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A story of paternal puzzlement

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Comment from Tom Horonzy
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Ugh. To begin a day with the thought you are sharing was rather intimidating until the end when finally a humorous moment made me laugh. Gladly, my wife took on that challenge.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much!
Comment from Lisasview
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This is an excellent read dear secret writer.
I actually cried through part of it and laughed at the end.
It is extremely well written...clearly thought out, etc.
Of course everyone wonders I am sure how you finally got the correct pad?
I so wish my first experience had been more like yours...
Lisasview

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much! Xo
reply by Lisasview on 22-Jan-2024
    Oh I thought this was for a blind contest Jessica?
    Lisa
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
    Yes, it was. But the contest has ended :)
reply by Lisasview on 22-Jan-2024
    Oh now o understand
Comment from Navada
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Oh, my God! This one really made me laugh out loud! Poor Dad. He was doing his best to be helpful, but just didn't get it. I'm sure my poor dear old Dad would have done exactly the same thing. :)

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Thesis
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This is a good post. Being a Girl Dad, I understand how young girls can become instantly embarrassed. I was lucky. My daughters could always ask me for anything. If they needed pads, I would go to the store and get them for them. To me, those things were natural and I never wanted them to feel embarrassed. Anyway, I was totally outnumbered. I had four females in the house: my wife, two daughters, and yes, even the dog is a girl.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
    Your girls are very lucky!! Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from LJbutterfly
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The opening sentence of your story provided the perfect hook to capture the reader's interest. With interspersed humor, your story continued to flow smoothly with clear descriptions and realistic dialogue. Your artwook paired perfectly. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from Mae Wright
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I absolutely love this. I couldn't stop laughing. I didn't laugh at the dilemma but the thought of your father honestly caring enough to want to be all that he could be for you and still missing the mark. This what we do as parents some times. We miss the mark with good intentions. There is a message here for us all. Keep writing. You're on to something.
Mae

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
    That means the world. Thank you so much! Xo
Comment from Julie Helms
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Very funny story! It is one probably 50% of the population can relate to. :-)

I have a suggestion. I would consider changing the title. I kind of had it figured out, your pad/pad switch, before I got to that part of the story because of the title. So I think it took away a little of the punch of your reveal.

Awesome job! Julie

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 Comment Written 16-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
    I was afraid of that!! Thanks so much, I will change it! :) xoxo
Comment from Yusita
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I loved the story--hilarious! And I loved the way you told it--brilliantly... in a way that maintained my attention, and I like how you broke your story up. It made it easier to read and kept it from being "daunting". A great write!

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 Comment Written 16-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
    :) :) Thank you so much! Xo