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A Tale of Love In the Space Age15 total reviews
Comment from Navada
I love it! Interstellar race relations and a deperately needed breeding program momentarily stymied by the love for a childhood sweetheart. Curses - foiled again! However, I'm sure those crafty Andromedins will find another way to keep themselves going. Thanks so much for the share! :)
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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I love it! Interstellar race relations and a deperately needed breeding program momentarily stymied by the love for a childhood sweetheart. Curses - foiled again! However, I'm sure those crafty Andromedins will find another way to keep themselves going. Thanks so much for the share! :)
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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Thank you for your kind and welcome words!
Comment from Yusita
This is the first story I've read here, and I must say, it did not disappoint. You had me hooked since the very first line, especially since I experienced a similar thing with a childhood friend when I was a child. I really enjoyed this story. You have the talent, for sure!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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This is the first story I've read here, and I must say, it did not disappoint. You had me hooked since the very first line, especially since I experienced a similar thing with a childhood friend when I was a child. I really enjoyed this story. You have the talent, for sure!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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I am so grateful! Feel free to go into my portfolio anytime. and I will love reading all your writing!
Comment from patcelaw
You are a very good writer and I enjoyed listening to the story very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also want to wish you a very merry Christmas and a most happy and prosperous new year. God bless. Patricia.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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You are a very good writer and I enjoyed listening to the story very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I also want to wish you a very merry Christmas and a most happy and prosperous new year. God bless. Patricia.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Many thanks and may you enjoy the gretest of Blessings!
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is super creative and was a pleasure to read, Jim!
It makes me wonder how far away this is from a futuristic truth.
A well thought out piece of writing. I wish you much success with the contest. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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This is super creative and was a pleasure to read, Jim!
It makes me wonder how far away this is from a futuristic truth.
A well thought out piece of writing. I wish you much success with the contest. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words!
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Jim. I enjoyed your very well written piece of flash fiction very much. I found the ending quite surprising as I thought he had lost the woman he loved. Good luck with this
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Hi Jim. I enjoyed your very well written piece of flash fiction very much. I found the ending quite surprising as I thought he had lost the woman he loved. Good luck with this
Comment Written 05-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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I wanted this relationship to work out. I live vicariously, romantically, through my characters.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very imaginative. Nicely written, too.
So the nameless boy was wrong about the Andromedin crablike monstrous space beings? Either they weren't crab-like, or weren't creatures?
smiley face here
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Very imaginative. Nicely written, too.
So the nameless boy was wrong about the Andromedin crablike monstrous space beings? Either they weren't crab-like, or weren't creatures?
smiley face here
Best wishes.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Lately, I have written some nameless or first person stories, as it seemed the best way to tell those stories. Thanks again!
Comment from Terry Broxson
Jim, this is an excellent story wrought from your imagination. I liked the twist of giving the Andromedins some personality by being sentimental.
I have one suggestion. In the 7th paragraph, instead of using "country," consider using "planet." I think it may fit the story better, but your call. Well done. Terry.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Jim, this is an excellent story wrought from your imagination. I liked the twist of giving the Andromedins some personality by being sentimental.
I have one suggestion. In the 7th paragraph, instead of using "country," consider using "planet." I think it may fit the story better, but your call. Well done. Terry.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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great suggestion! Thanks! I will do it now! Please keep writing!
Comment from Lisasview
Hi Jim,
Wow, do you ever have a wonderful imagination! I had no idea when I first started reading your story where it was headed... and boy oh boy was I ever surprised!!
Wonderful,
Lisa
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Hi Jim,
Wow, do you ever have a wonderful imagination! I had no idea when I first started reading your story where it was headed... and boy oh boy was I ever surprised!!
Wonderful,
Lisa
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thanks, LISA! Please VIEW my portfolio anytime!
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And, you as well dear Jim,
Lisa
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Thank you so much for your kind words!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This quickly became a cautionary tale. It was fun toread of their different ages of proposal. A summary of it all: ""But you never showed an interest in me before!"
"Don't you remember my proposal?" I asked.
"That was when we were kids!" she returned.
"I don't have much time now!" I blurted, "I love you! Come with me!" A fun ending.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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This quickly became a cautionary tale. It was fun toread of their different ages of proposal. A summary of it all: ""But you never showed an interest in me before!"
"Don't you remember my proposal?" I asked.
"That was when we were kids!" she returned.
"I don't have much time now!" I blurted, "I love you! Come with me!" A fun ending.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you! With my wife and most family gone, I seem to live romantically through the actions of my characters.
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Good therapy
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If only I had had an easy time finding my mate as he did! Had I known my late wife earlier, I'd have fought space creatures for her!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Odd little story. I would like to look inside your brain.
I always imagine mine with hundreds of filing cabinets, and vast computers. It looks like an old newspaper office. Good work. Karen
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Odd little story. I would like to look inside your brain.
I always imagine mine with hundreds of filing cabinets, and vast computers. It looks like an old newspaper office. Good work. Karen
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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I had an odd pain once, so I had them x ray my brain. They found nothing!
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That's a very old joke. Mine was MRI'd and they said it was incredibly busy. :-)
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Vecchio means "old' in Italian, so anything I say comes from an "old mind".
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Must be why you write such good nostalgic stories. I was told I have an old soul all my life,. Well, now my face matches! hahahaha Karen
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I have had two movie courses in college and studied writing for the visual media in grad school. I LOVE movies, and when I found out I can't be a Christian and work for Hollywood, I try for my stories to be like "mini-movies", many with their own musical themes.
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It would be hard to be in the movies or wall street with all the influences. Karen
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Yes. One of my heroes is Roy Rogers. I did a FS piece on him a while back. When he and Dale Evans had a Down Syndrome baby, they brought her right in the open with them. Parents who formerly were ashamed took their children out of attics and cellars and also brought them into the open. I corresponded with a writer who tried to sell a screenplay based on their lives. No studio would touch it unless he took out references to their belief in Christ.
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There are many Christian channels now. And I knew that about their baby. My older sister said, why are you surprised? Momma and Daddy never hid you! Or, was that me who said it to her? hahaha
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There are some doctrinal issues I disagree with, but Dale Evans wrote a great book, "Angel Unaware" about the child, Robin, and it was on the reading list when I majored in Special Ed in college.
