Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is very well done for the 34 syllable contest. I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a wonderful Christmas day and may you also have a happy and prosperous new year ahead. Patric.

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023

thank you patric 😁👍💙🖋️🦄

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Good syllables count and connection between lines. Your entry for the 34 syllables is sad but beautiful too. Good job! I wish you the best for the contest.





mem'ries 2
of a broken mind 5
lost dreams 2
of a scarred heart 4 13
icy rain 3
s p l a t t e r e d 2
on the windows to my soul 7 12
i bandage them 4
in words unspoken 5 9 34

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023

thank you gypsy! 😁👍💙🖊️🦄😎

Comment from Mark D. R.

Exceptional

Shelley,

You created a terrific poem for this contest. Your overall presentation raised you to the highest rung - congrats on that achievement. Each segment has deep meanings. Your concluding one is my favorite.

Mark

P.S. While you did not capitalize "i," I do like e.e.cummings format style (-;

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023

LOL! thank you mark! 😅😁👍💙🖊️🦄

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Yup, band-aids do come to our aide when we receive a wound. The band-aide comforts and protects our injury. Seriously, does Jesus keep forgiving if we keep covering them up?

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023

lol thank you rosemary 🤔😊👍💙🖋️🦄

Comment from jaded831

Excellent

Very impressive, poetic, and touches not only the heart, but the soul. Words unspoken of pain, tend to eat at the soul, when the explosion happens, hopefully the pain is not on others.

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Dec-2023

cool. thank you jade 🙂👍💙🖊️🦄

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is a beautifully expressed and presented verse, poignantly and vividly listing the sorrows and hurt that have impacted so deeply, beyond the capacity to frame them in words. Great job! Thanks for sharing and good luck! A strong contender. Debbie

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023

thank you debbie! 😊

Comment from jim vecchio

Excellent

This was one of the more creative approaches to the 34 word contest. Beautiful presentation and white font combine to accentuate your message. It is difficult to treat a broken mind and lost dreams with bandages of words.

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023

cool. thank you jim :)

reply by jim vecchio on 23-Dec-2023

cool to hear from you!

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I think the wonderful thing of having old scars, is the forgiveness of imperfections comes through the cross, they can be healed, dreams, in a general sense can be retained, I've found with age, dreams become less self generated and more US generated, they change, beautifully wrutten, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023

thank you roy :)

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

A very thought provoking poem. You made good use of the 34 syllables.
I really like your well chosen artwork and presentation.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Jen.

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023

thank you jen :)

Comment from gramalot8

Excellent

You did a fantastic in presenting us this thought provoking poem in exactly the required 34 words. That is not easily achieved.
I feel the pain of lost words with your words. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023

thank you gramalot! 😊