Guided by Faith
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
I read recently, just the aroma of coffee acts upon the brain. It stimulates the brain so the mood is elated. clever approach: "Emma attempted to hide her smile as she took it from him. "I'll help. If I'm careful, can I remove the sling and gently pull the sleeve up your arm? It'll be more comfortable than having your arm under it." This line will give the reader cause to pause: ""I don't know his angle, but I know he has one and it's not love." She faced the door. "The children are arriving." moving on...
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Seth studied his arm. "We can try. The shoulder needs to remain immobile, but if you're careful, it might work."
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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I read recently, just the aroma of coffee acts upon the brain. It stimulates the brain so the mood is elated. clever approach: "Emma attempted to hide her smile as she took it from him. "I'll help. If I'm careful, can I remove the sling and gently pull the sleeve up your arm? It'll be more comfortable than having your arm under it." This line will give the reader cause to pause: ""I don't know his angle, but I know he has one and it's not love." She faced the door. "The children are arriving." moving on...
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Seth studied his arm. "We can try. The shoulder needs to remain immobile, but if you're careful, it might work."
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dihalia Fuentes Figueroa
Hi!
I loved your story line. I did not read the previous chapters and I understood what the story is leading for. I suggest if you can use stronger words in your writing. I mean words that present the emotions of the characters in a more descriptive way. You use some but not many, sounding more mellow than impacting the readers when they read your story. I loved your tree idea...I am a teacher, and it sounds like a great activity for students.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Hi!
I loved your story line. I did not read the previous chapters and I understood what the story is leading for. I suggest if you can use stronger words in your writing. I mean words that present the emotions of the characters in a more descriptive way. You use some but not many, sounding more mellow than impacting the readers when they read your story. I loved your tree idea...I am a teacher, and it sounds like a great activity for students.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Yes, it's your story, you can have the men and women relationship model your beliefs. No need to research, people usually find what their looking for to validate their belief while ignoring that which doesn't. This is your vision, your formula. If it worked in all your other novels, why change, unless you're unhappy with it.
I do wonder what's left. This doesn't exactly have a classic story arc. The villain (such as he was) wasn't exactly central to the story. There were no 'real' obstacles to the MCs having a relationship. So, they could say love you tomorrow and get married, with no issue.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Yes, it's your story, you can have the men and women relationship model your beliefs. No need to research, people usually find what their looking for to validate their belief while ignoring that which doesn't. This is your vision, your formula. If it worked in all your other novels, why change, unless you're unhappy with it.
I do wonder what's left. This doesn't exactly have a classic story arc. The villain (such as he was) wasn't exactly central to the story. There were no 'real' obstacles to the MCs having a relationship. So, they could say love you tomorrow and get married, with no issue.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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I'm a retired teacher, so I'm adding the research I've found to educate people who don't realize there are actually people how there who live their Christian beliefs. As for what's left, this couple still face a few problems. Emma is moving closer to a relationship but still not there yet. Their relationship isn't there yet. They need to move closer. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Great chapter, again. A good read once more. I never tire of your writing. Noticing George Elliott is on Council so it is good he is trying to make things right with Emma. His reputation is at stake because of his son's misdemeanours. Can't wait to see the court case with Ms barton.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Great chapter, again. A good read once more. I never tire of your writing. Noticing George Elliott is on Council so it is good he is trying to make things right with Emma. His reputation is at stake because of his son's misdemeanours. Can't wait to see the court case with Ms barton.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think you brought some authenticity into the dialogue, some warmth and caring here Barbara as there has to be give and take in a relationship. Seth always seems so knd and helpful, I love this character. Another fine chapter Barbara, very entertaining, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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I think you brought some authenticity into the dialogue, some warmth and caring here Barbara as there has to be give and take in a relationship. Seth always seems so knd and helpful, I love this character. Another fine chapter Barbara, very entertaining, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
There's a very inspiring theme of giving in your story from the interactions of your main characters to the Giving Tree and then the material settlement for Emma. This is turn gives the chapter a sense that, after all the troubles and heartache, there's a light at the end of the tunnel for those who've stayed strong and principled throughout this drama. Nicely done, Barbara. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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There's a very inspiring theme of giving in your story from the interactions of your main characters to the Giving Tree and then the material settlement for Emma. This is turn gives the chapter a sense that, after all the troubles and heartache, there's a light at the end of the tunnel for those who've stayed strong and principled throughout this drama. Nicely done, Barbara. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the understanding and encouragement.
Comment from Jacob1395
I really like the warmth and affection there is in Seth and Emma's relationship and in their dialogue, which you bring to life really well. This was another excellent chapter Barbara, that I really enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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I really like the warmth and affection there is in Seth and Emma's relationship and in their dialogue, which you bring to life really well. This was another excellent chapter Barbara, that I really enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from judiverse
I hope Ron doesn't continue to be a problem. You'd think he'd have moved on after high school. I'm glad Mr. Baker has taken care of her medical expenses and replaced her car. He has realized that his son needs to learn responsibility. He had always stood up for Marc, no matter what he did. Starting to attend church is another good thing. Seth was great with his input for Emma's reading group. The participants probably look up to him as police chief, so his involvement is bound to make an impression. Regarding your comment about women who are late to lose their virginity--that should not make them helpless, dependent females, as your Emma seems to be. I think she should decide to get a job and learn to manage on her own before she marries. judi
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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I hope Ron doesn't continue to be a problem. You'd think he'd have moved on after high school. I'm glad Mr. Baker has taken care of her medical expenses and replaced her car. He has realized that his son needs to learn responsibility. He had always stood up for Marc, no matter what he did. Starting to attend church is another good thing. Seth was great with his input for Emma's reading group. The participants probably look up to him as police chief, so his involvement is bound to make an impression. Regarding your comment about women who are late to lose their virginity--that should not make them helpless, dependent females, as your Emma seems to be. I think she should decide to get a job and learn to manage on her own before she marries. judi
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Be patient with Emma. A job is on the horizon as is a plan. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. I'll be eager to see what's in store for Emma. judi
Comment from Ben Colder
Seem as if God is working in this story toward several aspects. The struggle with clothing, the gifts, the car, all rolled up into one. ow comes the inevitable. Good one Barb.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Seem as if God is working in this story toward several aspects. The struggle with clothing, the gifts, the car, all rolled up into one. ow comes the inevitable. Good one Barb.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and undestanding.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nice continuation of the story. This chapter gives the reader a break from the excitement. You have a few places that require editing - usually dealing with small words.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Nice continuation of the story. This chapter gives the reader a break from the excitement. You have a few places that require editing - usually dealing with small words.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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I was probably adding those small words as you were reading. I have a problem leaving them out and reading as if they're there. Thank you for the kind review.
