, you can tell me.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your suggestions.
