Locked and Released
A poem about shattering the chains of a relationship5 total reviews
Comment from Daylily
It is difficult to deal with the loss of love. Thankfully, you have the talent to pour out deep emotions within the lines of an excellent poem and that has to bring a bit of comfort.
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It is difficult to deal with the loss of love. Thankfully, you have the talent to pour out deep emotions within the lines of an excellent poem and that has to bring a bit of comfort.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2023
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, I am speechless what a piece of art, your poetry it's cascading in every cell of my soul:) such a priceless melody. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest I think you have a winner.
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Wow, I am speechless what a piece of art, your poetry it's cascading in every cell of my soul:) such a priceless melody. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest I think you have a winner.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Our memories of love can sometimes haunt as we look back at the joy and the pain of loss, a fine post and welcome to Fanstory. I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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Our memories of love can sometimes haunt as we look back at the joy and the pain of loss, a fine post and welcome to Fanstory. I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Nov-2023
Comment from Yusita
What a unique and captivating way to write about such a topic. I loved all the deep and figurative language. I enjoyed reading this. It's the kind of poem that you start reading and can't stop. It draws you in so that you have no choice but to finish reading it. Great work!
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What a unique and captivating way to write about such a topic. I loved all the deep and figurative language. I enjoyed reading this. It's the kind of poem that you start reading and can't stop. It draws you in so that you have no choice but to finish reading it. Great work!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2023
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is a good poem, seemingly written from the heart. You use effective descriptions. I did find the following and, given the contest is "Rhyming," it would help you to revisit the following:
Bones and homes do not rhyme
Me and breathe do not rhyme
Beautiful and overflow do not rhyme.
I think you can make some simple fixes and still keep your poem in tact.
Best wishes
Alexandra
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This is a good poem, seemingly written from the heart. You use effective descriptions. I did find the following and, given the contest is "Rhyming," it would help you to revisit the following:
Bones and homes do not rhyme
Me and breathe do not rhyme
Beautiful and overflow do not rhyme.
I think you can make some simple fixes and still keep your poem in tact.
Best wishes
Alexandra
Comment Written 15-Nov-2023
