Panpipes
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
You've written his adjustment and practice as if you have practiced it yourself. We really get the experience as if we were practicing it ourselves.
Ayesha used a great tactic, I often use for sundry reasons, that of distraction. It worked well, plus she was learning something. No we can worry about Aisha and what's going to happen to her financially.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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You've written his adjustment and practice as if you have practiced it yourself. We really get the experience as if we were practicing it ourselves.
Ayesha used a great tactic, I often use for sundry reasons, that of distraction. It worked well, plus she was learning something. No we can worry about Aisha and what's going to happen to her financially.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thanks, Liz. Fortunately, I'm sound of wind and limb. This is all a combination of research and imagination.
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Velly Intelesting
Comment from Gloria ....
I quite enjoyed this journey from Australia, to Phuket and then back to Australia again.
Joining the learning of the panpipes with relearning how to walk again for Bapit and Ayesha demonstrates a commitment based on more than frivolities.
Excellent setting as always and the arrest of Bruno's friend for trafficking opens the case of learning about Bruno's business dealings.
I enjoyed this chapter very much, Tony. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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I quite enjoyed this journey from Australia, to Phuket and then back to Australia again.
Joining the learning of the panpipes with relearning how to walk again for Bapit and Ayesha demonstrates a commitment based on more than frivolities.
Excellent setting as always and the arrest of Bruno's friend for trafficking opens the case of learning about Bruno's business dealings.
I enjoyed this chapter very much, Tony. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thanks for the review, Gloria. Appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I like your story line where Bapit teaches her to play the panpipes and she encourages him to keep working at learning to walk again. It will be sweat if Ayesha ends up with all Bruno's ill-gotten gains. I have really been enjoying this story.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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I like your story line where Bapit teaches her to play the panpipes and she encourages him to keep working at learning to walk again. It will be sweat if Ayesha ends up with all Bruno's ill-gotten gains. I have really been enjoying this story.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thanks for your review and comments, Carol. Greatly appreciated. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Loved that fall into her arms as Ayesha tries saving Bapit from a fall. Great entrance and you wrote the hospital scenes well Tony. I could easily visualise it as I read. Great chapter.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Loved that fall into her arms as Ayesha tries saving Bapit from a fall. Great entrance and you wrote the hospital scenes well Tony. I could easily visualise it as I read. Great chapter.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thanks for your review and comments, Valda. Greatly appreciated. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Cindy Warren
That lawyer is a real slimer, and she knows it. Can she have him replaced? He's clearly after the money and perhaps a little more on the side. I don't know if she and Bapit should end up together. They're from different worlds, but perhaps she could buy the elephant for him and he could be happy and earn a living.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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That lawyer is a real slimer, and she knows it. Can she have him replaced? He's clearly after the money and perhaps a little more on the side. I don't know if she and Bapit should end up together. They're from different worlds, but perhaps she could buy the elephant for him and he could be happy and earn a living.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thanks for your review and comments, Cindy. You make a good point about Bapit and Ayesha being a probable mismatch. Greatly appreciated. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
That was clever of Ayesha (ie the author) to use the bamboo wot
to draw Bapit out of his depression and connect the two learning experiences, each with their own difficulties, though Bapit's situation is going to be difficult. But his love of the pipes could give him something to make his life meaningful. The encounter and dialogue between them is very well done.
While her legal problems may be daunting, and life among the sharks precarious, I suspect the inheritance will be like a healing salve on a festering wound. It sounds like she will be rich, which should also help Bapit's position. And Ken Suttle will have incentive to maintain Ayesha as a client, so he can continue to earn the legal fees. Hopefully, his name is positive.
Nicely done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Have you ever played the panpipes? I remember listening to Zamfir play them years ago.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Hello Tony,
That was clever of Ayesha (ie the author) to use the bamboo wot
to draw Bapit out of his depression and connect the two learning experiences, each with their own difficulties, though Bapit's situation is going to be difficult. But his love of the pipes could give him something to make his life meaningful. The encounter and dialogue between them is very well done.
