Comment from Mike Stevens

Excellent

Another fine poem, Gypsy....and the murder of John Lennon came to mind immediately. There are so many freaks out there with a warped, dangerous view of reality

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023

yes, there are :(

Thank you very much, Mike, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day.

Gypsy

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

love shadow poems... you can take them anywhere!

this was a great creepy poem
the refrain was a good build-up to that final line
and the 5 senryu have good imagery

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023

Thank you very much, Sherlley,

I'm covered in mosquito bites and I didn't sit on the grass. It's horrible... last night I couldn't even sleep.

Thank you very much, Sherlley, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day.

Gypsy

I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day.

Gypsy

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Yes. This was full of the creep factor. Each line drew me deeper into this character and his world. At first it had a Phantom of the opera feel then it became more twenty first century feeling. Very effective language to take me one step closer to the edge. Gretchen

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023

Thank you very much, Barbara, I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. Have a wonderful day.

Gypsy

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

"I wonder what would take" seems like there is an (it) missing, or I am missing something, I did stumble on this line, I am glad to see/read that Halloween is revving up, we don't acknowledge it so much, an excellent presentation****kahpot

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2023

Thank you very much, Kym.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was an excellent haiku, Gypsy. The poem was created using the different haiku and the standard line that changed at the end. This was a great dedication to Dean and to Halloween. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.

Gypsy hugs

reply by aryr on 27-Sep-2023

You are so very welcome, Gypsy, what a great tribute to Dean, WOW!

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

This is pretty scary stuff! I think there are some people with no social skills whatsoever and I think those who stalk like this narrator have no way to relate normally. It reminds me the of the song "You're beautiful" about some guy lusting after a beautiful woman he sees on the bus. But Weird Al has a great parody of the song, "You're pitiful" which fits better.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023

Yes, the scary thing is that it's true... there are people like that.

Thank you very much, big sister. I appreciate your kind review.

Love

Marival

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

This is a creepy poem. Good job with the creep factor. I am curious how many of us have been ignored by somebody who we see on a regular basis. I have a feeling many. Great presentation.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023

Yes, this happens a lot.

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs