Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I'm pretty sure you're living in a world that's lost. I think it's been going downhill for a while. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2024

Comment from JSD

Excellent

I feel this is excellent until the last line. I love the idea of the first four lines but then the fifth suggest that this is not you. But surely it is you, and that's the point. Sorry if I'm reading this wrong. Just my opinion. Good luck in the vote anyway.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023

Thank you for your review, the last line is meant to say that I don?t believe it?s me that is lost, it is the world that is lost.

reply by JSD on 03-Oct-2023

ok

Comment from Lynar

Exceptional

I enjoyed how you saw yourself younger (as a boy)
in reflection in later life in the world, not having a
real place. Or was it the world was troubled.
You take your stand, it is not the world. Your ability to
understand throuh maturation. A very thought provoking
Tanka. No negative comments. Exceptional

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023

Thank you for your review and your rating, it is much appreciated. I?m glad you liked the poem.

reply by Lynar on 03-Oct-2023

It did put the mind to work. Enjoyable.
You are welcome.