Comment from JSD

Excellent

I always like your writing because you so carefully consider every word, and here every syllable. You have shaped this perfectly, right down to the last word, and it is most effective. Well done, Mia.

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023

Thank you. I have worked very hard to be better with my poetry. It doesn't come as easily as stories do, but I think I am making head way.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

You did a very good job with this inverted 10 line poem. I enjoyed reading it very much. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful day. Patricia

 Comment Written 02-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023

Thank you.