A Particular Friendship
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Something Deep Within"We meet Lizzy who has just come out of the convent
13 total reviews
Comment from Beck Fenton
I love this Willow and her story of being there for the children .
(Many of my children
have forgotten
the tracks of their tears)
There are many such gems hidden here, I think you write differently when you are able to put your own trauma aside. You write less emotively and it's more factual than descriptive.
I encourage you to try more third person pieces. Good luck my friend. You are brave.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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I love this Willow and her story of being there for the children .
(Many of my children
have forgotten
the tracks of their tears)
There are many such gems hidden here, I think you write differently when you are able to put your own trauma aside. You write less emotively and it's more factual than descriptive.
I encourage you to try more third person pieces. Good luck my friend. You are brave.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you for your involved review. This could be an inspiration for you to post some of your autobiography I'm sure you have already jotted down somewhere.
Comment from w.j.debi
I'm jumping in mid-stream, but this is interesting. I enjoyed the wisdom of the weeping willow. I especially liked part II about the horseshoe. Now we see an accident and the fear of the child as she is encounters the ether.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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I'm jumping in mid-stream, but this is interesting. I enjoyed the wisdom of the weeping willow. I especially liked part II about the horseshoe. Now we see an accident and the fear of the child as she is encounters the ether.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your involved review. Thisis my autobiography I began 20+ years ago. If you want to read any of the previous chapters, feel free to browse my portfolio with no need to review, just enjoy.
Comment from aryr
This was truly awesome, I now know at the age of 30 you suffered a lot of trauma, Liz. Your poem was fantastic, a little long to read through but great anyway. Then comes Toby who was responsible for most of your trauma. This was excessively long but it needed the length to be what it was. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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This was truly awesome, I now know at the age of 30 you suffered a lot of trauma, Liz. Your poem was fantastic, a little long to read through but great anyway. Then comes Toby who was responsible for most of your trauma. This was excessively long but it needed the length to be what it was. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your supportive review. I have a rule not to have any chapters much longer than 1000 words. Some people's are at least 2000, my ADD can't handle it so I fully understand how this felt too long. Thank you
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Better long than not. You are so very welcome, Liz.
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***contented sigh***
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Good news bad news, your writing speaks plainly to me. This is the good news. You got your problem solved, which is good. Bad news the mix of poetry with prose is unsettling and very much not the norm anywhere. Also, the poem is way too long requiring a lot of scrolling. Your message is clear and strong. Decide on one format at a time. Karen
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Good news bad news, your writing speaks plainly to me. This is the good news. You got your problem solved, which is good. Bad news the mix of poetry with prose is unsettling and very much not the norm anywhere. Also, the poem is way too long requiring a lot of scrolling. Your message is clear and strong. Decide on one format at a time. Karen
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your review. Ironically, some readers have encouraged me to blend the two genres. I guess we write for both.
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I have been outvoted? Okie Dokie. I can only give you my opinion. It is strong work. Karen
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I appreciate you giving your permission.I do the same. I tell people the only conversation stories are hard for people with ADD and I've appreciated some writers highlighting one character. It was so much easier to follow.
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I am mostly a narrator. dialog drives me nuts all the quotes and tags. Yuck.
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I was urged to write with dialogue & finally did when I was given this link. It is kind of magic. It takes any situation and how to use the right punctuation:
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http://theeditorsblog.net/2010/12/08/punctuation-in-dialogue/
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Thanks for the link. Karen
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My pleasure
Comment from barbara.wilkey
First the easy part. I'm glad Tom was able to help you with the computer issue. I know you must be really happy. Now, for the review. The story is both heartbreaking and hopeful. No child anywhere should ever have to live with abuse. I am glad God is with you. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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First the easy part. I'm glad Tom was able to help you with the computer issue. I know you must be really happy. Now, for the review. The story is both heartbreaking and hopeful. No child anywhere should ever have to live with abuse. I am glad God is with you. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your involved review.
Comment from royowen
I wonder if trauma victims, whatever that trauma maybe know the depth of disturbance within, or indeed ever understand truly the depths of disturbance. Help is merely being there, identifying with the deep seated damage, and being a comfort and shelter in a storm, beautifully written Liz, thanks for sharing, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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I wonder if trauma victims, whatever that trauma maybe know the depth of disturbance within, or indeed ever understand truly the depths of disturbance. Help is merely being there, identifying with the deep seated damage, and being a comfort and shelter in a storm, beautifully written Liz, thanks for sharing, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Wow, this is a lovely review. thank you.
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Welcome Liz
Comment from papa55mike
This story is told in an interesting form and is baring of the soul through past hurts and healings. What a wonderfully written piece. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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This story is told in an interesting form and is baring of the soul through past hurts and healings. What a wonderfully written piece. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Wow, this is a lovely review. thank you.
Comment from Tina Crute
This is both heartbreaking and victorious. No child should have to be so abused when their little lives are so precious.
You have taken the worst experiences and used them as an understanding balm for others, sort of like the tree did for you..."gentling you."
With helping others, the side effect is a bit of healing for yourself.
I have a family member that was seriously abused as a child, so I know the trauma affects you forever.
Thank you for becoming who you are, despite the evil dealt to you in your past. You're a hero!
Tina
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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This is both heartbreaking and victorious. No child should have to be so abused when their little lives are so precious.
You have taken the worst experiences and used them as an understanding balm for others, sort of like the tree did for you..."gentling you."
With helping others, the side effect is a bit of healing for yourself.
I have a family member that was seriously abused as a child, so I know the trauma affects you forever.
Thank you for becoming who you are, despite the evil dealt to you in your past. You're a hero!
Tina
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Wow, this is a lovely review. thank you. Nice to make your acquaintance.
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Well deserved. Nice to meet you too!
Comment from karenina
Dear Liz,
Your free verse is truly an emancipation! You write in reverent truth of the self worth eroded by sexual and emotional abuse.
Your voice is reverberating throughout the chapel that is our birthright... and you speak for me and so many others!
"....But stand tall and dance in honor of your Creator
It is a grace-filled act for which you have been chosen"
Profound and compassionate! So glad Tom helped you work out your computer connection!
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Dear Liz,
Your free verse is truly an emancipation! You write in reverent truth of the self worth eroded by sexual and emotional abuse.
Your voice is reverberating throughout the chapel that is our birthright... and you speak for me and so many others!
"....But stand tall and dance in honor of your Creator
It is a grace-filled act for which you have been chosen"
Profound and compassionate! So glad Tom helped you work out your computer connection!
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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A delightful review....thanks to you
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Hugs...
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hugs back
Comment from eliz100
Your poem is lovely. As a psych nurse, I worked with patients who had been sexually abused as children, and I think you have captured their essence in your poem. I am glad you could work with a therapist. I am honored that you share your history with me. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Your poem is lovely. As a psych nurse, I worked with patients who had been sexually abused as children, and I think you have captured their essence in your poem. I am glad you could work with a therapist. I am honored that you share your history with me. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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This is a delightful review, thank you. Healing is one of the goals in the books I write.
