Earthling Easter
A dialogue-only sequel to Earthling Christmas13 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Yes, as with Christmas we have found interesting concepts/objects to help us celebrate unrated facts about a religious holiday. It is confusing. Good luck with the contest.
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Yes, as with Christmas we have found interesting concepts/objects to help us celebrate unrated facts about a religious holiday. It is confusing. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Yes, it's all quite perplexing, and you laid it out well here with your tongue-in-cheek references and questions. Cute, clever, and totally avoiding any potential "offenses" that lurk everywhere these days. I felt the use of "Your Lordship" was quite overdone, though. For awhile, I thought you were doing that to set me up for a joke down the line, but when that didn't happen, then it just felt a little like, "Mommy...Mommy...Mommy...Mom...Mommy... Mom..." If you put your own name in where you currently have "Your Lordship," I think you'll see my point.
Good luck with this at the polls. xoxo
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Yes, it's all quite perplexing, and you laid it out well here with your tongue-in-cheek references and questions. Cute, clever, and totally avoiding any potential "offenses" that lurk everywhere these days. I felt the use of "Your Lordship" was quite overdone, though. For awhile, I thought you were doing that to set me up for a joke down the line, but when that didn't happen, then it just felt a little like, "Mommy...Mommy...Mommy...Mom...Mommy... Mom..." If you put your own name in where you currently have "Your Lordship," I think you'll see my point.
Good luck with this at the polls. xoxo
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I think you definitely have a point. Will look into varying it! I wanted him to be obsequious but may have overdone it. :) Thanks so much for your feedback as always! :)
Comment from BethShelby
He may have some problem connecting the Rabbits and eggs to the babe born at Christmas but then he likely had some some trouble connecting Christmas ttees and candy canes. at Christmas. This was fun to read.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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He may have some problem connecting the Rabbits and eggs to the babe born at Christmas but then he likely had some some trouble connecting Christmas ttees and candy canes. at Christmas. This was fun to read.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much, Beth! :)
Comment from papa55mike
If he could only time travel back to the time before the cross to actually hear Jesus speak and learn his teachings. What a wonderfully written story. G good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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If he could only time travel back to the time before the cross to actually hear Jesus speak and learn his teachings. What a wonderfully written story. G good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much for the generous six stars! :)
Comment from Jim Wile
So clever. Loved the reference to hot cross buns and the other Easter symbols. I also loved the formal way of talking (I will endeavor to do so, my Lordship). I missed the earlier one about Christmas, but this was very amusing, Navada. Would that aliens, if there are any, treat us with such respect in their thirst for knowledge about us and not just wipe us out! - Jim
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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So clever. Loved the reference to hot cross buns and the other Easter symbols. I also loved the formal way of talking (I will endeavor to do so, my Lordship). I missed the earlier one about Christmas, but this was very amusing, Navada. Would that aliens, if there are any, treat us with such respect in their thirst for knowledge about us and not just wipe us out! - Jim
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Yes, indeed! Earthling Christmas utilised a different format - it was a series of reports from Dvorzgah to the Most High Overlord about various aspects of Christmas celebrations in Melbourne. Thanks for this lovely feedback! :)
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Navada,
It can be hard to explain the customs that various groups on earth have to those who reside amongst us, I can only imagine the difficulty it would present to anyone who wasn't well versed in the subjects of Easter and Christmas. I've never understood the whole rabbit and eggs thing, but I was always happy to go along with it. Thanks for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Hello Navada,
It can be hard to explain the customs that various groups on earth have to those who reside amongst us, I can only imagine the difficulty it would present to anyone who wasn't well versed in the subjects of Easter and Christmas. I've never understood the whole rabbit and eggs thing, but I was always happy to go along with it. Thanks for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much, Tom - me too! :)
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Dialogue only - thank you for using quotations instead of different colors, or some other gimmickry. Dialogue is in quotations in literature. Not that I am an eccentric legalist, I am not, but for crying out loud. If the rules said poetry, do I make it look like prose? Without any form whatsoever?
Interesting story, too.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Dialogue only - thank you for using quotations instead of different colors, or some other gimmickry. Dialogue is in quotations in literature. Not that I am an eccentric legalist, I am not, but for crying out loud. If the rules said poetry, do I make it look like prose? Without any form whatsoever?
Interesting story, too.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Wayne - I appreciate this feedback! :)
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
That face looks like "Marvin the Martian" from Looney Tunes. He is one of my favorites. From time to time, I think of what would others think of our world. we are weird, no doubt about it. Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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That face looks like "Marvin the Martian" from Looney Tunes. He is one of my favorites. From time to time, I think of what would others think of our world. we are weird, no doubt about it. Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Karen! I think it probably is Marvin the Martian in Easter Bunny disguise. :)
Comment from royowen
I was in my forties when I understand who Jesus was and why Easter. I don't think folk have a clue unless something internally happens, scripture says, nobody can confess Christ is Lord unless by the power of the Holy Spirit, Jesus explained that 'as rebirth to Nicodemus, as not being able to see the kingdom of God, of which the cross binds it altogether, you've chosen a difficult gig dear friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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I was in my forties when I understand who Jesus was and why Easter. I don't think folk have a clue unless something internally happens, scripture says, nobody can confess Christ is Lord unless by the power of the Holy Spirit, Jesus explained that 'as rebirth to Nicodemus, as not being able to see the kingdom of God, of which the cross binds it altogether, you've chosen a difficult gig dear friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Roy! :)
Comment from tfawcus
I loved the high-flown vocabulary of the delegate from the Regal High Command and the habit he had of cutting Dvorzgah in mid-speech. The poor fellow had trouble getting a word in edgeways at times. There is much potential for cutting satire in any follow-up. You have already raised the puzzling mix of Christianity and more ancient folklore, which is a fertile topic for investigation. Dvorzgah has the outside perspective of a Gulliver, which allows you as much leeway as Swift gave himself! Nothing short of a six for this one.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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I loved the high-flown vocabulary of the delegate from the Regal High Command and the habit he had of cutting Dvorzgah in mid-speech. The poor fellow had trouble getting a word in edgeways at times. There is much potential for cutting satire in any follow-up. You have already raised the puzzling mix of Christianity and more ancient folklore, which is a fertile topic for investigation. Dvorzgah has the outside perspective of a Gulliver, which allows you as much leeway as Swift gave himself! Nothing short of a six for this one.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, Tony - I really appreciate your positive feedback and generous six stars! :)
