Isla de Oro: A Pirate Story
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Consequence"A story of bravery, faith, and family.
4 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
You have done a great job with this section of your story. It is riveting reading and full of color and a fast-paced plot. You have stayed true to the setting and dialogue and I have really enjoyed reading it. Now on to the next chapter.
Sugarray77
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You have done a great job with this section of your story. It is riveting reading and full of color and a fast-paced plot. You have stayed true to the setting and dialogue and I have really enjoyed reading it. Now on to the next chapter.
Sugarray77
Comment Written 16-May-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is great. I love reading about piracy and adventure! Your writing does not disappoint. Your writing immersed me into what the crew of the Lady Rebecca were facing. Your descriptions are excellent. The dialogue works well. I could feel the fear and uncertainty. Great job. Your story easily held my interest.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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This is great. I love reading about piracy and adventure! Your writing does not disappoint. Your writing immersed me into what the crew of the Lady Rebecca were facing. Your descriptions are excellent. The dialogue works well. I could feel the fear and uncertainty. Great job. Your story easily held my interest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Fantastic! Thanks Michael. I'm about to post the next chapter.
Comment from Kelly Hope
I felt like this storytell was nicely written. I will say it's undoubtedly an enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing, God bless!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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I felt like this storytell was nicely written. I will say it's undoubtedly an enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing, God bless!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Fantastic! Thanks Kelly. I'm about to post the next chapter.
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Could you possibly review my latest poem? I'm sorry if I'm being wrong by asking.
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Not at all! I'm happy to review.
Comment from lancellot
A very good chapter. There are a few gremlins to edit out though.
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A moment later, pirates led seven of our sailors below deck to our {brig â?"} including Keith and Thorne.
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and that surely the pirates surely kept the captain on deck for negotiations.
- and that the pirates surely kept the captain on deck for negotiations.
Religious lessons I had learned flashed through my mind, too, while {Keith â?"} trying to be comforting or not, I don't know{ â?" said}
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"Not yet sir, I been countin' the prisoners â?" ten o' them as ye like to know â?" when they tried to shoot me.
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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A very good chapter. There are a few gremlins to edit out though.
notes:
A moment later, pirates led seven of our sailors below deck to our {brig â?"} including Keith and Thorne.
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and that surely the pirates surely kept the captain on deck for negotiations.
- and that the pirates surely kept the captain on deck for negotiations.
Religious lessons I had learned flashed through my mind, too, while {Keith â?"} trying to be comforting or not, I don't know{ â?" said}
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"Not yet sir, I been countin' the prisoners â?" ten o' them as ye like to know â?" when they tried to shoot me.
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks. I thought I had reviewed it carefully, but I guess not. I appreciate your help. I'm about to post the next chapter.
