Panpipes
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Comment from BermyBye50
Tony,
Congrats on winning the Book of the Month contest. You are a highly skilled and talented writer and poet. Your masterfully written stories and poems are always captivating, thought provoking and inspirational.
You are clearly one of the best writers here on Fanstory and you've helped me tremendously with your thoughtful and helpful reviews and critiques of my writing and poetry. I value and highly appreciate your feedback and wish you the best in your future writing endeavors.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Tony,
Congrats on winning the Book of the Month contest. You are a highly skilled and talented writer and poet. Your masterfully written stories and poems are always captivating, thought provoking and inspirational.
You are clearly one of the best writers here on Fanstory and you've helped me tremendously with your thoughtful and helpful reviews and critiques of my writing and poetry. I value and highly appreciate your feedback and wish you the best in your future writing endeavors.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 12-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2024
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Very many thanks for your kind words, Eugene, and for the honour of a sixth star. Greatly appreciated! All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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 A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for the recognition this post has received from the FanStory community. While this was not a Contest Committee decision, the committee recognizes this achievement with a seven star review. |
Comment Written 07-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
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Thank you! I'm honoured to have such great support and encouragement for my writing.
Comment from Sankey
Once again, NOT NOTIFIED! Missed the big bucks but no matter as I am overloaded. What is this word?..."pheromones" is it to do with maleness or hormones? It was an interesting chapter in any case.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Once again, NOT NOTIFIED! Missed the big bucks but no matter as I am overloaded. What is this word?..."pheromones" is it to do with maleness or hormones? It was an interesting chapter in any case.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2024
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Thanks for reviewing despite the promotion being finished. Appreciated. Pheromones are natural scents given off that may attract the opposite sex.
Comment from Pam (respa)
A good chapter that focuses on Ayesha trying to settle her financial affairs. It isn't easy when you have a hangover and someone is tailing you. I wonder if Mr. Dallmore is trustworthy or if he is in cahoots with the person who is tailing her. It is also interesting that she seems to attract less than honorable men. It also seems like she is calling attention to herself by blowing that kiss after she got off the bus.
An interesting ending with both women in the office either commenting or noticing details about young Mr. Kraft!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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A good chapter that focuses on Ayesha trying to settle her financial affairs. It isn't easy when you have a hangover and someone is tailing you. I wonder if Mr. Dallmore is trustworthy or if he is in cahoots with the person who is tailing her. It is also interesting that she seems to attract less than honorable men. It also seems like she is calling attention to herself by blowing that kiss after she got off the bus.
An interesting ending with both women in the office either commenting or noticing details about young Mr. Kraft!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thanks very much for your review, Pam, and for your remarks about Ayesha. Appreciated. We're in the midst of a weeklong heatwave here in Adelaide. 104F today and tomorrow. Rufus gets his morning walk on the beach at dawn!
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You are very welcome, Tony, and thanks for sharing in your reply. It seems Australia has been very hot this season. We are cool and rainy off and on. Sometimes there's wind and rain. I guess you have to be up early, too!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Steve sounds like a handsome man. I wonder if she will reconsider her relationship with poor Bapit. The ordeal with her dead husband and her money seems tiresome and stressful. I hope things settle down soon.
Well done, Tony
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Steve sounds like a handsome man. I wonder if she will reconsider her relationship with poor Bapit. The ordeal with her dead husband and her money seems tiresome and stressful. I hope things settle down soon.
Well done, Tony
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thanks for the review, Gypsy. Steve might make her think twice about what she's doing. Who knows? Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Cindy Warren
Johnno has to be more freaked out about the arm washing up than Ayesha is. After all, a thousand people could have those initials and she thinks she buried him, arm intact. I wonder what they'd be able to get from it. In the warm waters around Australia, there would have been millions of little beasties feasting on it, it's not like being in the water around here.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Johnno has to be more freaked out about the arm washing up than Ayesha is. After all, a thousand people could have those initials and she thinks she buried him, arm intact. I wonder what they'd be able to get from it. In the warm waters around Australia, there would have been millions of little beasties feasting on it, it's not like being in the water around here.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Cindy. Yes, Johnno must be sweating a bit at the moment. Not sure if they'll be able to match DNA or anything like that. He definitely doesn't want Ayesha identifying the ring. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
Another excellent chapter, a little tighter than the last one. The transfer should go smoothly, even though it will require a death certificate.
