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2023 Gypsy's Haiku

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Comment from rama devi
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Love the metaphor here. Delightful! True to form and well presented. I love how the L-sounds lace all lines, phonetically, with a fine counterpoint through the consonance of F and C. Bravo.

Warmly,
rd

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by rama devi on 04-Oct-2023
    xxoo Hugs!
Comment from GWHARGIS
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Oh, wow. I have started to notice that when I check my message box I gravitate towards your offerings first. This was such a clever poem. I saw flood and elementary school and my dark little, pessimistic mind was traveling fast. But you turned it into a joyous thing. Turned my frown upside down. Gretchen

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
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This was a fantastic haiku, Gypsy. You are correct, there is overflowing creek of flowing laughter, in the children. The picture was endearing. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much! I appreciate your excellent review. Have a wonderful day. Blessed be.

    Gypsy
reply by aryr on 04-Oct-2023
    You are so very welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very well written haiku you have penned about the overflowing creek by the school. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery of the children outside playing on the playground at school. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much! I appreciate your excellent review. Have a wonderful day.

    Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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A playground full of laughing children is the best medicine anybody could have or offer. Those energic little bodies are perfect for what ails the world. If everyone could act like children, I think society would be better. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much, Barbara. I appreciate it.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
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heh totally cute contrast between a school and a creek (over-flowing with laughter)
great imagery with both of those
like the yellow font to match the climbing toy

nice!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
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I like it! I like the "flood of laughter" is a surprising and fitting ending because you set the scene with the "overflowing creek" near the school. Very clever way to capture this setting.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
    Thank you big sister... I'm happy you like it.

    Love

    Marival
Comment from Douglas Goff
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This is a sweet piece. There really is nothing like the sounds of children laughing. I can remember sitting on the steps just listening to my children giggling when they were toddlers.

I hope we can come to some solutions in all
Of this violence and growing them up to quickly with the sexuality and such.

Nice work.
Douglas

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much, Douglas. I know what you mean. I see pictures of very young girls with make up to make them look older. All I can think is the perverts watching.

    Thank you

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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This is an excellent haiku! I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader.
Best wishes!
Alexandra


 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy