2024 Japanese Poetry
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10 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
A beautiful read,
"The Universe
became my skin
and the flower moon
was my heart
beating in the dark" it is as though we are lost yet so very comfortable on our own, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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A beautiful read,
"The Universe
became my skin
and the flower moon
was my heart
beating in the dark" it is as though we are lost yet so very comfortable on our own, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 04-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
this poem is so very beautiful. It holds a dream like state to me as it allows me to float within the thought of every verse.
All I can say is how you are hitting your intended marks in creating such beauty with solid, construction, composition, presentation and connection. Every poem I read seems to soar that little higher.
The quality of anything written is within the connection it reveals to its reader... this poem did that, and then some!
You MariVal, are a very switched on wordsmith. Your power: the ability to allow your reader and fans to join you on every journey through the power of an authentic passion, written in such a magic way.
Absolutely stunning!
Warmest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2024
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Hi MariVal,
this poem is so very beautiful. It holds a dream like state to me as it allows me to float within the thought of every verse.
All I can say is how you are hitting your intended marks in creating such beauty with solid, construction, composition, presentation and connection. Every poem I read seems to soar that little higher.
The quality of anything written is within the connection it reveals to its reader... this poem did that, and then some!
You MariVal, are a very switched on wordsmith. Your power: the ability to allow your reader and fans to join you on every journey through the power of an authentic passion, written in such a magic way.
Absolutely stunning!
Warmest regards,
James.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2024
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James, it's so good to hear from you. Your exceptional six stars review and insightful feedback is all I want. You express yourself so beautifully and I feel you know what I mean in every word I write. I'm so thankful you took the time to read and review my poem. I really appreciate your kind words.
Con cariņo, tu amiga,
MariVal
"there is nothing to writing. all you do is sit down at a typewriter and bleed." - ernest hemingway
Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, this is a very beautiful Yamato Uta Poem you have penned. You used great descriptive words and truly amazing imagery from the artwork you chose. I hope to one day be able to write some of these formats. love and blessings, Teri.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Gypsy, this is a very beautiful Yamato Uta Poem you have penned. You used great descriptive words and truly amazing imagery from the artwork you chose. I hope to one day be able to write some of these formats. love and blessings, Teri.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much, Teri. Have a wonderful weekend.
MariVal
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy....and the kind of poem I wish I could write, reality with an artistic bent, dreamlike. My style is Dragnet style, just the facts, ma'am
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Another fine poem, Gypsy....and the kind of poem I wish I could write, reality with an artistic bent, dreamlike. My style is Dragnet style, just the facts, ma'am
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
In a novel that I'm writing I have my heroine often search the sky for inspiration. She's an unwed pregnant romance writer. This poem fits her perfectly. Her name is Rebeka. Thank you for reading my mind.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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In a novel that I'm writing I have my heroine often search the sky for inspiration. She's an unwed pregnant romance writer. This poem fits her perfectly. Her name is Rebeka. Thank you for reading my mind.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Hehe... great minds think alike.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
i love thunderstorms... that last stanza had me at every imagistic word!
love the colours throughout the smooth flow of lines bringing each word to life
cool pink moon and blue butterfly pic, too - love those colours together
a very nice yamato uta free verse...
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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i love thunderstorms... that last stanza had me at every imagistic word!
love the colours throughout the smooth flow of lines bringing each word to life
cool pink moon and blue butterfly pic, too - love those colours together
a very nice yamato uta free verse...
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
This seemed to mimick life. The smooth almost dreamy quality when things are going good. Then out of nowhere that crack of thunder and flash of lightning. Things suddenly frightening. But there on the horizon light winks at us. All will be well again. Beautifully done. Gretchen
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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This seemed to mimick life. The smooth almost dreamy quality when things are going good. Then out of nowhere that crack of thunder and flash of lightning. Things suddenly frightening. But there on the horizon light winks at us. All will be well again. Beautifully done. Gretchen
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Love this Yamato Uta poem. It's very romantic. I like that you use a moon as your heart and thunder like a song with electrifying notes. So creative.
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Love this Yamato Uta poem. It's very romantic. I like that you use a moon as your heart and thunder like a song with electrifying notes. So creative.
Well done.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review, Lisa. I hope you're well.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from patcelaw
This is very nicely written for the club event, and I wish you the very very best with all of your writing. I do hope that you will have a wonderful evening and that your weekend will be blessed. Patricia
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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This is very nicely written for the club event, and I wish you the very very best with all of your writing. I do hope that you will have a wonderful evening and that your weekend will be blessed. Patricia
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a lovely day.
Gypsy hugs
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
I didn't know that Pisces was the largest constellation! I mostly look for Orion as that's the easiest one for me to identify. Loved your ebullient poem about the beautiful spring night sky!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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I didn't know that Pisces was the largest constellation! I mostly look for Orion as that's the easiest one for me to identify. Loved your ebullient poem about the beautiful spring night sky!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Big Sister. I didn't know Pisces was the largest constellation either
love,
marival
