Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

I thought I'd pop in to have a peek and Ahh - this is a great little ditty. This poem is a song in itself with the rhythm and rhyme presented. A new appreciation of the form and also a realisation that there is much to learn about stressed and unstressed poetry. So much with so little time. Thank you for sharing this most enjoyable and excellent poem.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2023

Thanks so much, DD. I've always loved this meter, just never knew it had a name. I appreciate your kind words.

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Excellent

Your race story of the hare and the tortoise is very different from fable story.

I like yours. It is creative and no fight for winning. The sound of your poem sound is interesting and it sounds good music in the ear.

Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023

Thank you very much, Chan. Yeah, I got tired of that tortoise always winning the race! I've always loved this meter ever since reading Dr. Seuss; I just never knew it had a name until recently.

Comment from Daylily

Excellent

Your poetic prowess is quite impressive and well displayed in this engaging sonnet. The posting is also very informative for readers who wish to learn more about this formal rhyming form. I enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2023

Thank you very much, Daylily. It's nice to know the names for things, even though it isn't necessarily that useful. Glad you enjoyed the poem.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Once you mentioned Dr. Seuss, I was able to get it. I don't understand poetry and meter but I love reading it. Can't do the simplest poem. This did at least clear up the rhythm of Dr. Seuss. Lol. Great poem. Gretchen

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

Thank you so much, Gretchen. Dr. Seuss has always been a favorite of mine. I've always loved that rhythm and never knew it had a name until recently.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Uhh, Jim, I can see it reads very well and it's funny as well. A joy to read actually, but all the technicality about it is totally lost on me. I don't know the first thing about poetry. I just enjoy to read it. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

And that's all you need to know. Knowing the names of things is not particularly important, just so you enjoy it whatever it is called!

Comment from K.L. Rockquemore

Excellent

I love this poem for its rhythm and theme.

Thank you for the notes, they helped me appreciate your writing style.

It did remind my of a Dr.Seuss verse, very fun to read aloud.

The rhymes work well without force, flowing smoothly from line to line.
Good connections between stanzas.

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

Thanks very much for your very kind review. I've always loved Dr. Seuss. I loved him as a kid myself and as a parent reading him to my kids and now as a grandpa reading him to my grandkids.

reply by K.L. Rockquemore on 30-Sep-2023

My pleasure.

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But every once in a while I like to slip over to the poetry tab and follow along. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

Thank you, Ric.

Yeah, it's nice to know the names for things, but who really gives a s__t, just so long as it sounds good?

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This modified sonnet, An Amphibrachish Sonnet, has the proper formatting and successfully displays this fun meter when one wants to create a memorable pace. Neat.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

Thanks, Bill. I've always liked this meter from reading Dr. Seuss, long before I ever knew it had a name.

Comment from rama devi

Exceptional

What fun! Excellent rhyme, flow and bouncy jaunty beat, making these lines exemplify themselves well:


With dactyls and anapests strewn through and through,
it chugs right along with a beat that imbues
the lines of a poem with a good, spritely pace
that dances along like the hare in the race--


Imbues and through is a clever slant rhyme!

Love this line:

for humorous poems, it's the best one around.

And

with the slow-moving tortoise, but this time instead,
the lead-footed snapper does not pull ahead.

And the last line is perfect, again exemplifying what it depicts.

I love hearing Dr. Seuss overtones in this, read aloud.

Chuckling,
rd

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

Thank you so much, Rama, for your wonderful review and for the 6 stars. It's much appreciated.

reply by rama devi on 30-Sep-2023

Sure! ^_^

Comment from Julie Lau

Exceptional

I love the way the poem canters along with its cheerful rhythm and faultless execution. AND I learned some stuff too! Well done; a clever piece of work. Cheers, Julie

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

Thanks so much, Julie, and for the 6 stars too! I've always loved Dr. Seuss, just never knew that meter had a specific name.