Panpipes
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
The readers all agree so what is the stick in the spokes here? The reader can't really comprehend this: "'I wish there was.' He desperately wanted to save Abhamaru, but in his heart, he knew it was impossible." I love this description I might want to use it: "The sky was a seething mass of gunmetal grey." Things go from bad to worse. The sky's description was almost like a foreshadowing. We will have to wait and see if anything gets better in the next chapter.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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The readers all agree so what is the stick in the spokes here? The reader can't really comprehend this: "'I wish there was.' He desperately wanted to save Abhamaru, but in his heart, he knew it was impossible." I love this description I might want to use it: "The sky was a seething mass of gunmetal grey." Things go from bad to worse. The sky's description was almost like a foreshadowing. We will have to wait and see if anything gets better in the next chapter.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2024
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I look forward to your reviews, Liz. They prompt me to go back and read the earlier chapters. For Bapit, still a poor village boy at heart, the task of saving Abhamaru seems impossible. Also, his pride makes it difficult for him to accept help. This is a hurdle for Ayesha.
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He is very proud & it goes against him
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony.
I'm a bit behind again, but went back to read this episode. I enjoyed the development of the story, and some of the obstacles that Ayesha will face
like the laws about selling elephants to foreigners.
Where there's a will, there's a way; but where there's money, there's are many ways. And where there is a clever lawyer, money, and a determined woman, the way is more like a highway.
Well done. looking forward to the next chapter.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Hello Tony.
I'm a bit behind again, but went back to read this episode. I enjoyed the development of the story, and some of the obstacles that Ayesha will face
like the laws about selling elephants to foreigners.
Where there's a will, there's a way; but where there's money, there's are many ways. And where there is a clever lawyer, money, and a determined woman, the way is more like a highway.
Well done. looking forward to the next chapter.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
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Thanks for another six-star review, Robert. You spoil me.
If I had that amount of money, I wouldn't spend it on elephants - but then I'm not in love. Wife excepted, of course!
Comment from Cindy Warren
I'm sure she'll find a way to buy that elephant. There's always a roundabout way to do things. Seems Ayesha has decided who she wants to be and she's going to do something good with her money.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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I'm sure she'll find a way to buy that elephant. There's always a roundabout way to do things. Seems Ayesha has decided who she wants to be and she's going to do something good with her money.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Cindy. I appreciate your review.
I have a feeling she's going to do her darnedest.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a good chapter, solid and interesting.
I liked learning this part: Foreigners aren't allowed to buy elephants in Thailand. It's against the law.
Now I may have something to talk to my English-as-a-second-language neighbors from Thailand up the street.
I liked this description as well:
The road became a river of orange mud sweeping down the hillside, and rampant vines of morning glory clinging to Somchai's garden wall were cowed into submission by the onslaught.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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This is a good chapter, solid and interesting.
I liked learning this part: Foreigners aren't allowed to buy elephants in Thailand. It's against the law.
Now I may have something to talk to my English-as-a-second-language neighbors from Thailand up the street.
I liked this description as well:
The road became a river of orange mud sweeping down the hillside, and rampant vines of morning glory clinging to Somchai's garden wall were cowed into submission by the onslaught.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thanks for your kind words. I'm having to do quite a bit of research at the moment to check my facts. Even though this is a work of fiction! LOL
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I hope Ayesha can save Abhamaru, maybe place her in a sanctuary. I feel very bad about the way elephants are treated. Ayesha and Bapit are growing as a couple... I hope they stay together. Ayesha is helping Bapit find the strength to persevere.
Well done, Tony, another winner.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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I hope Ayesha can save Abhamaru, maybe place her in a sanctuary. I feel very bad about the way elephants are treated. Ayesha and Bapit are growing as a couple... I hope they stay together. Ayesha is helping Bapit find the strength to persevere.
Well done, Tony, another winner.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Gypsy. Ayesha has a lot to learn, but is helped by a steadily increasing resolve. We shall see where that leads. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Mrs. KT
Your writing is so incredibly engaging, Tony!
I enjoyed reading this chapter very much.
Of special import to me is interjection of your keen description and awareness of your characters' surroundings:
Before long the oppressive humidity defeated her, and she slumped down on her bed with her laptop balanced against her knees. The ceiling fan buzzed and whirred like a bombination of angry bees but wafted enough tepid air to cool her face.
