2024 Japanese Poetry
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11 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
No Marival, you don't want to die before you've done all of the above.
I loved this poem and the imagery was what drew me in. I loved it. It is so very well written. I have to try this poetic form Un besito y abrazos, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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No Marival, you don't want to die before you've done all of the above.
I loved this poem and the imagery was what drew me in. I loved it. It is so very well written. I have to try this poetic form Un besito y abrazos, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for the lovely review. May you have a wonderful weekend
gypsy hugs
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I don't want to die expresses the need to live. Some people are afraid of dying; they are never ready to leave their families. To say goodbye is not an easy thing.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I don't want to die expresses the need to live. Some people are afraid of dying; they are never ready to leave their families. To say goodbye is not an easy thing.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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thank you very much for the wonderful review, may you have a fabulous weekend.
gypsy
Comment from Douglas Goff
Me neither! You really have a knack for making your reader feel like they are right there with you.
Wonderful piece. Very haunting night-like colors. Love it!
A six star for me.
Douglas.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Me neither! You really have a knack for making your reader feel like they are right there with you.
Wonderful piece. Very haunting night-like colors. Love it!
A six star for me.
Douglas.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Douglas, I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words! You are always so nice to me. Big hugs and kisses
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I liked the use of repetition on with this poem. The passion and sentiment were obvious. This is another wonderful poem and presentation. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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I liked the use of repetition on with this poem. The passion and sentiment were obvious. This is another wonderful poem and presentation. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
the second one has rhyme (cry/die)
a great gogyohka suite with vivid and colorful imagery and a smooth flow of words
nice deep feelings of unrequited love within the lines
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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the second one has rhyme (cry/die)
a great gogyohka suite with vivid and colorful imagery and a smooth flow of words
nice deep feelings of unrequited love within the lines
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from teafor2
Gypsy: I like the saturation of poetics, especially the similes (like a motherless child; like a tight tango dance) and enjambment: The lack of
punhciation allows reader(s) to negotiate the cinquains via a smooth flowing read). Hyperbole is also front and center in this intense distance romance. The picture compliments this multi-colored offering (which caused a 'slight' distraction for this eyeglass wearing reader). I enjoyed this
well written piece of poetry. teafor2
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Gypsy: I like the saturation of poetics, especially the similes (like a motherless child; like a tight tango dance) and enjambment: The lack of
punhciation allows reader(s) to negotiate the cinquains via a smooth flowing read). Hyperbole is also front and center in this intense distance romance. The picture compliments this multi-colored offering (which caused a 'slight' distraction for this eyeglass wearing reader). I enjoyed this
well written piece of poetry. teafor2
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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I'm sorry about the font color. I usually add a black ink copy in my author notes.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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Thanks for your gracious looking out for us glass wearing folks...Shucks, I was gonna read that great poem regardless of my old bad eyes:) teafor2
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is well written and full of emotion and full descriptions. I like the repetition and the image presentation is fantastic!
Blessings,
Alexan
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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This is well written and full of emotion and full descriptions. I like the repetition and the image presentation is fantastic!
Blessings,
Alexan
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Alexan 😊
Comment from Ricky1024
Thanks for this Gypsy.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Note:To die is bad enough but alone.
Yes, is one of the reasons that after age 69.
I remarried almost Nine
months ago.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
"No Man is an Island"
John Donne
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Thanks for this Gypsy.
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Note:To die is bad enough but alone.
Yes, is one of the reasons that after age 69.
I remarried almost Nine
months ago.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
"No Man is an Island"
John Donne
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Congratulations on your wedding. :)
Thank you very much, Dr Ricky
Comment from Gloria ....
Good use of repetition here with the I don't want to die line and the desire for union with true love can indeed be compared the heavenly glory.
Beautiful presentation and poem. Much enjoyed. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Good use of repetition here with the I don't want to die line and the desire for union with true love can indeed be compared the heavenly glory.
Beautiful presentation and poem. Much enjoyed. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Oh, that's interesting. It's not about religion but it can be.
Thank you very much, Gloria 😊 have a wonderful day
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
I like how you list the experiences that the narrator longs for and these are the reasons why she doesn't want to leave this world too soon. But I think life in Heaven will be so much better than we can imagine!
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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I like how you list the experiences that the narrator longs for and these are the reasons why she doesn't want to leave this world too soon. But I think life in Heaven will be so much better than we can imagine!
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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yes, this is just a poem 😊
Thank you, big sister, you always get my poems. I hope you are having a wonderful day.
Love,
MariVal
