Flowering Love
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is an interesting post. I like the musical references. The poem part feels mostly like it travels from lyrics or a poetic quote to questioning. I am wondering why you capitalized Hard Times and Latter in the first section. A neighbor girl down the street from us in the 1970s and early 1980s had the middle name "Hard Times" but probably got it changed later on.
Suggestion on these two lines:
Love slowly passing but sometimes it's all right?
Because if that Love was just meant to be?
I would take out the question marks. With the question marks, it makes the reader feel like you are still considering whether you will use the lines or not.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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This is an interesting post. I like the musical references. The poem part feels mostly like it travels from lyrics or a poetic quote to questioning. I am wondering why you capitalized Hard Times and Latter in the first section. A neighbor girl down the street from us in the 1970s and early 1980s had the middle name "Hard Times" but probably got it changed later on.
Suggestion on these two lines:
Love slowly passing but sometimes it's all right?
Because if that Love was just meant to be?
I would take out the question marks. With the question marks, it makes the reader feel like you are still considering whether you will use the lines or not.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thanks for your review and thoughts.
Doctor Ricky
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, #24, piles a lot of ideas on top of each other, and only zeroes in momentarily to reveal a title and a description. "Flowering Love" will skirt the Edge of Reality.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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This story, #24, piles a lot of ideas on top of each other, and only zeroes in momentarily to reveal a title and a description. "Flowering Love" will skirt the Edge of Reality.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thanks again Bill.
That should be available now for review.
Doctor Ricky
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I enjoy your writing style. You can't just read through it as each stanza requires a moment to enjoy what is being said. Very creative and well written.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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I enjoy your writing style. You can't just read through it as each stanza requires a moment to enjoy what is being said. Very creative and well written.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2024
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Thanks Michael for sharing your time and your review.
Doctor Ricky
