Jumping Ship
Loneliness in free verse27 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Yes, I can identify with what you're saying. Your character is quite rootless and, as I see is, is flittering through life with no real purpose only to be totally lost and all alone. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
Yes, I can identify with what you're saying. Your character is quite rootless and, as I see is, is flittering through life with no real purpose only to be totally lost and all alone. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Ulla! Xo
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This endless quest for more shadows through the ages, a refrain echoed by restless souls seeking fulfillment. Yet, as they jump for greater abundance, they find themselves ensnared in the scarcity of the meaning of loneliness.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
This endless quest for more shadows through the ages, a refrain echoed by restless souls seeking fulfillment. Yet, as they jump for greater abundance, they find themselves ensnared in the scarcity of the meaning of loneliness.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Well said, thank you so much! Xo
Comment from teafor2
Jessica: This is an alliterated/bittersweet/poignant/melancholic/meta-phoric song that so enthralled me to the point of numerous reads before
tearing myself to list the words providing the drama and musicality:
Alliterations: W's, wondering/waves; T's, to/the, the/ties; S's, steered/star-
light, shall/sink; L's, leaving/last, last/loneliness; D's, dark/deep; A's, anchoring/at.
IMHO, exquisite picture matches scribes verbiage and adds credibility to
the mental/emotional contest theme. Good luck. teafor2
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
Jessica: This is an alliterated/bittersweet/poignant/melancholic/meta-phoric song that so enthralled me to the point of numerous reads before
tearing myself to list the words providing the drama and musicality:
Alliterations: W's, wondering/waves; T's, to/the, the/ties; S's, steered/star-
light, shall/sink; L's, leaving/last, last/loneliness; D's, dark/deep; A's, anchoring/at.
IMHO, exquisite picture matches scribes verbiage and adds credibility to
the mental/emotional contest theme. Good luck. teafor2
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you again, my friend!! Xoxo
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You are welcome.
Comment from Aussie
Why did you not keep the beat and make it all quatrains? You lost me when you wrote 'this endless quest... It just seemed you steered away from jumping ship. Loneliness; I guess you have used ships instead of people, jumping from one to another and finally the deep because you gave up?
Why did you not keep the beat and make it all quatrains? You lost me when you wrote 'this endless quest... It just seemed you steered away from jumping ship. Loneliness; I guess you have used ships instead of people, jumping from one to another and finally the deep because you gave up?
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow, your poem is so haunting, and yet expresses the feelings of loneliness a person can feel after separating themselves from humanity. I think we all know someone who has done this, perhaps ones self. You deftly described the feelings these people have and the hopelessness of pushing themselves so far away they lose their chance to connect.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
Wow, your poem is so haunting, and yet expresses the feelings of loneliness a person can feel after separating themselves from humanity. I think we all know someone who has done this, perhaps ones self. You deftly described the feelings these people have and the hopelessness of pushing themselves so far away they lose their chance to connect.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, Rhonda! Xo
Comment from karenina
You managed to evoke a metaphorical cornucopia of loneliness in fifteen free verse lines.
"A paradox, in my urge for flight.
I yearn for the ties severed by my departure.
With each anchored vessel and fleeting bond formed,
The gap I seek to bridge, widens."
I haven't felt this understood in years!
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
You managed to evoke a metaphorical cornucopia of loneliness in fifteen free verse lines.
"A paradox, in my urge for flight.
I yearn for the ties severed by my departure.
With each anchored vessel and fleeting bond formed,
The gap I seek to bridge, widens."
I haven't felt this understood in years!
Karenina
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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<3 <3 <3 Thank you so much, Karenina Xo
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Welcome, Jessica!
Comment from Wendy G
Interesting and well- developed thought with all the sumbolic maritime imagery, and a suitable chosen as well to go with your words. best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
Interesting and well- developed thought with all the sumbolic maritime imagery, and a suitable chosen as well to go with your words. best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo :)
Comment from Sally Law
I just voted for this in the contest and came back to review. I thought yours was the best and very creative. I can tell you put a lot of work into this one. I dearly hope you win, mystery poetess. Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the contest.
Sally Law :))
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
I just voted for this in the contest and came back to review. I thought yours was the best and very creative. I can tell you put a lot of work into this one. I dearly hope you win, mystery poetess. Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the contest.
Sally Law :))
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, my Sally! Xo
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Well you certainly capture loneliness! I love the Peter Pan association and the jumping from ship to ship reference. The words sing beautifully to the subject matter. Good luck in your contest. Nice write! xo Kiwi
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
Well you certainly capture loneliness! I love the Peter Pan association and the jumping from ship to ship reference. The words sing beautifully to the subject matter. Good luck in your contest. Nice write! xo Kiwi
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from Janet Foor
This poem definitely fits the writing prompt of a "lonely poem."
Excellent artwork to accompany your "Jumping Ship" title. Very nicely done and good luck.
Blessings
Janet.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
This poem definitely fits the writing prompt of a "lonely poem."
Excellent artwork to accompany your "Jumping Ship" title. Very nicely done and good luck.
Blessings
Janet.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, Janet! Xo