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Kiss me.

Itâ??s about love.

7 total reviews 
Comment from Cathy M
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Congratulations on your first poem post! How exciting to have you become a part of FanStory! Your poem intrigued me with the repetition of I am...then please and baby. Nice job, especially for your first post.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
    Thank you!

    I appreciate it :)

    Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. I hope to receive more reviews from you in the future! I hope to continue to be active and write reviews as well!

    Maybe we will run into one another, again!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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Welcome aboard. THis was quite the challenge for someone new to this forum. Good luck. Thank you for participating. Now let's see what other have written and vote accordingly.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
    Yes, indeed. I have to go ahead and be more active. I finally have my computer, now! Lol. I was working from my phone. I'll be off to review!

    Thank you for your review! I appreciate it very much. Maybe we will run into one another again!
reply by Tom Horonzy on 08-Apr-2024
    Come back often as time allows. I find myself entertaining sufficiently to be attended; then again, maybe not.
Comment from Navada
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Hi, Audrianna. Congratulations on your first post and welcome to FanStory! You've matched the syllable requirement here for an etheree. One suggestion - in the fourth line, did you mean "I am so glad" rather than "I am glad glad" to match the pattern a little better? You might also want to edit your description to replace the apostrophe with plain text. These little formatting issues will make more sense as time goes on. Good luck for the contest!

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
    Hello Navada,

    Thank you for your review! I will have to take a look at the poem again but sometimes in my writing I use repetition, even if it's the same word repeated. I do this because in my view of poetry there is more liberty for something such as repetition; to me it brings more music to the poem. Lol. But I will go ahead and double check!

    Regarding the formatting issue I had: Unfortunately, I posted from my phone. I did not have a computer at the time, and it was my first post, so it was a mistake. I realized the mistake as soon as my poem posted, but there was not much I could do about it anymore.

    I have my computer now, so I hope to be more active and get better at posting with no formatting issues, and going ahead and reviewing other people's work when I post! I know I am supposed to be doing that, but, again, since I was doing it from my phone it was a bit more difficult.

    I have all my tools with me for my FanStory account, now, so I will be more active and responsive.

    Thank you for your review!!! Maybe we will run into one another again!
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Sorry, but I never kiss and tell. Ha!

That is a fun Etheree. Nice build up to the end. The title does give away the climax though.

Fun piece
D

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
    Lol. Thank you, Douglas. I actually do understand where you're coming from. I will have to work on my titles! Lol.

    Maybe we will run into one another again! Thank you for your review!
Comment from royowen
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You've done ok with your first post on fanstory, correct syllable, perhaps you had too many 'glads' but that's ok. But welcome to fanstory, I think you will enjoy your stay here, beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
    Thank you, Roy. A different one of my reviewers also mentioned that there are to many "Glad"s in my poem. I explained that to me, it adds more of a musical element to the poem. However, I will take note of your comments.

    Thank you, Roy, for your review and blessings to you as well. Maybe we will run into one another again here on FanStory.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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This is excellent work for the challenge. You use expressive words and imagery that readers will enjoy, as I have. Thank you for sharing this.

Best wishes,

Alex

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
    Thank you, Alex! I appreciate your kind comments about my poem! It seems you really enjoyed my poem. I am glad you are referring to the imagery in it. I do try to be purposeful about my writing, but, it may not always come across as I desire. However, it seems you really grasped it in the way I intended. That means a lot!

    Thank you so much for your review and maybe we will run into one another on FanStory in the future! Great luck with your writing!!!

    Blessings to you!
Comment from Wendyanne
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I am sorry but I found this to be just a lot of repetitive words made to look like an ethereal. I have to be honest and tell you the truth. Perhaps you need to read some etherees so you can see how they should be done.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2023

reply by the author on 08-Apr-2024
    Lol. Thank you Wendyanne for your review. I have never written and etheree before, and actually am unsure if I have ever seen one, either. Regardless, in my view of poetry, there are more liberties that such as writing an essay of some sort, and so I always love to add a musical element to it.

    In music that I enjoy listening to, there is repetition. I love music, and again, in my poetry, I like to add a musical element. Therefore I add repetition.

    To be honest, irrelevant to whether this was how I completed my etheree in this contest, this is somewhat how I write poetry. It appears you do not enjoy my writing.

    Unfortunately, the purpose of FanStory for me, is to put my personal writing style in competition. Even if you do not enjoy my writing style, I will continue to write that way.

    If I can make my writing better and stronger by receiving a helpful comment in reviews of my writing, I will do so; After reading your comment, I will be sure to take a look at how etherees are written, but, this is the etheree I wrote.

    I do not intend to copy other people's writing style's or etherees. I formatted the etheree correctly, which was the challenge, and I wrote it in my style. That is the purpose of my account, again. To write in my style and have opportunities and challenges within my writing style, not someone else's. As far as I can see, I did in fact write a proper etheree in the proper format.

    Thank you for your review. Maybe we will run into one another again on FanStory.

    Take care and I hope you enjoy your journey on this forum.