A Wish
Talking to myself about you15 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I know that feeling. I have felt that way about other people I've drawn close to wishing they would not leave the instant they get to know me. I admit it is sad and lonely out here. Please get to know me before you discount me for a fool.
Jesse
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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I know that feeling. I have felt that way about other people I've drawn close to wishing they would not leave the instant they get to know me. I admit it is sad and lonely out here. Please get to know me before you discount me for a fool.
Jesse
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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That is a sweet review. I can tell that you get it and I wish the best for you.
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I wish the best for you too.
Comment from Raul1
An interesting and impressive poem. I have enjoyed reading it. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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An interesting and impressive poem. I have enjoyed reading it. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you for the nice review. It was so good to read its kind compliments.
Comment from Saki the Artist
We've all been there and felt and thought those same words. I think youre poem is very relatable, and it's a good match for the Senryu form.
The picture you chose is lost on me. I think it's intending to be vaguely ironic, but I'm not sure at what. I think the poem itself is a lot stronger alone than with the picture, which is kind of distracting from the beauty of the words themselves.
Pretty good poem overall though.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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We've all been there and felt and thought those same words. I think youre poem is very relatable, and it's a good match for the Senryu form.
The picture you chose is lost on me. I think it's intending to be vaguely ironic, but I'm not sure at what. I think the poem itself is a lot stronger alone than with the picture, which is kind of distracting from the beauty of the words themselves.
Pretty good poem overall though.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you for trying to be kind. Actually, I have a new computer and I simply could not figure out how to upload the picture. Thanks again.
Comment from Wendy G
A very interesting Senryu, becaise I sense a much bigger story behind the words. The photo is a thought-provoking choice to support your words. Best wishes for he contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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A very interesting Senryu, becaise I sense a much bigger story behind the words. The photo is a thought-provoking choice to support your words. Best wishes for he contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your words of encouragement. It was nice reading them!
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a well-written poem. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is on point for this writing prompt. The words in this poem are interesting but the message is clear. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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This is a well-written poem. Your 5-7-5 syllable count is on point for this writing prompt. The words in this poem are interesting but the message is clear. Nice poem.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Bless you for not mentioning the fact that I could not wrap my brain around my new computer- to be able to upload the picture!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This is a lovely poem entered in the Senryu format. If I could make one suggestion regarding your piece it would be about the artwork you used. The picture is very nice but it would look much cleaner and make a better impression if you could trim away the extra words around the picture or find a picture without the excess. I enjoyed your poem. Nicely written.
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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This is a lovely poem entered in the Senryu format. If I could make one suggestion regarding your piece it would be about the artwork you used. The picture is very nice but it would look much cleaner and make a better impression if you could trim away the extra words around the picture or find a picture without the excess. I enjoyed your poem. Nicely written.
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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You wrote lovely comments and I thank you. Actually, I have a new computer and just could not figure out how to upload the picture! Lol
Comment from Julie Lau
I love the (1) originality of your illustration, (2) the heartfelt feeling in your poem, (3) your note which reinforces it. I wish you every success in the competition. Julie L
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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I love the (1) originality of your illustration, (2) the heartfelt feeling in your poem, (3) your note which reinforces it. I wish you every success in the competition. Julie L
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Julie, your kind words made my day( month). Thank you for taking the time to read; then write about it. Blessings
Comment from Lisasview
Interesting and thoughtful Senryu poem. My only thought is that you fix the font... I am on my big Mac and the words are small and look fuzzy...
A large font and also placing the words in the centre of the page would have more impact...
Just my thoughts...
Lisasview
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Interesting and thoughtful Senryu poem. My only thought is that you fix the font... I am on my big Mac and the words are small and look fuzzy...
A large font and also placing the words in the centre of the page would have more impact...
Just my thoughts...
Lisasview
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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I love your thoughts and they are good ones. This is a new computer, and honestly, I couldn?t figure out how to upload and do some of the other things that would have made it better. Lol
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Okay so on the page that your poem is posted go to where you edit... just
press edit... Then highlight your entire poem..
Then go to the top where you will see lines..._ three of these going up if that makes sense...
There will be three sets of these _ do not click on the first set... go to the next set and when you click on one set it will move your poem to the left and the middle one will organise and centre your poem and the right one is what you have now... that entire area is where your font size ( I usually use 22) and your font style and your colour is...
None of this is part of your computer...it is all Fan Story...
Okay I think that is it...
Lisa
Comment from jessizero
You got the syllable count right (yes, I counted LOL). The poem was great - I think that's something most of us have wanted at some point or another. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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You got the syllable count right (yes, I counted LOL). The poem was great - I think that's something most of us have wanted at some point or another. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thank you for not making fun of me. I have a new computer and couldn?t figure out how to upload. Lol
Comment from teafor2
Unknown bard, this truly is a display/depiction of one man's concerns and hopes: human nature. If the "A Wish" is removed from directly above your 3 lines of verbiage it may lessen the chance of a reviewer misunder standing and possibly giving a lower rating while critiquing you contest entry. Just a thought. Good luck in the contest. teafor
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Unknown bard, this truly is a display/depiction of one man's concerns and hopes: human nature. If the "A Wish" is removed from directly above your 3 lines of verbiage it may lessen the chance of a reviewer misunder standing and possibly giving a lower rating while critiquing you contest entry. Just a thought. Good luck in the contest. teafor
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Bless you for the "heads-up" you were so right! ?- new computer? couldn?t figure out how to upload the picture?loli
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Glad to help...Pass it OoonN!!