In paragraph two, you mentioned that the (stock?) certificates need to be updated; most places haven't used certificates in decades. Everything is held in an account in the client's name so sales and purchases can be made instantaneously.
Ayesha likes to play with fire, blowing her tail a kiss. Better to disappear unnoticed I think.
Hopefully, Mr Kraft will be her savior in this quagmire of deceit.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Hello Tony,
Another excellent chapter, a little tighter than the last one. The transfer should go smoothly, even though it will require a death certificate.
In paragraph two, you mentioned that the (stock?) certificates need to be updated; most places haven't used certificates in decades. Everything is held in an account in the client's name so sales and purchases can be made instantaneously.
Ayesha likes to play with fire, blowing her tail a kiss. Better to disappear unnoticed I think.
Hopefully, Mr Kraft will be her savior in this quagmire of deceit.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2024
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Thanks, Robert, for the review and the sixth star. Thanks for the catch. I've changed 'certificates' to 'records'. Silly of me. I don't even have a paper copy of title deeds these days. I hope no-one cuts the undersea internet cables! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a well written chapter, Tony, that illustrates the fine line Ayesha is walking in getting her inheritance money. There are obstacles and dangers all around and frustrations with all the impediments to a quick transaction. Plus, she's hung over at the moment. A trying time to be sure, but she's made of stern stuff, and I'm sure she'll get what she deserves eventually. Your knowledge of procedure continues to impress me.
I also liked the little spice you threw in with Steve there at the end. - Jim
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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This was a well written chapter, Tony, that illustrates the fine line Ayesha is walking in getting her inheritance money. There are obstacles and dangers all around and frustrations with all the impediments to a quick transaction. Plus, she's hung over at the moment. A trying time to be sure, but she's made of stern stuff, and I'm sure she'll get what she deserves eventually. Your knowledge of procedure continues to impress me.
I also liked the little spice you threw in with Steve there at the end. - Jim
Comment Written 05-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Thanks for your review and comments, Jim. Most encouraging and appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Gunner Lil
Another great chapter that is an easy read and fast paced. Not boring in the least.
You use great adjectives at the right places.
Excellent dialogue and sensory descriptions.
Thank you!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Another great chapter that is an easy read and fast paced. Not boring in the least.
You use great adjectives at the right places.
Excellent dialogue and sensory descriptions.
Thank you!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Many thanks, Gunner Lil. I appreciate your time and support. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there, Tony,
I feel sorry for Ayesha. She is trying to get things done, and the whole administrative side is very complicated. (But she should've realized that the death certificate would be needed at every turn.)
I had to laugh at this: 'she sunk her teeth into it, leaving powdered sugar on her nose and raspberry jam dribbling down her chin, an effect temporarily worsened when she grabbed a serviette and started to wipe herself clean.' - seems to happen to me whenever I eat a jelly donut!
Thank you for sharing, and I look forward to more,
~patty~
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Hi there, Tony,
I feel sorry for Ayesha. She is trying to get things done, and the whole administrative side is very complicated. (But she should've realized that the death certificate would be needed at every turn.)
I had to laugh at this: 'she sunk her teeth into it, leaving powdered sugar on her nose and raspberry jam dribbling down her chin, an effect temporarily worsened when she grabbed a serviette and started to wipe herself clean.' - seems to happen to me whenever I eat a jelly donut!
Thank you for sharing, and I look forward to more,
~patty~
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2024
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Many thanks, Patty. I appreciate your time and support. You and me too on jelly donuts! LOL
Best wishes, Tony.