While her legal problems may be daunting, and life among the sharks precarious, I suspect the inheritance will be like a healing salve on a festering wound. It sounds like she will be rich, which should also help Bapit's position. And Ken Suttle will have incentive to maintain Ayesha as a client, so he can continue to earn the legal fees. Hopefully, his name is positive.
Nicely done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Have you ever played the panpipes? I remember listening to Zamfir play them years ago.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thanks for yet another in-depth review and star shower. I appreciate your positive comments.
Yes, I remember Zamfir well. I have a recording somewhere. I've always enjoyed the panpipes, but as for playing them, my efforts were on a par with Ayesha's first attempts.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
My brother lives in Thailand and he has to renew his visa every sixty days too. It's annoying. Your story always reminds me of him. It's very realistic.
Loosing balance and control of his body must be terrifying. It would be for me.
I love that their relationshipis growing... "There was laughter and there were tears. There were successes and failures."
And real fears...
"Tears of frustration welled up in Bapit's eyes. 'I can't do it. I shan't ever be able to. I just keep falling.' .....this reminds me of my grandson. He hasn't learned the concept of the end of things that usually get better with time.
"I will never be able to do this! Never! I am finished. Finished,'
Ayesha had a genius idea by getting Bapit to focus on teaching her how to play the pipes.
The story is moving along nicely. Good character and plot development.
Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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My brother lives in Thailand and he has to renew his visa every sixty days too. It's annoying. Your story always reminds me of him. It's very realistic.
Loosing balance and control of his body must be terrifying. It would be for me.
I love that their relationshipis growing... "There was laughter and there were tears. There were successes and failures."
And real fears...
"Tears of frustration welled up in Bapit's eyes. 'I can't do it. I shan't ever be able to. I just keep falling.' .....this reminds me of my grandson. He hasn't learned the concept of the end of things that usually get better with time.
"I will never be able to do this! Never! I am finished. Finished,'
Ayesha had a genius idea by getting Bapit to focus on teaching her how to play the pipes.
The story is moving along nicely. Good character and plot development.
Well done!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Gypsy, for this in-depth review and affirmation that the setting is realistic. Greatly appreciated. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Treischel
You covered the recovery of Bapit with charm, determination, depression, and even a touch of humor. It was touching and romantic. Then the lawyer visit was very realistic, showing Ayesha's concerns well. An excellent chapter.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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You covered the recovery of Bapit with charm, determination, depression, and even a touch of humor. It was touching and romantic. Then the lawyer visit was very realistic, showing Ayesha's concerns well. An excellent chapter.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thanks for your review and comments, Tom. Greatly appreciated. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from BethShelby
It is good in spite of problem with imperfection that she is willing to be there for Bapit. She seem intelligent an I hope she can learn enough about the world of high finance that she want me taken advantage. It seems that her story will continue to intersect with that of Bapit.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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It is good in spite of problem with imperfection that she is willing to be there for Bapit. She seem intelligent an I hope she can learn enough about the world of high finance that she want me taken advantage. It seems that her story will continue to intersect with that of Bapit.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2024
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Thanks for your review and comments, Beth. Greatly appreciated. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I wouldn't mind learning to swim with that amount of money keeping me afloat! But, I'm sure there will be some problems ahead.
I really loved the way Ayesha got Bapit to teach her to play the pipes, and twisted it around so he had to practice walking with his prosthesis. I liked the name IPOD, are they really called that?
There was a lot in this chapter, Tony, it was a terrific read, and I'm really enjoying it. Well done again! :) Sandra
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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I wouldn't mind learning to swim with that amount of money keeping me afloat! But, I'm sure there will be some problems ahead.
I really loved the way Ayesha got Bapit to teach her to play the pipes, and twisted it around so he had to practice walking with his prosthesis. I liked the name IPOD, are they really called that?
There was a lot in this chapter, Tony, it was a terrific read, and I'm really enjoying it. Well done again! :) Sandra
Comment Written 15-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Sandra. It seems that Ayesha is coming up smelling of roses! Yes, these prosthetic devices are called IPODs (devices) in some parts of the world and IPOPs (prostheses) in others. I couldn't resist the silly play on acronyms! I appreciate your positive review and the sixth star. Sorry to have been so long in responding. Life gets in the way of art sometimes! LOL All good wishes, Tony
