Comment from Jacob1395

Excellent

I liked the turn of events in your piece where it was Snow White kissing the prince, instead of the other way round, and I really liked the humour in your writing as well. I enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

Thanks a heap for that. Snow White as a 'warrior' was about as far as I could push it.

Comment from jim vecchio

Excellent

Something smelled in this poem, but it wasn't your words! This was a fun takeoff on Snow White, and now that Disney's "woke", don't be surprised if they steal it from you! A good and unusual entry!

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

Thanks very much. I hope Disney has a lot of money to offer...

reply by jim vecchio on 20-Nov-2023

Money? I thought writers just did it for fun

Comment from Navada

Excellent

This is an entertaining take on a familiar story with a few crucial details updated for a modern audience! I enjoyed your deployment of the story within a cute rhyming structure. Good luck for the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

Glad you liked the rhymes. Some were, I admit, less successful than others.

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

This is excellent work. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in readers. I enjoyed reviewing this. Thank you for sharing.

Best wishes

Alex

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

I'm glad you liked the imagery. I had fun with the whole poem.

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

Lol this is great! I can picture the scene clearly as you have described it so vividly. You have used some excellent alliteration throughout this and great imagery too. Good luck.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

Glad you noticed the (sometimes too obvious, I thought) alliteration. Thanks.