Saltwater Ghosts
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Flying Embers"Young girl with special abilities.
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Comment from Navada
As an only girl who adored my dear late father, I really resonated with this chapter. I like the way you explored their respective characters and backstories here. Only one little spag issue I noticed - "the glow ripples across is face". I do enjoy spending time with Heddy. :)
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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As an only girl who adored my dear late father, I really resonated with this chapter. I like the way you explored their respective characters and backstories here. Only one little spag issue I noticed - "the glow ripples across is face". I do enjoy spending time with Heddy. :)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thank you for this excellent review and for catching the edit. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
I loved this chapter. The bond between a father and a daughter is special. Girls grow up to want a husband like their father if they've been treated well I believe. I just love the way you capture the thoughts of Heddy, asking the hard questions, wanting time alone with her dad. Very touching gal, well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
I loved this chapter. The bond between a father and a daughter is special. Girls grow up to want a husband like their father if they've been treated well I believe. I just love the way you capture the thoughts of Heddy, asking the hard questions, wanting time alone with her dad. Very touching gal, well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm thrilled with your nice review and thesixth star. Gretchen
Comment from tfawcus
Marvellous characterisation in this, Gretchen. I can build a rounded impression of each character from the way they talk and act, and from the way they think.
There is a beautifully understated emotional tension running through the chapter. Very much enjoyed.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Marvellous characterisation in this, Gretchen. I can build a rounded impression of each character from the way they talk and act, and from the way they think.
There is a beautifully understated emotional tension running through the chapter. Very much enjoyed.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Thank you for this encouraging review and the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Such an atmospheric read as they sit by the fire talking in such meaningful dialogue. Love the analogy of the parrot v observer. I worry now for Willis as that plume of embers shoots towards the sky. This is such a gentle but powerful read that has me hooked. Thanks for sharing, Gretchen. Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Such an atmospheric read as they sit by the fire talking in such meaningful dialogue. Love the analogy of the parrot v observer. I worry now for Willis as that plume of embers shoots towards the sky. This is such a gentle but powerful read that has me hooked. Thanks for sharing, Gretchen. Debbie
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
This is a nice scene with Heddy an her father on the beach together enjoying the fire. It sound like a caring family that plays games with their little girl and praya for the son who is away at war.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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This is a nice scene with Heddy an her father on the beach together enjoying the fire. It sound like a caring family that plays games with their little girl and praya for the son who is away at war.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, Beth. I really appreciate this encouraging review and the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Who is Artie? Is he her brother? A sad story but peaceful and hopeful.
As always, you write so well.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Who is Artie? Is he her brother? A sad story but peaceful and hopeful.
As always, you write so well.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Artie is a stranger who is living in Dr. Monroe's abandoned house. Thank you so much for this awesome review. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yep, I'm guessing that God's will will always be done, whether we like it or not. But it's probably best to pray about things so he will at least know where your thoughts are. :-) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Yep, I'm guessing that God's will will always be done, whether we like it or not. But it's probably best to pray about things so he will at least know where your thoughts are. :-) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Ric. We don't always get what we want from those prayers but it still helps to pray. Gretchen
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a really lovely chapter, Gretchen. I wished I could have been sitting next to that fire, listening to the easy chatter. Father and daughter have such a warm relationship, That was the only answer Heddy's father could give her, and it was the truth. Love this story, my friend. Warmest hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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That was a really lovely chapter, Gretchen. I wished I could have been sitting next to that fire, listening to the easy chatter. Father and daughter have such a warm relationship, That was the only answer Heddy's father could give her, and it was the truth. Love this story, my friend. Warmest hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much, Sandra. I really appreciate the encouraging review. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So true about Willis. God's will. I can't wait to discover more about Willis. I really like this story. Heddy is a great character.
After weeding I fell asleep reading my book. (comma needed after 'weeding,')
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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So true about Willis. God's will. I can't wait to discover more about Willis. I really like this story. Heddy is a great character.
After weeding I fell asleep reading my book. (comma needed after 'weeding,')
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much for this encouraging review and for the edit. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This is a nostalgic and bittersweet story, and I like Heddy. She is full of life. She is curious. I am all caught up now. Winter is my worst time the cold and wet wear me down. I did not read or write much in January. But as things warm up, I will. :-) Karen
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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This is a nostalgic and bittersweet story, and I like Heddy. She is full of life. She is curious. I am all caught up now. Winter is my worst time the cold and wet wear me down. I did not read or write much in January. But as things warm up, I will. :-) Karen
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Karen. I'm glad you are caught up. I was less active in December but am coming around now. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen
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