Ca(t)ching Acorns
Haiku-like 5-5-5 (sun slants through bare limbs)3 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
I missed the voting and for once I guess it was a good thing. I saw the contest in the booth late this afternoon and said I'll vote tonight.
You won the blue ribbon and no sharing.
Squirrels are so cute , I love to watch them . We had one for a couple of years in our garden and I would leave walnuts for him .
My Lolita was a squirrel monkey , she did look somewhat like these entertaining rodents.
Back to your poem , I love the first part : sun slants through bare limbs.
Slant for sun rays and limbs for trees in autumn
And I love the double meaning of caching : fallen and hiding /store away referred to the acorns .
An entry worthy of a sixer.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
Ciao !
I missed the voting and for once I guess it was a good thing. I saw the contest in the booth late this afternoon and said I'll vote tonight.
You won the blue ribbon and no sharing.
Squirrels are so cute , I love to watch them . We had one for a couple of years in our garden and I would leave walnuts for him .
My Lolita was a squirrel monkey , she did look somewhat like these entertaining rodents.
Back to your poem , I love the first part : sun slants through bare limbs.
Slant for sun rays and limbs for trees in autumn
And I love the double meaning of caching : fallen and hiding /store away referred to the acorns .
An entry worthy of a sixer.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thanks for your review and commentary. Pleased you liked my double entendre with cache and catch!
We have had a white-tailed squirrel visit our yard. It may be on long vacation from the neighborhood since I have not seen that squirrel for sometime now.
Mark
Comment from Ginda Simpson
And doesn't "cache" mean to hide things away in a certain place? With this double entendre, you Haiku becomes even more entertaining. It creates an image and a mood.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
And doesn't "cache" mean to hide things away in a certain place? With this double entendre, you Haiku becomes even more entertaining. It creates an image and a mood.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Gina,
So pleased with your response to this contest entry!
Comment from RodG
This fall my oak tree was full of acorns and squirrels. They harvested the nuts by chewing off sprigs of leaves which landed on the lawn and driveway. Guess who had to clean up daily. Your poem gives us a vivid picture of this squirrel's antics. I especially like your use of alliteration. Rod
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
This fall my oak tree was full of acorns and squirrels. They harvested the nuts by chewing off sprigs of leaves which landed on the lawn and driveway. Guess who had to clean up daily. Your poem gives us a vivid picture of this squirrel's antics. I especially like your use of alliteration. Rod
Comment Written 17-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023
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Rod,
Thanks for your insight for this short poem contest. Yes, I try for alliteration in my posts. Some are intentional (-;