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Much enjoyed, Tony.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Your writing is so incredibly engaging, Tony!
I enjoyed reading this chapter very much.
Of special import to me is interjection of your keen description and awareness of your characters' surroundings:
Before long the oppressive humidity defeated her, and she slumped down on her bed with her laptop balanced against her knees. The ceiling fan buzzed and whirred like a bombination of angry bees but wafted enough tepid air to cool her face.
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Much enjoyed, Tony.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Such a supportive review, Diane! I'm honoured! Six stars, too. Thank you so much. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Now I wonder what her proposal will be? She'll have to be careful how she puts it after her last 'conversation' with Chanarong. But it would be lovely if she can surprise Bapit. Can she buy the his land and all that stands on it? Perhaps put it in Bapits name? Sorry, I'm dashing ahead. Lol. I'm looking forward to the next part. Well done, Tony. Great story! :)) Sandra xx
Congratulations on your win. It deserved it. :) xx
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Now I wonder what her proposal will be? She'll have to be careful how she puts it after her last 'conversation' with Chanarong. But it would be lovely if she can surprise Bapit. Can she buy the his land and all that stands on it? Perhaps put it in Bapits name? Sorry, I'm dashing ahead. Lol. I'm looking forward to the next part. Well done, Tony. Great story! :)) Sandra xx
Congratulations on your win. It deserved it. :) xx
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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It's not just Ayesha having to think carefully about how she should approach Chanarong! Me, too!
Thanks so much for your continued support and for the sixth star. Greatly appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
ps I was in touch with Jim a few days ago. He has acquired a dog called Lucky. I can't think of a better cure for the doldrums. He sounded more cheerful. The approach of Spring should also help.
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Yes, he lives alone in the wilds of Wales and really needed company. I'm glad he has Lucky, I think the name is good for both of them. Thanks, Tony.
As for Ayesha, I'm sure you'll come up with a brilliant idea! 😊
Comment from Navada
I really like the fact that Ayesha's heart remains in the right place - there would be so many good reasons why she could have decamped but she has chosen to stay put. I did notice the word bombination in one of the paras - did you mean combination? Looking forward to learning more about Abhamaru's fate. :)
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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I really like the fact that Ayesha's heart remains in the right place - there would be so many good reasons why she could have decamped but she has chosen to stay put. I did notice the word bombination in one of the paras - did you mean combination? Looking forward to learning more about Abhamaru's fate. :)
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Yes, perhaps Ayesha is made of sterner stuff than one might at first have imagined.
bombination: the act or sound of humming or buzzing.
An obscure word but I rather liked the onomatopoeic feel of it in the context.
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Aha - thank you for teaching me something new! It is indeed onomatopoeic. :)
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Ayesha has such confidence that she can help make good things happen. She may be rich, but maybe not as much as she thinks. She so wants to save the elephant and make Bapit happy again. You have created really interesting characters and an unusual background setting for most of your readers.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Ayesha has such confidence that she can help make good things happen. She may be rich, but maybe not as much as she thinks. She so wants to save the elephant and make Bapit happy again. You have created really interesting characters and an unusual background setting for most of your readers.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Carol. Glad you're still enjoying it. Yes, Ayesha seems to be growing stronger by the minute. Let's hope she can put that to good effect.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
An elephant in bad condition for $65,000 that doesn't seem rational with what it costs to feed them. What determines their value? She does not do tricks, and is not trained for anything.What is her value? Karen
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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An elephant in bad condition for $65,000 that doesn't seem rational with what it costs to feed them. What determines their value? She does not do tricks, and is not trained for anything.What is her value? Karen
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Somchai may be overestimating. However, I was basing his estimate on a Google search from Aug 2020 ? An elephant usually sells for around 2 million baht ? about ?54,000, or $64,000 ? with young animals fetching the highest prices.
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I can see the young going for a lot. I am surprised, I had no idea. :-) Karen
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Sorry about all the random question marks!
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I see that quite a bit on here. People must type too fast.
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Not that. Cut-and-paste into FanStory can produce some bizarre results. They weren't there when I hit the send button.
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I wondered why I would see it so often,
