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The Blunder

a 100 word story

13 total reviews 
Comment from Bill Schott
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This hundred-word story, The Blunder, has the proper formatting and might better be categorized as a happy accident, or serendipity. Tony meets Lily on the girl's school bus.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 18-Feb-2024
    Yes, a happy accident for Tony and Lily. Glad you enjoyed my shortie, Bill. Thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from tempeste
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Ciao!

Yes girls love bad boys , those that break the rules, the black sheep of the herd, so to speak.

After some time the attraction weans off though.

Bad boys, Richard Burton and Richard Harris were married several times, obviously their wives got tired of their wild behaviour.

Peter O'Toole's wife stuck with him for 20 years and then divorced.

Despite Oliver Reed s famous booze days with mentioned actors above his wife remained with him to his death. Lucky him!

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    Hi, tempeste. I really appreciate your continuous support of my writing. I am not sure the boy in this story is a bad boy. He?s a sleepy-head who got on the wrong bus and got lucky. Many thanks again. Rod
reply by tempeste on 11-Feb-2024
    Sorry for screwing up 😕

    When I read : bleary -eyed for some reason i thought you meant the boy was a bit tipsy hence he took the wrong bus..

    Congratulations on your win🍾🥂
Comment from pome lover
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Rod, it's an honor sharing 1st place with you.
funny story about the boy on the wrong bus.
But he wouldn't probably have met her otherwise.
cute!
Katharine

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 11-Feb-2024
    Thank you, Katharine. It?s a pleasure to be reviewed by a co-winner. So pleased you like my story. Rod
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Very cleverly written.
He must've been cute. Otherwise why would Lily want anything to do with a stumbling, breary-eyed goof who got on a wrong bus?
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
    You got it, Wayne. I wondered, too. Many thanks for sharing and praising my story.
Comment from Tiara L Hawthorne
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I must say what a privilege to read such a work. You took this prompt seriously. You have perfect imagery, suspense kept me hanging on each word. I was interested the whole way. Good read.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
    Tiara, I am delighted you enjoyed my shortie so much. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from Julie Helms
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A chance meeting ordained by fate! That is a truly funny set up. Kind of surprised the bus driver didn't say anything. Great story. Best of luck in the contest. Julie

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
    Thank you, Julie. I am delighted you enjoyed my shortie
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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That's cute but a little pushier than my own experience as a school girl. This is excellent writing for the challenge! It has good descriptive words and imagery. Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed reviewing it.

Best wishes!

Alex

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
    Hi, Alex, I think some girls are much pushier today than when I was this age. Still,I am pleased you enjoyed my story?s words and imagery.
Comment from Wendy G
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I liked this for its cleverness and gentle humour, and for the positive outcome of his mistake. Well written and an excellent image for the presentation. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
    Hi, Wendy. I am delighted you enjoyed my shortie and truly appreciate your praise.
Comment from sherrygreywolf
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You have written an incredibly cute entry for the 100 Word Dash contest. You word count is correct and the story has all the required elements, as well as a dose of humor. Great job and good luck!

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 08-Feb-2024
    I so appreciate your enthusiastic response to my shortie, Sherry. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from Yusita
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Well done with this story! You've done a great job with this prompt. The story is concise, gives just enough details, and it's humorous too. Loved it.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2024


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
    Thank you very much, Yusita. I truly appreciate the applause for my shortie.