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The Exchange

A conversation between father and son.

22 total reviews 
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Having raised four sons, I do understand the text messages going back and forth as well as ideas. My second son, Jeff and I had an interesting back and forth early this morning. LOL I enjoyed reading this contest entry and want to wish you the best of luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2024


reply by the author on 07-Apr-2024
    Thanks you Barbara. Very nice
Comment from patcelaw
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I enjoyed this very much. It is well written, and you have done well with your presentation. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and your script writing seems to be very good. May God richly bless you. Patricia.
I saw your profile that you are relatively new to the site of writing. And I would encourage you to keep writing because you're quite good. And welcome to fanstory.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
    Awesome. Thanks so much.
Comment from Wendy G
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A most interesting post - firstly for the Naani you composed which has multiple facets and interpretations, and then for the in-depth and respectful conversation with your son, exchanging ideas at a deeper level than most. He has some very thoughtful and thought-provoking points which we all should consider. Creatively written to make each person think about not only what we say but why we say it.
Wendy

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
    Thank you. That was the idea.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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These questions make me think of a series I'm reading. It is called Sand. People are living with sand all around. As sand covers their homes and towns, they rebuild. We later find the source of the falling sand which further covers the 2nd generation of buildings. These characters experience the answers to each of these questions: "Tell me, who is the ravaged? What is the blindness? What are the horrors of humanity? Holding on to what? And are the ravaged ones now in the darkness?" I'm happy for you in your conclusion.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
    Very interesting. I am glad the piece I initiated extra thought. Great and thank you.
reply by Liz O'Neill on 22-Nov-2023
    ***Smile***
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Your son has a bit of a poet in him and offered some great suggestions if you could use more lines and words for a Naani poem. You have a really good critic only 8000 miles away.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
    Isn?t that the truth. Ha. Thank you.
Comment from Sally Law
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Kaiku, I so enjoyed this. I admire the strong bond you have with your son, who looks just like you from what I can make out with me ol blind eyes. Most obvious, is the respect you have for one another and that you make the time to talk on a deeper level with one another. I admire you both. Thank you for sharing.
Sending you my best today as always.
Sally :))

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
    Thank you Sally.
Comment from Lisasview
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Wonderful read about your frank conversation with your son. Good for him for questioning... and, Good for you for listening and responding...Not always easy when one is sure they are right..
By the way I think you meant meet not met my creator....
Lisasview

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
    Thank you. And yes, I went back and forth with ?met? and ?meet?. I think you are right on using ?meet? as I?m not dead yet!
reply by Lisasview on 21-Nov-2023
    Yes, that was my thought... Glad I was a good reviewer... brownie points for me..
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Wow, no wonder you're proud of him! I'm still trying to take in all his very profound thoughts! Talk about thinking outside the box! This is a great piece of father-son dialogue which affectionately covers some intriguing philosophical questions. Thanks for sharing him:)) Good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
    I believe you are spot on. My son doesn't hold back.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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It's great that you can have an in-depth conversation with your son about your literary interests. Too bad you didn't explain the parameters of the Nanni poem at the start. (smiley face here)
Best wishes.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
    Thank you. Had I explained the parameters, I wonder what would have ensued. He might not have challenged me in the same way. Good question for sure.
Comment from L. Kalere
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What a great exchange, and I love the way you introduced it with the nerf rocket, then took off from there. Your son is quite a deep thinker, a philosopher of sorts, and I bet he's challenged you many times. I wonder how the discussion would have gone if you'd told him the parameters at the beginning. This is definitely a unique format, that may inspire others. Well done!
Linda

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
    Very generous review and stars. Thank you very much. I like the rocket analogy. Hadn't really thought of it that way, but you added a very unique twist. Thank you.