Guided by Faith
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I suspect the two of them going out to eat, even at a burger joint, is going to make Peggy behave even worse. She clearly thinks she is prettier, smarter, and more mature than Emma. Seth was surprisingly unpleasant to Emma, but then someone he had hopes for killed himself with drugs and he was upset. The councilman has the son he raised, a jerk who expects daddy to protect him.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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I suspect the two of them going out to eat, even at a burger joint, is going to make Peggy behave even worse. She clearly thinks she is prettier, smarter, and more mature than Emma. Seth was surprisingly unpleasant to Emma, but then someone he had hopes for killed himself with drugs and he was upset. The councilman has the son he raised, a jerk who expects daddy to protect him.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent interaction between Seth and Emma. Every couple has to have a few spats or they aren't human. In a small town, everyone sees everything so there is bound to be gossip no matter what they do, so might as well be seen together.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Excellent interaction between Seth and Emma. Every couple has to have a few spats or they aren't human. In a small town, everyone sees everything so there is bound to be gossip no matter what they do, so might as well be seen together.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Emma is a tough nut to crack sometimes, and I get frustrated with her for being so sensitive. Still, she's protecting herself from possible hurt or embarrassment (or harassment from Peggy), so I'll give her a pass:-)
A good chapter, Barbara. A few got by you . . .
He pointed to THE couch. "Can we sit?"
The sentence: Somehow he got the impression the only reason, I was involved . . . (you don't need the comma) Also: "After I assured the mayor, everything was above board . . . (I don't think you need the comma there either)
"It did." He took A drink of tea. (add the a)
Seth ran his fingers through HIS short hair. (remove this)
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Emma is a tough nut to crack sometimes, and I get frustrated with her for being so sensitive. Still, she's protecting herself from possible hurt or embarrassment (or harassment from Peggy), so I'll give her a pass:-)
A good chapter, Barbara. A few got by you . . .
He pointed to THE couch. "Can we sit?"
The sentence: Somehow he got the impression the only reason, I was involved . . . (you don't need the comma) Also: "After I assured the mayor, everything was above board . . . (I don't think you need the comma there either)
"It did." He took A drink of tea. (add the a)
Seth ran his fingers through HIS short hair. (remove this)
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for the catches. I have made the corrections. Those little words get me every time. More of Emma's background will come out next Sunday.
Comment from Jim Wile
Okay, now we're finally getting somewhere! Emma has accepted a date with Seth and will even ride on his motorcycle. Yes!
That was an interesting exchange when he made that crack about her wanting to feel his body. She surely didn't take it as the joke it was meant to be. It's hard to believe she's quite that prudish in this day and age, unless there's something else behind that reaction.
I kind of admired Seth for feeling comfortable enough with her for making a joke like that, but there must be more to it to have evoked such a reaction. At least she rethought it and is giving him another chance.
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"Outback did you wear a shirt?" (Should be out back.)
"It looked suspicious when I got off early the same day you did and accidently fell off the ladder just in time for you to catch me, especially when the kitty got itself down." Emma took another burr from Molly's fur and studied it. "I understand how it looked." (This paragraph confused me. It's written as if people saw this happen, but it doesn't seem as though anyone would have any way of knowing that they both took off early from work, no less saw this event that happened five minutes before.)
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Okay, now we're finally getting somewhere! Emma has accepted a date with Seth and will even ride on his motorcycle. Yes!
That was an interesting exchange when he made that crack about her wanting to feel his body. She surely didn't take it as the joke it was meant to be. It's hard to believe she's quite that prudish in this day and age, unless there's something else behind that reaction.
I kind of admired Seth for feeling comfortable enough with her for making a joke like that, but there must be more to it to have evoked such a reaction. At least she rethought it and is giving him another chance.
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"Outback did you wear a shirt?" (Should be out back.)
"It looked suspicious when I got off early the same day you did and accidently fell off the ladder just in time for you to catch me, especially when the kitty got itself down." Emma took another burr from Molly's fur and studied it. "I understand how it looked." (This paragraph confused me. It's written as if people saw this happen, but it doesn't seem as though anyone would have any way of knowing that they both took off early from work, no less saw this event that happened five minutes before.)
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Seth was serious. It was NOT a joke. More of Emma's background will come out next Sunday. I appreciate the help. Thank you for the kind review.
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Now THAT's interesting! I can't wait to hear that backstory.
