Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Strangers meeting like that, and meeting up every year after, is a really good story. I like the way the story unfolds giving us the details without telling us. Excellent. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023

Thank you so much, do you think that is politically incorrect?:)

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 11-Aug-2023

Not in the least. I think it's just a very funny sketch. Goodness me, humour is being knocked for the silliest of reasons, these days. I just though it was hilarious. xxx

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

This is a nice dialogue story and cute premise. I think you'd be better off if you remove the transgender word and gay references. Transgender people are not necessarily gay and it only opens you up to scrutiny . I honestly feel your story will stand out better if you remove that kind of thing altogether. Possibly saying it feels weird or people judge but I think you added some extra things that take a reader in a different direction. For instance, I'm still not sure if you in some way were suggestions you two ended up coming out of the closet. I am aware of things due to having taught children and teens and it wasn't even close to me. It's just my suggestion for you to rework that and leave the transgender or gay suggestions out. OR, make the entire story about two men in a relationship together. As it is, it's vague in all the wrong ways. I have masters degree in writing I am honestly giving you my best advice plus this way may offend people. Think about my advice it is meant sincerely to help. Best wishes!
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 Comment Written 09-Aug-2023

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Iza, this is another lovely dialogue piece which is such fun to read and in which you skilfully manage to create an atmosphere of sunshine and happiness in your Costa Rica home from home....even though it's like winter here in the UK. And these two guys are clearly all set to enjoy themselves. Wish I were there with them:( Great read. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest! Debbie

 Comment Written 08-Aug-2023

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

At the beginning, I thought Cheech and Chong were conversing. It sounded like their banter.

I didn't realize this was a dialogue only contest entry.

Very well done. The flow was spot on, believable and at points, comical. My kind of reading.

Best of luck in the contest.
John

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023

Thank you so much John, I am happy you like it:) guess I am sooooooooooo in the travel mood:) that everything I write lately evolves around water and sun. Wish to be thereeeeeeeeee

Comment from estory

Excellent

You always had this great knack of creating these humorous characters that are stereotypes and then exploding the stereotype with these witty conversations and tons of personality. Here we have no exception. Two guys hanging out, maybe gay, maybe not, parrying each other's witicisms. You could see the swordplay. But what we end up with is a portrait of friendship. People who enjoy the same things in life sharing those joys with each other. Why do they have to fit into a stereotype? This is the question you ask of us...estory

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023

Thank you so much

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this cute contest entry with us. I have a feeling many of us would love just to leave all our responsibilities behind and have fun for longer than just a vacation. LOL Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2023

Agreed on this one):

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a very well written story that you have presented us with today. I appreciate it very much. I appreciate especially the fact that you use punctuation very regularly and it is easier for me to follow when I have to listen to it being read to me because of my vision problems, I wish you the very best in all of your writing.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023

Hi, Pat thank you so much for these encouraging words and comments. I wish you all the best.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This was fun to read. It is true no matter how much to guys have in common and enjoy each others company. If they are seen together watching the sunset or eating at a nice restaurant, people always assume they are gay. It is some extent true with two women as well. It was funny when the guy was joking around about wearing a dress.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023

Hi Beth, you are so right. I don't think is right for those to take over our human relationship and twisted them against the holly book:)

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This story, La Bamba, is a funny dialogue that finds these friends enjoying a little time away from the rat race and absorbing some Costa Rican hospitality. Nice.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023

Thank you so much Bill, and Costa Rica is a really nice country:)

Comment from JSD

Excellent

A lovely piece of dialogue writing. Well done. You convey the colours of your home country very successfully and I wish you all the best in the competition.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023

Thank you so much:)