Last Sleep
A homeless man that has found a home32 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Jacqueline,
This astonishing view of one man's struggle with homelessness really tugged at my heart. I can't imagine the myriad emotions he must feel, but I'm sure he feels hopelessness and despair, like you portray in your work.
Some people regard the homeless as people causing their own demise, but you debunk this in your poignant work.
Good luck with this one.
Cindy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Jacqueline,
This astonishing view of one man's struggle with homelessness really tugged at my heart. I can't imagine the myriad emotions he must feel, but I'm sure he feels hopelessness and despair, like you portray in your work.
Some people regard the homeless as people causing their own demise, but you debunk this in your poignant work.
Good luck with this one.
Cindy
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your wonderful review and the six stars. They are very much appreciated. Thank you for taking time to read and comment on my poem.
Comment from Sanku
It is a sad story .people coming down from US tells us that the number of homeless people have increased in recent years..I don't know who is responsible ,but this is a serious problem.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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It is a sad story .people coming down from US tells us that the number of homeless people have increased in recent years..I don't know who is responsible ,but this is a serious problem.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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I agree with you. It is a serious problem. Thank you for your review and taking time to read my poem. Thank you flor the stars. They are appreciated.
Comment from Ben Colder
Much of this happens and it should never be. I spoke to someone the other day who claimed to be a vet. He let me know in so many words that he was a panhandler. Knowing the VA has programs for such, it makes me wonder about these people. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Much of this happens and it should never be. I spoke to someone the other day who claimed to be a vet. He let me know in so many words that he was a panhandler. Knowing the VA has programs for such, it makes me wonder about these people. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your review, and for the stars rating. Thank you for taking the time to read my poem.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Thanks for writing this and bringing awareness to the plight of the homeless. We seldom let our thoughts take us to where they will spend the night, much less why they are so alone in the world. We have failed them in some way, for sure.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Thanks for writing this and bringing awareness to the plight of the homeless. We seldom let our thoughts take us to where they will spend the night, much less why they are so alone in the world. We have failed them in some way, for sure.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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You are welcome. I love to write, and espcially about unfortunate situations that peoply may become a part of. Thank you for your review, and the stars. Also, thank you for taking time to read my poem.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The story as I read it is heartfelt and warm to the needs of others but I believe, for what that is worth, would be better posted in paragraphical form than poetically. Still, you met the requirements.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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The story as I read it is heartfelt and warm to the needs of others but I believe, for what that is worth, would be better posted in paragraphical form than poetically. Still, you met the requirements.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Thank you for kind review, and for your encouraging and positive feedback about the paragraphical form. I will take it into consideration when I write another poem like this. Thank you for taking time to read my poem, and for the stars. They are appreciated.
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As an example, I dropped one last night, entitled "I Imagine" which depicts how I did mine, even though it still shouts out - poem
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting and moving poem. How often do those with no home or hope go to sleep and not wake up? At least he died in a warm bed and didn't lie somewhere undiscovered.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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This is an interesting and moving poem. How often do those with no home or hope go to sleep and not wake up? At least he died in a warm bed and didn't lie somewhere undiscovered.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your review, for the comments and encouraging review that you gave. Thank you for taking time to read my poem, and for the stars. They are appreciated.
Comment from Boogienights
This is,a very sad but true account of what often happens to the homeless. I can see through your poem, thst you have a lot of empathy for them, as do I. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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This is,a very sad but true account of what often happens to the homeless. I can see through your poem, thst you have a lot of empathy for them, as do I. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2023
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Yes it is very sad, and also very true, unfortunately. I do have empathy for them. Thank you for your wonderful, and kind review. Thank you for the stars. They are appreciated. It was my pleasure to write, and also share.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
You made this so "personal" from the first line that I was one hundred percent entrenched. It's so easy to distance ourselves from the homeless we see, but you made it impossible, with this brilliant entry, to do that. I'm very impressed. This is a memorable piece. Good luck in the contest.
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You made this so "personal" from the first line that I was one hundred percent entrenched. It's so easy to distance ourselves from the homeless we see, but you made it impossible, with this brilliant entry, to do that. I'm very impressed. This is a memorable piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is an authentic and sad rendition of being homeless. Not knowing where you'll sleep or where your next meal is coming from, I'd have to guess the worst part would be the loneliness. Best, JohnC
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This is an authentic and sad rendition of being homeless. Not knowing where you'll sleep or where your next meal is coming from, I'd have to guess the worst part would be the loneliness. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
Comment from lancellot
This is very interesting. I can't say it is unique. Most poems or stories about the homeless portray them in this sympathetic way. I guess that's easiest or natural.
I would recommend looking closer at the inconsistency of punctuation usage.
Good luck in the contest.
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This is very interesting. I can't say it is unique. Most poems or stories about the homeless portray them in this sympathetic way. I guess that's easiest or natural.
I would recommend looking closer at the inconsistency of punctuation usage.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