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm sorry, Barbara, but I've got to tell you this about Emma. When you had her first insist that Seth remove his shirt to check his sunburn (which the reader in me really felt should have been healed by now), I thought that Seth's remark to her was completely appropriate ... but only if he intended it jokingly. That's the key you didn't indicate in your narrative. Then, when Emma OVER-reacted to Seth's remark, I thought, "Barbara, you are setting Emma up to be a hopeless (from this writer's opinion) prude." I know the female leads in your novels tend to by highly moral -- and that's fine. But when they cross that line you run the risk of causing a blow to the reader's believability. To me, now, I see Emma as fully lacking in a sense of humor. And if Seth didn't mean it as humor, then you've drawn him as one who is severly lacking in common sense.
Barbara, I may be completely wrong in my evaluation. It wouldn't be the first time, and won't, I'm sure, be my last. Your writing is powerful, your experience is evident with every succeeding book. That's all the more reason why I can't NOT tell you what I think when I see something that to me is amiss. If I offended you, please forgive me. It's the furthest from my mind. There was one other small thing to mention:
"You mean that orange cat that ran into the weeds that your fur ball's chasing?" [I realize that this is dialogue, and I don't usually mess with that because it represents the character, but I don't believe Seth would mean that Emma's "fur ball" was chasing the weeds, as his dialogue suggests.]
Hoping we're still friends ...
Jay
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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I'm sorry, Barbara, but I've got to tell you this about Emma. When you had her first insist that Seth remove his shirt to check his sunburn (which the reader in me really felt should have been healed by now), I thought that Seth's remark to her was completely appropriate ... but only if he intended it jokingly. That's the key you didn't indicate in your narrative. Then, when Emma OVER-reacted to Seth's remark, I thought, "Barbara, you are setting Emma up to be a hopeless (from this writer's opinion) prude." I know the female leads in your novels tend to by highly moral -- and that's fine. But when they cross that line you run the risk of causing a blow to the reader's believability. To me, now, I see Emma as fully lacking in a sense of humor. And if Seth didn't mean it as humor, then you've drawn him as one who is severly lacking in common sense.
Barbara, I may be completely wrong in my evaluation. It wouldn't be the first time, and won't, I'm sure, be my last. Your writing is powerful, your experience is evident with every succeeding book. That's all the more reason why I can't NOT tell you what I think when I see something that to me is amiss. If I offended you, please forgive me. It's the furthest from my mind. There was one other small thing to mention:
"You mean that orange cat that ran into the weeds that your fur ball's chasing?" [I realize that this is dialogue, and I don't usually mess with that because it represents the character, but I don't believe Seth would mean that Emma's "fur ball" was chasing the weeds, as his dialogue suggests.]
Hoping we're still friends ...
Jay
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Seth calls Molly a fur ball. Emma's innocence will come out next Sunday. Seth was not teasing. He had a moment of stupidity. We all do. Another reviewer got it. "This was a perfect chapter. They are being pushed and pulled from so many sides. I found that Emma had great control when he made the naked comment. I would have slapped him silly. But he is showing how human and under pressure he is. Great chapter."
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Seth and Emma are so close to kissing it drives me crazy. LoL
That stupid Peggy needs to be put in her place.
Well done, Barbara, another romantic chapter. I love it!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Seth and Emma are so close to kissing it drives me crazy. LoL
That stupid Peggy needs to be put in her place.
Well done, Barbara, another romantic chapter. I love it!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Peggy will be put in her place. I promise. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from damommy
I think Emma over-reacted to Seth's remark. He was joking. Maybe it hit a little closer than she wants to admit. Peggy Barton is going to cause more trouble if she sees them out together.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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I think Emma over-reacted to Seth's remark. He was joking. Maybe it hit a little closer than she wants to admit. Peggy Barton is going to cause more trouble if she sees them out together.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Seth wasn't joking. He was serious. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Barbara,
I like your story and all the tension between two people who've not yet committed? To a relationship.
Nice characters and dialogue.
Should there be a comma after 'outback,' for a direct address.
Good luck, Barbara.
Cindy
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Barbara,
I like your story and all the tension between two people who've not yet committed? To a relationship.
Nice characters and dialogue.
Should there be a comma after 'outback,' for a direct address.
Good luck, Barbara.
Cindy
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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I will check that out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Paul McFarland
The story is getting more interesting, Barb. Seth almost administered the kiss of death to this relationship. In your very first sentence, I would change "went" with "go".
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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The story is getting more interesting, Barb. Seth almost administered the kiss of death to this relationship. In your very first sentence, I would change "went" with "go".
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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I first had go then changed it. I will change it back. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a perfect chapter. They are being pushed and pulled from so many sides. I found that Emma had great control when he made the naked comment. I would have slapped him silly. But he is showing how human and under pressure he is. Great chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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This was a perfect chapter. They are being pushed and pulled from so many sides. I found that Emma had great control when he made the naked comment. I would have slapped him silly. But he is showing how human and under pressure he is. Great chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the understanding. That's was I was hoping people would see. I am glad it came across.
