The Graveyard
A scary pass through ...7 total reviews
Comment from PENofFIRE
Brilliant!!! I love the line, "Panic threads its way through clammy skin dressed heavily in goosebumps." I am a lover of words and I love how you placed yours to paint this picture of fear. I loved it!!! I had no idea you are highly esteemed here at FanStory. I am honored that you take the time to read my work. Thank you. May the good Lord bless you richly, Pen
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Brilliant!!! I love the line, "Panic threads its way through clammy skin dressed heavily in goosebumps." I am a lover of words and I love how you placed yours to paint this picture of fear. I loved it!!! I had no idea you are highly esteemed here at FanStory. I am honored that you take the time to read my work. Thank you. May the good Lord bless you richly, Pen
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thank you for delving back in time. I tried to describe the feeling of being stranded in a graveyard, alone and frightened as the shrouded cloud of fog coils about the subject.
Comment from Sally Law
I voted for this quickly, and decided to come back and review. These contest cycle through very fast and I miss many of them. Best one in this race. You did well.
All my best,
Sal :))
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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I voted for this quickly, and decided to come back and review. These contest cycle through very fast and I miss many of them. Best one in this race. You did well.
All my best,
Sal :))
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Thank you
Happy Thanksgiving a day early
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Great work. Your descriptions are gripping. You create an eerie scene that brings your reader to feel the panic and be enveloped in the darkness.
Good job as usual.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Great work. Your descriptions are gripping. You create an eerie scene that brings your reader to feel the panic and be enveloped in the darkness.
Good job as usual.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Missed you recently through no fault of your own. I have a challenge finding contests of interest, and my latest creation only drew 6 entries. Still, your comments are always appreciated. Tom
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I have been tied up with Harvey trying to keep both him and me sane by keeping him busy. This morning he went back to turning 3 tvs on different news stations waking me up and then ringing our landline at 5 AM and 6 am. I know it's Huntington because he has no understanding of why I get mad.
I never look at how much change, I will get for a review, but others only review if there is more money in the till.
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i tnink i understand but not in yous shoes ...
Comment from Douglas Goff
I enjoyed your original artwork. I imagine it would be what the sky would look like when you are staring out of a grave. The picture only served to enhance your creepy tale.
I absolutely love graveyards. They remind me of books. A walk through history and such. Hood job and good luck on your Darkness copetition!
D
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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I enjoyed your original artwork. I imagine it would be what the sky would look like when you are staring out of a grave. The picture only served to enhance your creepy tale.
I absolutely love graveyards. They remind me of books. A walk through history and such. Hood job and good luck on your Darkness copetition!
D
Comment Written 20-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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I appreciate your time and comment DG. Have a great day. You made mine.
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Looks like I needed spell check.
*good*
*competition*
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, is it completely dark? Is the character making all these first person descriptions to us in the dark? Is this person stuck in the dark? Not sure.
Having vivid descriptions is a good thing, but you don't want more adjectives than you have plot and story.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Hmm, is it completely dark? Is the character making all these first person descriptions to us in the dark? Is this person stuck in the dark? Not sure.
Having vivid descriptions is a good thing, but you don't want more adjectives than you have plot and story.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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I'll need to review and see what is meant in my using more adjectives than plot and story. Still, it gives me thought to improve where needs be.
Comment from Wendyanne
This scary story is very well written and almost poetic as it contains so much alliteration and rhyming words which made it more enjoyable for me. Our imagination can certainly play tricks on us in the dark. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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This scary story is very well written and almost poetic as it contains so much alliteration and rhyming words which made it more enjoyable for me. Our imagination can certainly play tricks on us in the dark. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your time
Comment from JSD
An excellent little piece of writing. You convey atmosphere and fear successfully with your prose and take the reader with you on your journey. Well done and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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An excellent little piece of writing. You convey atmosphere and fear successfully with your prose and take the reader with you on your journey. Well done and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Thank you, and my hope is it passes the test for the contest named Dark. Man can be in darkness from his own accord, anytime, anyplace if he refuses to step into the Light.
