The Saga of Procrastination
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The complainer"Collection
9 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, an interesting conversation with God. I do recommend going over it again for additional editing. I highlighted a few things to look for.
notes:
["]Hi God, excuse me.
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and this week you are dragging me {in} this cold rain."
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When {is} smoky, you want rain!
-When it's smoky, you want rain!
When {is} cold, you want Sun!
-When it's cold, you want Sun!
It was sooooooo good for my flowers and {for} my skin.
-It was sooooooo good for my flowers and skin.
When is cold, who wants to eat?
-When it's cold, who wants to eat?
I am acquiring all the Sun {than} I can so I can go through the winter."
-I am acquiring all the Sun I can so I can go through the winter."
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Hmm, an interesting conversation with God. I do recommend going over it again for additional editing. I highlighted a few things to look for.
notes:
["]Hi God, excuse me.
-add
and this week you are dragging me {in} this cold rain."
-into
When {is} smoky, you want rain!
-When it's smoky, you want rain!
When {is} cold, you want Sun!
-When it's cold, you want Sun!
It was sooooooo good for my flowers and {for} my skin.
-It was sooooooo good for my flowers and skin.
When is cold, who wants to eat?
-When it's cold, who wants to eat?
I am acquiring all the Sun {than} I can so I can go through the winter."
-I am acquiring all the Sun I can so I can go through the winter."
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much for the corrections and the stars:)
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, I Came I Saw, gives an example of the domestic cat calling on God to facilitate some random want which concerns weather and ends being snubbed. Wonder what le Prince is?
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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This story, I Came I Saw, gives an example of the domestic cat calling on God to facilitate some random want which concerns weather and ends being snubbed. Wonder what le Prince is?
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Like a frog:) tired of fake onse:)
Comment from jmdg1954
Oh this is laugh out loud funny. I rarely see God in this humorous manner. The banter is spot on and you have God such a funny bone. Good for you!
Cheers and well done.
John
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Oh this is laugh out loud funny. I rarely see God in this humorous manner. The banter is spot on and you have God such a funny bone. Good for you!
Cheers and well done.
John
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review, I am so happy you like it:)
Comment from estory
Told with wit and humor as usual and I like how you gave this humorous twist to God's personality. He comes off as a bit frustrated with all our petty complaints. Of course the moral is that we tend to complain about all these little things and miss the big picture of what it is to be alive at all. Loved the ending. You end up content with the frog and seem to want to make your own magic. estory
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Told with wit and humor as usual and I like how you gave this humorous twist to God's personality. He comes off as a bit frustrated with all our petty complaints. Of course the moral is that we tend to complain about all these little things and miss the big picture of what it is to be alive at all. Loved the ending. You end up content with the frog and seem to want to make your own magic. estory
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much for taking the time to review my little rumbble.
Comment from patcelaw
I love this very much. It is absolutely laugh out loud funny. It seems man is never happy with things yesterday so it's gonna complain about something so I like the end where you said well I am happy with the cold. It helps me with my weight loss happy with rain helps me with my skin all the things. I'd rather have a model in my life to try to use my humor when things are not looking great quiet my way and this help my humor today which I needed some. Have a good day. God bless.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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I love this very much. It is absolutely laugh out loud funny. It seems man is never happy with things yesterday so it's gonna complain about something so I like the end where you said well I am happy with the cold. It helps me with my weight loss happy with rain helps me with my skin all the things. I'd rather have a model in my life to try to use my humor when things are not looking great quiet my way and this help my humor today which I needed some. Have a good day. God bless.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much Pat, what can I do I always complain about everything:)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is extremely creative, and I enjoyed reading. I smiled often as I read. Thank you for sharing it with us. You're a very talented author and we're lucky to ge the benefit from it.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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This is extremely creative, and I enjoyed reading. I smiled often as I read. Thank you for sharing it with us. You're a very talented author and we're lucky to ge the benefit from it.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much Barbara for this compliment, in fact you are the real writer here, your English is perfect and you already published so many books:) Thank you for taking a chance on my rant:)
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Your humour and imagination, Iza, are amazing! You're unstoppable:) You know just how to make your dialogue fun and thoroughly engaging from the start so this conversation with God ticks all the boxes for me. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Your humour and imagination, Iza, are amazing! You're unstoppable:) You know just how to make your dialogue fun and thoroughly engaging from the start so this conversation with God ticks all the boxes for me. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much Debbie for encouraging me:)
Comment from royowen
How funny is this, the summer takes care of anything to do with weight loss, the salads and the light meals take care of my weight, and the heat takes care of my appetite, beautifully written Iza, blessing Roy
Typo . When (is) cold. It's? 2: my (way) weight loss.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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How funny is this, the summer takes care of anything to do with weight loss, the salads and the light meals take care of my weight, and the heat takes care of my appetite, beautifully written Iza, blessing Roy
Typo . When (is) cold. It's? 2: my (way) weight loss.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much Mr. Owen:) have a wonderful day
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. You have the funniest conversations with God. I hope you don't have any more smoke there and that you will have some pleasant amount of sun. Some states here are way too hot. Yes, we can complain but we should be thankful, too.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Lol. You have the funniest conversations with God. I hope you don't have any more smoke there and that you will have some pleasant amount of sun. Some states here are way too hot. Yes, we can complain but we should be thankful, too.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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I just got lots of sun, and is too much because I crave to crawl into a lake, but I don't drive:(
