The Pocket Watch
A find that changed a life.4 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
What a luminous story! And beautifully told. I am so mad, though, because they just this minute closed out the contest. If I'd known I was that close to deadline, I'd have voted for this immediately. I'm so sorry, Harry, but I'm glad you didn't even need the extra vote. And no surprise. The story is full of imagination and, as a writer, dream-centered satisfaction. I loved the escape.
And that watch in the picture: is that the one you own that will be passed down to your son? It's exquisite.
xoxox
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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What a luminous story! And beautifully told. I am so mad, though, because they just this minute closed out the contest. If I'd known I was that close to deadline, I'd have voted for this immediately. I'm so sorry, Harry, but I'm glad you didn't even need the extra vote. And no surprise. The story is full of imagination and, as a writer, dream-centered satisfaction. I loved the escape.
And that watch in the picture: is that the one you own that will be passed down to your son? It's exquisite.
xoxox
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much for your kind and encouraging words. Deeply appreciated. xoxox
Comment from Julie Helms
This is a beautiful story. His treasure hunt map took him to a fantastic find, finding himself!
A few suggestions for consideration:
he as enjoyed the fresh forest air (as he)
His fingers grasp a weathered pocket watch (grasped--keep it in past tense)
Now he is buried under stacks (was)
at his once flowing creative juices (once-flowing)
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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This is a beautiful story. His treasure hunt map took him to a fantastic find, finding himself!
A few suggestions for consideration:
he as enjoyed the fresh forest air (as he)
His fingers grasp a weathered pocket watch (grasped--keep it in past tense)
Now he is buried under stacks (was)
at his once flowing creative juices (once-flowing)
Julie :-)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks for all your help. Correction made.
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Congratulations! I just saw you won. I voted well. :-)
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Thanks, made corrections.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Beautifully written, I think I found myself in your story, sometimes on object can turn our life around and remind us, that we have a different path. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Beautifully written, I think I found myself in your story, sometimes on object can turn our life around and remind us, that we have a different path. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review. And of course for the six stars.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Found It Writers Prompt. I enjoyed this story. At no time did I feel. Like I wanted to stop reading. The pace was good and the storyline kept my interest throughout. Good luck in the contest. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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An excellent entry for the Found It Writers Prompt. I enjoyed this story. At no time did I feel. Like I wanted to stop reading. The pace was good and the storyline kept my interest throughout. Good luck in the contest. Nicely done.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and for the encouraging review.
