The Owl Cries
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46 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
Wow! This is quite an undertaking. Writing about what is going on in Germany with wwII and the death camps must take a lot of research. I will be interested in reading this book. THis is an excellent start. I look forward to more.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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Wow! This is quite an undertaking. Writing about what is going on in Germany with wwII and the death camps must take a lot of research. I will be interested in reading this book. THis is an excellent start. I look forward to more.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2024
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What a doll you are to go back into what I already wrote and leaving me such an amazing review Beth,
Lisa
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a very captivating story. The period of the holocaust was very brutal. The characters are clearly defined. Each detail in this story flow well. I could feel the anxiety and drama with the main character. Thank you for your notes. Good story.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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This is a very captivating story. The period of the holocaust was very brutal. The characters are clearly defined. Each detail in this story flow well. I could feel the anxiety and drama with the main character. Thank you for your notes. Good story.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my story. I plan to write more...
Lisa
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and very well written story. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from your words as well. There is a lot of good dialogue. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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This is a very interesting and very well written story. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from your words as well. There is a lot of good dialogue. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 06-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2024
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Oh good I am so happy you found my story. But it did not appear in your messages and that concerns me.... Did you click on my name in your Fan list to see if it says we are already Fans/ If it does then there is an issue...
I am delighted that you read and enjoyed my first attempt at writing a First Chapter... Hoping to write more.
Hugs and love to you,
Lisa
Comment from Sarita Méndez
This is very well written. One can feel the fear these poor people felt when they were in the camps, or when they had the luck to escape but had to hide in order that the German won't capture them again.
This is such a sad and cruel moment of the world's history, and should never be forgotten by the younger generations in order to avoid that another cruel war occurs again...
Sadly, it seems that some men can't do anything else than creating conflicts and being at war...
Thank you for sharing this story and good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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This is very well written. One can feel the fear these poor people felt when they were in the camps, or when they had the luck to escape but had to hide in order that the German won't capture them again.
This is such a sad and cruel moment of the world's history, and should never be forgotten by the younger generations in order to avoid that another cruel war occurs again...
Sadly, it seems that some men can't do anything else than creating conflicts and being at war...
Thank you for sharing this story and good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much Sarita for taking the time to read and review my First Chapter.
I am glad you felt it was well written... means a lot to me...
Lisa
Comment from Sanku
Auschwitz and notoriety is well known .But have we learnt any lessons? i am afraid more such camps can come up
it is well written and carries the reader easily . .I am hoping to read a successful escape story..
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Auschwitz and notoriety is well known .But have we learnt any lessons? i am afraid more such camps can come up
it is well written and carries the reader easily . .I am hoping to read a successful escape story..
Comment Written 01-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you dear Sanku for taking the time to read my First Chapter, I really appreciate it.
You are right... we all need to make sure that there are no more camps,
Lisa
Comment from Douglas Goff
Yes, it is long, but that is required. This seems like it will be a very interesting book. The historic era is ripe with raw emotion and tends to be very fertile ground for writers.
What a time it must have actually been to be alive in the world. Great job and good luck in the competition!
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Yes, it is long, but that is required. This seems like it will be a very interesting book. The historic era is ripe with raw emotion and tends to be very fertile ground for writers.
What a time it must have actually been to be alive in the world. Great job and good luck in the competition!
D
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much Doug for taking the time to read and review my first Chapter...and this is my first time tring to write a chapter...
I did a lot of research....
Lisa
Comment from Julie Fudge Smith1
I enjoyed your chapter Lisa. It was obvious that you did your research for this piece and those details add to the drama of the chapter and its sense of foreboding.
One thing that caught me however, was your extensive use of adverbs that took me out of the story and into writing/edit mode. It left me wondering if 1) A more active verb would keep the narrative flowing (for example instead of "carefully pulling the glass..." it might read "easing the glass...") and/or 2) Could you leave off the adverb altogether to tighten up the sentence? (For example "he cautiously peers inside.." could just be "he peers inside..)
These of course are stylistic edits. Personally I love adverbs, so I mention this only because I have been told, and found it to be true, that a careful and precise use of adverbs strengthens your writing.
I was left wondering how they got out of the camp, where Ephraim was, and why hadn't Iba's father and brother returned. I want to know more and I'm looking forward to Chapter 2.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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I enjoyed your chapter Lisa. It was obvious that you did your research for this piece and those details add to the drama of the chapter and its sense of foreboding.
One thing that caught me however, was your extensive use of adverbs that took me out of the story and into writing/edit mode. It left me wondering if 1) A more active verb would keep the narrative flowing (for example instead of "carefully pulling the glass..." it might read "easing the glass...") and/or 2) Could you leave off the adverb altogether to tighten up the sentence? (For example "he cautiously peers inside.." could just be "he peers inside..)
These of course are stylistic edits. Personally I love adverbs, so I mention this only because I have been told, and found it to be true, that a careful and precise use of adverbs strengthens your writing.
I was left wondering how they got out of the camp, where Ephraim was, and why hadn't Iba's father and brother returned. I want to know more and I'm looking forward to Chapter 2.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my story. This is my very first time writing a First Chapter for a book. I am actually a poet..
I thank you for your input and will see if your thoughts work well into my writing. I just read your story and plan to review it tomorrow. I wish you the best of luck.
Lisasview, now in Spain
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Thank you for reading my chapter. I look forward to seeing your review.
I was a student in Madrid, Spain for 9 months (it's where I met my husband) and loved the country. The main character in my book, The Beast Keepers, spends three years in Malaga on a horse farm. Where are you located, if you don't mind me asking.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is interesting and very well written. Your descriptions were full and easy to follow as I read. Very emotional and it feels uplifting. I look forward to reading more of your book.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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This is interesting and very well written. Your descriptions were full and easy to follow as I read. Very emotional and it feels uplifting. I look forward to reading more of your book.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Hi there Alexan,
I am delighted to know you like my First Chapter!
Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Always appreciated.
Lisa
Comment from Navada
This is a really powerful beginning to the story, Lisa. It is such emotive subject matter. I'm very keen to learn more about Jacob's and Liba's respective experiences.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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This is a really powerful beginning to the story, Lisa. It is such emotive subject matter. I'm very keen to learn more about Jacob's and Liba's respective experiences.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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How kind of you dear Navada to leave me such a very nice review.
Lisa
Comment from Bob Schatz
The bleakness of the story definitely comes through, as does the mindset of the characters. The tension of the story is palpable. All in all, it's very effective Lisa! (It so happens I have a few friends/colleagues from Poland; I'm collaborating on a research project with one of them.)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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The bleakness of the story definitely comes through, as does the mindset of the characters. The tension of the story is palpable. All in all, it's very effective Lisa! (It so happens I have a few friends/colleagues from Poland; I'm collaborating on a research project with one of them.)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2024
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Thank you so very much Bob for your great and inspiring review!
All my very best to you,
Lisa
