The Passer's Enigma
This is the prologue to my fantasy-romance fiction WIP :)2 total reviews
Comment from Paul Manton
Spot on for Thanatos, the Greek word for 'death' - you have done all the necessary research, and have produced a professional level story. I really enjoyed reading this, as it flowed beautifully, with impeccable English and a very engaging style.
It took a few sentences before I got the point, but it was so well crafted that when you moved (in essence) from present to past tense it wasn't difficult to follow. Stylistically well presented to have a flashback, however mild. Well worth a six. Thank you.
Paul
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Spot on for Thanatos, the Greek word for 'death' - you have done all the necessary research, and have produced a professional level story. I really enjoyed reading this, as it flowed beautifully, with impeccable English and a very engaging style.
It took a few sentences before I got the point, but it was so well crafted that when you moved (in essence) from present to past tense it wasn't difficult to follow. Stylistically well presented to have a flashback, however mild. Well worth a six. Thank you.
Paul
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Holy smokes batman that was a cool story! I love fantasy and the cool creatures that come with it. Immortality protection from disease. Love it! Excellent story and what an imagination you have! I see no issues with esthetics subject matter punctuation or sentence structure. I think you got a great piece of magic hair. I wish you best to luck and find evening!
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Holy smokes batman that was a cool story! I love fantasy and the cool creatures that come with it. Immortality protection from disease. Love it! Excellent story and what an imagination you have! I see no issues with esthetics subject matter punctuation or sentence structure. I think you got a great piece of magic hair. I wish you best to luck and find evening!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
