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Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "I'm the Beast in Your Nightmares"
Haunting Poetry for the Darkness in us all

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Comment from patcelaw
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This is a very dark and pouring at home that you have written for the contest. I wish you the best in the contest may God bless you and may you have a good evening. Patricia

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2023
    Thank you
Comment from Goodadvicechan
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It is sad to be in a situation whereby one is " No longer Loved and Adored.
Unwanted and Discarded."

Life sometimes is cruel and becomes meaningless. That's why there are suicides.

I like your title " I'm the Beast in Your Nightmares." It is a threat and deadly warming.

Thanks for sharing . Good job.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
    Thank you. Once I finished with the last line I knew it was also the title.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Wow, what a great entry! And how this verse form suits you! It's an explosion of anger and vengeful thoughts. And how I know it's excellent is because it fires me up too. I had to smile at your 'twisted' in the third stanza matching your profile name. I bet you felt better after unleashing this 'beast!' Well done and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
    You know I did feel better after. I've had a rough many weeks and I am now trying to get back into the swing of things. You'll read about it soon for the true story contest coming up.
Comment from papa55mike
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It is amazing how people can just shed a life with a flick of a wrist and with no feeling at all. What a wonderfully written poem.

Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
    Thank you for taking the time to review.
Comment from JSD
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A vicious and angry poem that speaks loudly about your sense of injustice and mistreatment. Love the title and the way it ends with it too. An excellent piece; good luck.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
    Thank you very much.
Comment from Eleri
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You certainly know how to write in Tanka format as this poem has all the right syllables in all the right places - well done. The subject matter is great too but I am not certain that the capital letters for some words and not others quite works. I can see why you are doing it but then I ask why not use it for other things such as 'nightmares'. Having said that this is a great poem so good luck in the contest
Eleri

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2023

reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
    I will think about that. Thank you.