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Return To Concorde Valley

Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Bath of the gods"
Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.

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Comment from Daylily
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An excellent chapter with some interesting background info revealed. I especially liked the part right before Theo carried her through the archway.

This opening sentence was a bit confusing for me:

Echo ran her hand along the smooth surface of an ornately carved archway. -- If it was ornately carved, would the surface be smooth? (Maybe just delete the word smooth?) Paragraph 4 indicates there is texture.

I am already eager to read the next posting! Smiles, Lily

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    Hi Lily! Thank you for the generous review, my friend!
    I totally agree on your assessment of that opening sentence. I changed it and it sounds better, thank you so much for the tip!

    Hugs,
    Rhonda
Comment from Mike Stevens
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda.....and talk about nerve racking, having to attend a meeting about who knows what, and having to walk down a staircase with others you barely know watching you, or not

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    Hi Mike. I love your unique perspectives, my friend.

    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Concorde Valley seems like a paradise, but Diantha is warning Echo that it isn't that simple. She is a human who was bought there for a reason and Echo is also there for a reason. You keep the reader reading just to find out that reason, and, of course, there a many interesting people to get to know.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    Hi Carol. Thank you for the review and comments. You?re right about the paradise having some thorns in it.

    Hugs,
    Rhonda
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I can't wait until Echo finds out what Theo and his dad wants to talk with her about. It sounds very important. I'm glad Diantha is from Echo's world so she can help guide her through this with understanding. I really like this story a lot and you're doing a wonderful job writing it. I'm already out of sixes.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    Awww, Barbara, thank you for your comments and review, my friend, and I?ll take that virtual 6 any time!

    Things are about to get dicey for the valley and its leadership!

    Hugs,
    Rhonda
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I miss that part of life, men being chivalrous. Women's libber's went rather too far in their fight for equality. This was a lovely chapter, Rhonda, the descriptions of Phoebus, aww, I stopped breathing for a moment, and that Echo saw a glimpse of this hunky body in Theo, I'm sure was a delight for Echo. Perhaps that is how he will soon look. This was a fabulous read, Rhonda, I really enjoyed it. Well done, my friend. Sandra xx

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    Thank you so much for the review, Sandra. Thank you for pointing out what worked. I hope you?ve posted as well, too. I?ll be looking!

    Hugs,
    Rhonda
Comment from Navada
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I love the beautiful descriptions of the carving and the artwork, followed by the entry to the pool and the enlightening conversations that followed. What a gorgeous and enchanting place!

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 Comment Written 11-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    Thank you, so much, Navada. I appreciate your comments and review.

    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from Sally Law
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Exceptional, my friend. This one had another sweet (kinda hot, actually) moment between Theo and Echo. I really enjoyed the story of Diantha's life and romance with Phoebus before coming to Concorde Valley. More knowing and coming of age for Echo as this place heals her. Love is so healing.

Sending you my best today as always, and love across the bridge,
Sal XOs

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    Hi Sally, and you for the six ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️!
    Thank you for the comments about the romances, too. I ended up staying up past midnight pulling it together. I was hoping, at least, for coherent, lol.
    Much love across the bridge,
    Rhonda
Comment from royowen
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I love the way you're mixing some myth and legend, and cleverly giving it some substance in your story, it's always smart to weave a knowledge of myth and legend into your narrative, it joins nicely with what you've already created Rhonda, well done, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 11-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    Thank you for taking time to review, Roy, and thank you for the helpful comments.

    Take care,
    Rhonda
reply by royowen on 11-Feb-2024
    Most welcome