Guided by Faith
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Comment from Jacob1395
I can really feel Emma's frustration in this piece, which comes through well in your dialogue. Grief affects us all differently. I remember feeling guilty for years because I didn't cry when my granddad died. A well written chapter Barbara, I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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I can really feel Emma's frustration in this piece, which comes through well in your dialogue. Grief affects us all differently. I remember feeling guilty for years because I didn't cry when my granddad died. A well written chapter Barbara, I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Thank you for understanding.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, sometimes in life we are the last to know all the facts, but in many cases, it makes finding out all the more enjoyable. And in other, maybe not. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Yes, sometimes in life we are the last to know all the facts, but in many cases, it makes finding out all the more enjoyable. And in other, maybe not. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Emma is not happy to keep being in the dark. Thank you for the kind review.
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Yes, I think that's obvious, and would be the case with most. LOL.
Comment from Daylily
This is a lovely chapter with a lot of good elements--suspense, action, emotions, romance, and surprises. I always look forward to reading more.
Just two small things:
Seth set a plate with toast and a cup of broth in front of Emma, and then asked, "Susan, can we borrow the canoe today? I think being outside would-be a good change." (would-be does not need the hyphen)
"You're shaking head has." (Your)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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This is a lovely chapter with a lot of good elements--suspense, action, emotions, romance, and surprises. I always look forward to reading more.
Just two small things:
Seth set a plate with toast and a cup of broth in front of Emma, and then asked, "Susan, can we borrow the canoe today? I think being outside would-be a good change." (would-be does not need the hyphen)
"You're shaking head has." (Your)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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I correct the you're, but two different grammar checks say would-be needs a hyphen, I never would have done it on my own. I think I'll wait and see what my editor says. Thank you for the kind review.
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I did not know that either. Shows how we can learn all sorts of things here on FS. :-)
Comment from Douglas Goff
Whew! That was a li g one, but worth the read.
LOL here:
He grinned. "I enjoy eating too much not to."
I think this is missing a word? :
"Have a seat and enjoy delicious looking breakfast."
Also there is a big plot hole in how Ronnie would know about the very private conversation between Seth and Keith.
(Maybe he has a sister who's a nurse or he was spying out in hallway. Not sure. Just it's noticeable and came to mind immediately as I read it.
Great chapter!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Whew! That was a li g one, but worth the read.
LOL here:
He grinned. "I enjoy eating too much not to."
I think this is missing a word? :
"Have a seat and enjoy delicious looking breakfast."
Also there is a big plot hole in how Ronnie would know about the very private conversation between Seth and Keith.
(Maybe he has a sister who's a nurse or he was spying out in hallway. Not sure. Just it's noticeable and came to mind immediately as I read it.
Great chapter!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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How Ronnie found about the conversation will come up in part two, the problem with splitting a chapter. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gunner Lil
A great picture of the canon on the water.
You have a very good novel going. You said this post has about two thousand words. This reader found it too long.
The dialogue is excellent and dose move it along.
I suggest ending this chapter at the break with the Five **and start next chapter with: 'When they arrived home'...
Great job.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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A great picture of the canon on the water.
You have a very good novel going. You said this post has about two thousand words. This reader found it too long.
The dialogue is excellent and dose move it along.
I suggest ending this chapter at the break with the Five **and start next chapter with: 'When they arrived home'...
Great job.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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LOL The majority of my readers want me to post long. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sanku
I am glad that Seth finally told her that he loved her. This was a beautiful chapter and I loved the way Seth dealt with Emma. Now its her turn .I hope there wont be any more complications in their path..
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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I am glad that Seth finally told her that he loved her. This was a beautiful chapter and I loved the way Seth dealt with Emma. Now its her turn .I hope there wont be any more complications in their path..
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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No major complications. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
What is this about an inheritance? Sounds interesting.
I still think Jake and Susan will grow close, and Emma and Seth will have a passel full of kids. Good writing.Karen :-)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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What is this about an inheritance? Sounds interesting.
I still think Jake and Susan will grow close, and Emma and Seth will have a passel full of kids. Good writing.Karen :-)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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I was wondering about Pastor Pat and Susan they are closer to the same age. Jake is around 38 or 39. I'd have to look bac for sure. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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Oh, I thought by the way he talked that he was her age. Okay pastor Pat it is , he is probably a better choice. :-)
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
How were the others privy to the conversation with Ronnie and the kiss between Seth and Emma? Were they drawn to the commotion of voices outside - of Emma stumbling - of her and Seth on the stairs talking? You might mention how they knew about these things.
I thought Seth might pop the question right there on the stairs, but Emma didn't seem to react to his confession of love for her, even though she didn't seem put off by it.
Final chapter by March 17? Well, Seth better get it in gear and get the askin' done pretty soon! A wedding before Easter:-)
I don't mind the long chapters, Barbara. Because there is so much dialogue, they move along quickly.
Looking forward to the big finale!
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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How were the others privy to the conversation with Ronnie and the kiss between Seth and Emma? Were they drawn to the commotion of voices outside - of Emma stumbling - of her and Seth on the stairs talking? You might mention how they knew about these things.
I thought Seth might pop the question right there on the stairs, but Emma didn't seem to react to his confession of love for her, even though she didn't seem put off by it.
Final chapter by March 17? Well, Seth better get it in gear and get the askin' done pretty soon! A wedding before Easter:-)
I don't mind the long chapters, Barbara. Because there is so much dialogue, they move along quickly.
Looking forward to the big finale!
xo
Pam
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Emma went inside toward her room. I need to make that clearer. They were in the house. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Barbara,
this is a pretty intense chapter, a lot going on. It's hard to imagine that they've only known each other for thirty six days, and the subject of marriage is coming up already. I can imagine that Seth doesn't want to get into a compromising situation with Emma, and the desire to be with her would be overwhelming, but they really don't know each other very well, and right now she's tender after the death of her father. The chapter was fast paced and easy to read. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Hello Barbara,
this is a pretty intense chapter, a lot going on. It's hard to imagine that they've only known each other for thirty six days, and the subject of marriage is coming up already. I can imagine that Seth doesn't want to get into a compromising situation with Emma, and the desire to be with her would be overwhelming, but they really don't know each other very well, and right now she's tender after the death of her father. The chapter was fast paced and easy to read. Well done gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
No doubt wedding bells will ring soon. I see nothing wrong with this story. As always it is written well and flows nicely. Good one Barb. Thanks for the Character list.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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No doubt wedding bells will ring soon. I see nothing wrong with this story. As always it is written well and flows nicely. Good one Barb. Thanks for the Character list.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
