Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is a fun, original and informative post that I enjoyed reading. Not only is it good for adults but children too who are bound to delight in all the humour, puns and descriptive detail. Ideally, for me, it would be a little more refined (in length) so that the full impact of your story is appreciated - less in always more in my opinion. But, yes, I look forward to reading more of the same genre. At one stage you put 'hoist' instead of 'host' but sadly I can't find it now. Debbie

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023

Hi Debbie, thnaks sooooo much for your helpul and kind thoughts. So glad you enjoyed it. Appreciate your helpful comment on refining things a bit and will work on that. And I couldn't help but chuckle at your phrase "impact" which is a pun of sorts when it comes to constipation:)))Take care, Dave

reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 31-Aug-2023

You're so right. I'd like to say it was intentional but I'm not that clever!

Comment from Douglas Goff

Excellent

Okay, so I never expected to see a story like that s on Fanstory. Very witty and humorous on multiple levels.


I could not stop laughing at this line:
"Ok one more...In breaking news, a toilet was stolen from the police station. They report they have nothing to go on. It is a crappy situation indeed."

You are funny.
D

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023

Hi D, thanks so much for your thoughts and so glad you enjoyed this piece. Helps me keep on writing for sure. Take care, Dave

Comment from RainbewLatte

Excellent

This was one hell of a write, and a hell of a read dare I say.
I can only imagine the research that probably went into this, the wondrous usage of words (humorous at that)
"crappy situation indeed"
I think through this reading ,I too, have gained a newfound respect for the human body.
Thanks for taking the time to share. I'll be looking forward to more of your writes.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023

Hi RainbewlLatte, thanks soooo much for your thoughts. They give me confidence and a sense of joy in that you enjoyed my read. Take care,

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

Very humorous and creative! This is an excellent story. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is clever and good. You use descriptive words that draw in a reader and the dialogue you express is relatable and funny too.

Best wishes!

Alexandra

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023

Hi Alexandra, thank you soooooo much for your thoughts. They really give me confidence as I am, like many, my own worst crtitic. Take care, Dave

reply by Alexandra Trovato on 31-Aug-2023

We all are Dave. Well those who will admit it anyway. You're welcome.